Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and sentence fragments.

예시: Yes, I’m fairly good at memorising things. For example, I can easily remember important dates and specific events because I often rehearse them in my head; this helps me recall them when I need them.

제안: Organise the story with a clear past-tense narrative and use linking words for sequence (first, then, afterwards). Correct verb forms and reduce repetition of emotions by showing rather than repeating. Keep it to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I once left my mobile phone on a bus when I was travelling to my cousin’s house. First I realised it after I got off and felt very anxious, so I contacted the bus company and reported it. Fortunately, someone found it and returned it the next day, which was a huge relief.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about daily priorities and then add specific examples of tasks and a reason why remembering them matters. Use linking words like "for example" or "also" and avoid vague phrases like "all the past works."

예시: I need to remember my daily tasks and any pending work so I can stay organised. For example, I note down my appointments, study goals and chores each morning, and I also review previous tasks to see what I can improve.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence describing your main memory strategies, then give one or two specific methods with brief reasons. Use correct verb forms and linking words for clarity.

예시: I use several strategies to remember important things. For instance, I repeat information to myself, keep notes and reminders on my phone, and ask my parents to remind me of key dates when necessary.

× Yes I'm pretty good to memorizing things like dates or the incidents I memorized very clear clearly and it also get benefit to me to use in future.

✓ Yes, I'm pretty good at memorizing things, like dates or incidents; I remember them very clearly, and it also benefits me in the future.

The original sentence has several issues: 'good to memorizing' uses incorrect preposition + gerund combination — correct phrase is 'good at memorizing' (preposition use; see problem type 11 and 8). 'Very clear clearly' is redundant and wrong form; use 'very clearly' as an adverb modifying 'remember'. 'It also get benefit to me to use in future' has verb form and article errors: 'get' should be 'benefits' (subject-verb agreement and noun form), 'in the future' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: use 'good at' + gerund, use 'remember' with adverb 'clearly', and 'benefits me in the future.'

× Yes, definitely once I forgot my mobile phone in the bus when I commute from my seat hometown to my cousin's brother.

✓ Yes, definitely once I forgot my mobile phone on the bus when I was commuting from my hometown to my cousin's place.

Errors: 'in the bus' should be 'on the bus' (preposition; problem type 11). 'Commute' is present tense and not correct form; the past continuous 'was commuting' fits the narrative (past tense issue). 'My seat hometown' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'my hometown'. 'To my cousin's brother' is unclear and likely wrong noun; use 'to my cousin's place' or 'to my cousin's house.' Suggestion: use past continuous for actions in progress in the past and correct prepositions and noun phrases.

× So then I am forgot my mobile phone and I'm very scared that time and after that I was very fear.

✓ So then I forgot my mobile phone and I was very scared at that time; after that I felt very afraid.

Problems: 'I am forgot' mixes present auxiliary with past participle incorrectly; use simple past 'I forgot' (past tense issue). 'I'm very scared that time' should be past 'I was very scared at that time' (tense consistency). 'I was very fear' uses incorrect adjective; 'fear' is a noun, use the adjective 'afraid' or 'frightened.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent in past narration and use correct adjective forms.

× Well, in daily life I want to remember the things that I want to do on that day and also recap my all the past works that I want to improve myself and also do my pending work.

✓ Well, in daily life I try to remember the things I need to do that day, and I also review my past tasks to improve myself and complete my pending work.

Issues: 'I want to remember' is acceptable but 'I try to remember' fits habitual present better (present tense issue). 'the things that I want to do on that day' is wordy and awkward; 'things I need to do that day' is clearer. 'recap my all the past works' has incorrect word order and word choice; use 'review my past tasks' (article and noun choices; problem types 22 and 11). 'do my pending work' better as 'complete my pending work.' Suggestion: use clear present simple for routines and prefer 'review'/'complete' for tasks.

× Well, mostly I remember the important things by memorising again and again in my mind and also write up on my phone notes and I also tells my parents to remind me of important things and important dates.

✓ Well, mostly I remember important things by memorizing them again and again in my mind, writing them in my phone notes, and asking my parents to remind me of important things and dates.

Errors: 'by memorising again and again in my mind and also write up on my phone notes' mixes structures; after 'by' use gerund forms ('memorizing' and 'writing') (verb + -ing form). 'Write up on my phone notes' is awkward; use 'writing them in my phone notes.' 'I also tells' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'I also ask' (third person singular issue). Finally, avoid repeating 'important' unnecessarily. Suggestion: keep parallel gerund structures after 'by' and ensure subject-verb agreement; use concise wording.