Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use clearer grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No/It depends), then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid filler sounds (umm) and repetition.

예시: It depends. I'm good at remembering personal things like birthdays because I associate them with events, but I'm less good at memorising technical vocabulary for exams, so I need to study them more often.

제안: Give a clear, chronological description with correct verbs and specific details. Begin with a direct answer (Yes), then briefly explain what happened, why, and the result. Avoid unclear words like 'burst'.

예시: Yes. Once I forgot my friend's birthday because I was studying for an important test and was very distracted, so I didn't realise the date until a few days later and I apologised and took them out for coffee.

제안: Answer directly and use specific, accurate vocabulary. Use linking words to connect items (for example, 'also' or 'in addition'). Correct small errors (e.g., name of exam, cat pronoun). Provide short reasons or methods for each item.

예시: I need to remember new vocabulary for my English exams, because regular revision helps me improve. I also need to feed my cats on time every day, since they rely on me for food and a routine keeps them healthy.

제안: Structure the answer: state your main method first, then give specific steps and linking words. Use correct verb forms (I write, I make, I review) and avoid contradictions. Be precise about tools and timing.

예시: I usually write important tasks in a notes app or a to-do list, and set reminders on my phone. In addition, I review the list the night before so I don't forget important deadlines the next day.

× Umm personally I think it's depends.

✓ Umm personally I think it depends.

Use simple present 'depends' without 'is'. The verb 'depend' already carries the present tense; adding 'is' creates an ungrammatical construction. Suggestion: say 'I think it depends'.

× When I'm memorizing some birthdays I think it's is umm I'm good as memory memorize us birthday,

✓ When I'm memorizing some birthdays I think I'm good at remembering birthdays,

Multiple issues: 'it's is' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'good as memory' is incorrect; 'memorize us birthday' is unclear. Use 'I'm good at remembering birthdays' where 'good at' requires a gerund. Suggestion: 'I'm good at remembering birthdays.'

× but when memorized at some like important vocabularies or some information I think it's I'm not good at.

✓ but when it comes to memorizing important vocabulary or information I think I'm not good at it.

Use 'when it comes to' and the gerund 'memorizing' for ongoing action; 'memorized' (past) is incorrect here. Also use uncountable 'vocabulary' not 'vocabularies', and include 'it' at end. Suggestion: 'when it comes to memorizing important vocabulary or information, I'm not good at it.'

× Yes, I remember one time when I when it's my birthday, my friend's birthday and I accidentally forgot it because that time I was busy preparing for my test so I forgot the burst.

✓ Yes, I remember one time when it was my friend's birthday and I accidentally forgot it because I was busy preparing for my test, so I forgot the birthday.

Use past tense 'it was' for a past event; remove duplicated 'when I'; 'the burst' is incorrect—replace with 'the birthday'. Keep past continuous 'was busy preparing'. Suggestion: 'It was my friend's birthday and I accidentally forgot it because I was busy preparing for my test.'

× In my daily life, I need to remember a lot of vocabulary because now I'm trying to memorize a lot for Cavaliers.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember a lot of vocabulary because now I'm trying to memorize many words for my studies.

'a lot' is acceptable but 'for Cavaliers' is unclear—probably intended 'for my classes' or 'for exams'. 'Cavaliers' is likely wrong; replace with 'my studies' or specific purpose. Also use 'many words' or 'a lot of vocabulary'. Suggestion: specify purpose clearly, e.g. 'for my classes'.

× And I also need to remember to feed my cats on time so he can eat.

✓ And I also need to remember to feed my cats on time so they can eat.

Pronoun 'he' doesn't agree with plural 'cats'. Use 'they' for plural antecedent. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun: 'cats' -> 'they'.

× To remember important things I would do some I would write some uh, important things in the notes code to the list and therefore I wanna forgot the things and also I would try to re memorize the thing I need to do the day before the night.

✓ To remember important things, I would write them in my notes or to-do list so I don't forget them, and I would try to review what I need to do the night before.

This sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors: 'do some I would' is redundant; 'notes code to the list' is unclear; 'wanna forgot' is ungrammatical slang and wrong tense; 're memorize' should be 'review' or 're-memorize'; 'the day before the night' is reversed—use 'the night before'. Suggestions: simplify into clear coordinated clauses, use 'write them in my notes or to-do list', 'so I don't forget', and 'review the night before'.