Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your current ability, then give one brief supporting detail and a reason using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘As a child’, verb forms) and avoid redundancy. Aim for 2–3 sentences, use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., ‘good at memorising’, ‘rely more on understanding’).

예시: As a child I was good at memorising facts for school, but now I rely more on understanding things. For example, instead of memorising dates, I try to grasp the underlying concepts so I can apply them later.

제안: Answer more directly with a clear topic sentence about a specific instance you forgot something important. Use one or two concrete examples and link them logically (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘because’). Fix grammar and phrasing: avoid vague statements and repetition. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, because I was stressed and distracted last week, I forgot to submit an assignment on time. I also sometimes forget to turn off the tap at home, especially when I'm in a rush.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence listing the main things you need to remember, then give one specific example with a linking word to clarify. Avoid vague phrasing and repetitions; use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘schedule’, ‘appointments’, ‘deadlines’, ‘personal items’). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I need to remember my daily schedule, important appointments and deadlines, and where I put my personal items. For instance, I always note down meeting times on my phone so I don't miss them.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence about your main strategies, then mention one or two specific methods with linking words. Improve grammar and naturalness (e.g., ‘I mentally rehearse’ rather than ‘think of these things in my head 24/7’). Include an example of a tool or habit and explain briefly why it helps.

예시: I use two main strategies to remember important tasks: mental rehearsal and phone reminders. For example, I repeat a task in my mind during the day and also set calendar alerts on my phone so I get notified at the right time.

× In the child in school I always memorized all the subjects and I think I'm quite good in it.

✓ When I was a child in school, I always memorized all the subjects and I think I was quite good at it.

Error: incorrect noun phrase 'In the child in school' and preposition 'good in'. The phrase should be 'When I was a child in school' to indicate past time. 'Good at' is the correct collocation for ability. Also maintain past tense 'was' to match 'memorized'. Suggestion: use correct time clause and collocation: 'When I was a child in school... good at it.'

× But as I grew up, I think I'm more now into thinking by myself.

✓ But as I grew up, I think I am now more into thinking for myself.

Error: awkward adverb order and preposition 'by myself' vs 'for myself'. Use 'I am now more into thinking for myself' to show current preference; keep 'grew up' past reference then shift to present 'I am now'. Suggestion: place 'now' before 'more' and use 'for myself.'

× In today's world that everything is changing, everyone is stressed and I tend to forget many of the important things which are essential to do.

✓ In today's world, where everything is changing and everyone is stressed, I tend to forget many important things that are essential to do.

Errors: wrong relative clause 'that everything is changing' should be 'where everything is changing' to refer to 'world'; extra article 'the important things' can be 'many important things'; 'which' better as 'that' in restrictive clauses. Suggestion: use 'where' after 'world' and streamline noun phrases.

× Like sometimes I forget to write my own work.

✓ For example, sometimes I forget to write down my own work.

Error: missing phrasal verb 'write down' to mean record; 'Like' is informal filler. Suggestion: use 'For example' and the correct verb phrase 'write down' to express forgetting to record tasks.

× Also sometimes like to turn off the tap water.

✓ Also, sometimes I forget to turn off the tap.

Errors: sentence missing subject and verb; 'like to turn off' is incorrect context. The student means they sometimes forget to turn off the tap. Suggestion: include subject 'I' and verb 'forget' and use 'turn off the tap.'

× Most of the things which I do daily, my schedule, my works, my things, where I have kept them and where I have to go, what to what I have to say something and what things I have to do.

✓ Most of the things I do daily: my schedule, my work, my belongings, where I have kept them, where I have to go, what I have to say, and what tasks I have to do.

Errors: pluralization and word choice: 'my works' should be 'my work' or 'my tasks'; 'my things' replaced by 'my belongings'; awkward phrase 'what to what I have to say something' is ungrammatical—should be 'what I have to say'. Suggestion: list items clearly and use correct countable/uncountable nouns.

× I usually think of these things in my head 24/7 so I do not forget them at the moment that I want to do them.

✓ I usually think about these things in my head all the time, so I do not forget them when I need to do them.

Errors: 'think of' vs 'think about' both possible but 'think about' more natural here; '24/7' is informal—use 'all the time'; 'at the moment that I want to do them' is wordy—use 'when I need to do them.' Suggestion: adjust adverbial phrases for natural placement and clarity.

× And sometime I also put something in my mobile phone which I have to do later so I can see it whenever I open it.

✓ And sometimes I also put reminders in my mobile phone for things I have to do later, so I can see them whenever I open it.

Errors: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (frequency adverb); 'put something in my mobile phone' unclear—use 'put reminders'; 'which I have to do later' better as 'for things I have to do later'; pronoun agreement 'it' refers to phone but 'see them' refers to reminders. Suggestion: use plural 'reminders' and correct adverbs and pronouns for clarity.