Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words (uh, umm). Use more natural phrasing for relationships and time (e.g., “long‑distance friends”).

예시: Yes, I have a good memory. For example, I can clearly recall many childhood events and the names of friends I used to play games with. Moreover, I still keep in touch with some long‑distance friends, so remembering their names and stories is important to me.

제안: Answer directly with a clear yes/no and then give a concrete example or explanation. Avoid vague self-descriptions and unclear phrases. Use linking words (however, because) to show reason if you claim you rarely forget things.

예시: I rarely forget important things because I’m careful and organised. For instance, I have never missed an exam deadline or an important appointment, because I plan ahead and set reminders on my phone.

제안: Clarify what daily details you actually must remember and provide specific examples (appointments, tasks, shopping items). Avoid confusing or irrelevant words (e.g., “protein”). Keep sentences short and coherent and use linking words such as “for example” or “because.”

예시: In my daily life I need to remember appointments and tasks. For example, I remember work meetings, grocery items I need to buy, and deadlines for assignments, so I write them down in a planner to avoid forgetting.

제안: Give a clear method and a brief specific example. Use linking words (for example, then) to show sequence. Reduce hesitation and redundant phrases; avoid repeating the same idea. Mention concrete tools (notes, phone reminders, calendars).

예시: I usually write important things down and set phone reminders. For example, if I have an exam or appointment, I put it in my calendar and add an alert so I don’t forget.

× Yes, I think I have a good memory, uh, because I remember my childhood, uh, day-to-day activities, uh, of my friends and umm, playing games, uh, at childhood.

✓ Yes, I think I have a good memory because I remember my childhood day-to-day activities with my friends and the games we played.

Original sentence shows awkward word order and unnecessary fillers; the tense is present simple 'remember' which is acceptable, but phrasing 'at childhood' is incorrect preposition and noun use. Consolidate into a clear present-tense statement: 'remember my childhood day-to-day activities with my friends and the games we played.' Replace 'at childhood' with 'my childhood' and change 'playing games' to 'the games we played' for correct tense and clarity.

× And I still remember some times, uh, some friends were been uh, long distance friendship.

✓ And I still remember that some friends had long-distance friendships.

The sentence misuses 'some times' and 'were been' and the noun phrase 'long distance friendship'. The correct past reference requires past tense 'had' (past tense issue but listed here as article/structure); also use the noun phrase 'long-distance friendships' with hyphenation implied and plural form. Use 'that' to introduce the clause: 'I still remember that some friends had long-distance friendships.'

× I still remember their name.

✓ I still remember their names.

Subject refers to 'some friends' (plural), so the noun should be plural 'names' (singular/plural issue). Keep present tense 'remember' which is appropriate.

× As of, as of, uh, I'm conscious person.

✓ Well, I'm a conscious person.

Missing article 'a' before 'conscious person' (article error) and unnecessary repetition. Use 'Well' as a discourse marker and include 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatical.

× Uh, I don't think I forgot any important things.

✓ I don't think I forget any important things.

Mixes present 'don't think' with past 'forgot'. To mean generally not forgetting important things, use present simple 'forget'. If speaker meant past specific events, 'I don't think I have forgotten any important things' (present perfect) would be better.

× So I was, I'm always like a, a curiosity person and I don't offer it anything.

✓ So I'm always a curious person and I don't forget anything.

Incorrect adjective 'curiosity' should be adjective 'curious'. 'I was, I'm' is inconsistent; keep present 'I'm'. 'I don't offer it anything' is meaningless here; context suggests 'forget', so replace with 'I don't forget anything.'

× I don't need to remember in my daily life protein, like I, uh, I know everything what I do and daily activity.

✓ I don't need to remember things in my daily life because I know everything I do and my daily activities.

Original misplaces 'protein' which seems wrong word choice; likely meant 'things'. Preposition placement 'remember in my daily life' should be 'remember things in my daily life'. Also replace 'what I do and daily activity' with 'I do and my daily activities' for grammaticality.

× I just, uh, do in my own way.

✓ I just do things my own way.

Missing object 'things' and awkward preposition 'in'. Use 'do things my own way' for clear sentence structure.

× Uh, I don't for I don't forget anything.

✓ I don't forget anything.

Redundant and ungrammatical fragment 'I don't for' should be removed; simple present negative 'I don't forget anything' is correct.

× So, uh, I don't want, uh, to need remember anything.

✓ So I don't need to remember anything.

Incorrect verb construction 'want to need remember' is ungrammatical. Use 'I don't need to remember anything' in present tense.

× As like, uh, remember important things, uh, umm, so I, I just note it and save the safe in my mind, uh, to do something like that.

✓ To remember important things, I just write them down and store them in my mind.

Use infinitive 'To remember' to express purpose. 'Note it' is okay but better as 'write them down' for clarity and correct plural reference. 'Save the safe in my mind' is incorrect; use 'store them in my mind'.

× And I usually do something important. I usually, uh, to take notes and it tells me.

✓ I usually do important things by taking notes, and the notes remind me.

Original has 'to take notes' incorrectly placed and 'it tells me' is vague. Use gerund 'taking notes' after 'by' to indicate method and 'the notes remind me' as a natural result clause.