Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で簡潔ですが、文法ミスと不自然な表現が目立ちます。まず、過去や現在の時制の一貫性を保ち、不要な断片（"when my mother told me about."）を削除または完成させてください。また、具体例をもう少し整えてつなぎの語（for example, so, therefore, becauseなど）を正しく使い、文を2〜3文に収めると自然です。発音・語順にも注意してください。

예시: Yes, I am. I have a good memory. For example, when my mother gives me a shopping list, I can remember all the items and buy everything she asks for.

제안: 内容は伝わりますが、構文が不自然で文が途中で切れています。まず一文で主旨（yes, I have）をはっきり述べ、次に具体的な出来事を過去形で完結させてください。接続詞（but, however）や時制の一致に気を付け、詳細（なぜ忘れたか、結果）を1つ加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I have. I rarely forget important things, but when I was at university I once forgot to hand in a paper because I misunderstood the deadline. As a result, I lost marks and learned to check deadlines carefully.

제안: 回答が混乱しており、意味が取りにくい箇所があります。まず直接的なトピックセンテンス（"I need to remember..."）で始め、日常的な具体例（appointments, keys, vocabularyなど）を列挙し、その中で特に重要なものを1つ選んで理由を添えてください。接続語（for example, because）を使って論理を明確に。

예시: I need to remember everyday things like appointments, my keys, and study tasks. For example, I especially try to remember new English vocabulary because I want to get a high score on the IELTS exam.

제안: 良い答えです。簡潔で具体的な方法が示され、理由も述べられています。ただし、さらに自然にするために接続表現を少し整え、別の方法（alarms, calendars）を付け加えると幅が出ます。語彙も少し増やすとより高得点です。

예시: When I need to remember something important, I usually make a note on my phone and set an alarm. This works well because I always carry my phone, and the alarm reminds me at the right time.

× For example, when my mother told me about.

✓ For example, when my mother told me about something.

The sentence is incomplete; it needs a direct object after 'about'. Add a noun or pronoun (e.g. 'something') to complete the clause.

× So things what she want, I could buy everything.

✓ So the things that she wanted, I could buy everything.

Use 'that' (or 'which') for the relative clause and match verb tense with the past context: 'want' should be 'wanted'. Also include the article 'the' before 'things' for specificity.

× There yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

'There yes, I have' is ungrammatical. Simply use 'Yes, I have' to answer the question. Remove the extraneous 'There'.

× I rarely forget something important, but when I was in university I forgot to hand doing the paper and I.

✓ I rarely forget anything important, but when I was at university I forgot to hand in a paper once.

Use 'anything' with negative contexts rather than 'something'. 'At university' is the correct preposition. The verb phrase should be 'forgot to hand in' (phrasal verb) not 'forgot to hand doing'. Remove the trailing 'and I' and add 'once' if you mean it happened once.

× To be honest I am.

✓ To be honest, I am not sure.

'To be honest I am' is incomplete; the speaker likely intended 'I'm not sure' or similar. Add the rest of the clause to convey the meaning and include a comma after the introductory phrase.

× I don't come up with idea, but now I have to remember some English vocabulary to get high score of IELTS.

✓ I don't usually come up with ideas, but now I have to remember some English vocabulary to get a high score on the IELTS.

Use 'come up with ideas' (plural) and add 'usually' if indicating habit. Include 'a' with 'high score' and use the preposition 'on' with 'the IELTS'.

× When I have to remember important things, I usually take a memo on my phone.

✓ When I have to remember important things, I usually make a note on my phone.

Native speakers say 'make a note' or 'take a note' rather than 'take a memo'. 'Make a note' is more natural here; tense is fine.

× It helps me memorize it because I always bring my phone with me.

✓ It helps me remember them because I always bring my phone with me.

'Memorize it' is awkward when referring to 'important things' (plural); use 'remember them'. 'Memorize' is also more formal; 'remember' is more natural here.