Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are good at memorising, then give one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid fillers and repeated words. Also correct small grammatical issues (e.g. 'kinda' → 'kind of', 'I knew' → 'I realized').

예시: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising. For example, I realised in middle school that I could remember facts easily because I consistently scored 80–90% in my geography quizzes. This helped me feel confident about learning other subjects as well.

제안: Answer directly and give a concise specific example. Avoid universal generalisations and reduce hesitations. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'people' instead of 'every human', 'forget' instead of 'forgot') and link your sentences (e.g. 'For example' or 'Recently').

예시: Yes, I have. For example, I sometimes forget my keys or my phone when I leave the house. This is inconvenient, so now I always put them on a small tray by the door to avoid forgetting them.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence about key daily things you must remember (e.g. appointments, keys, work tasks) and one or two specific supporting details. Keep sentences short and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' for coherence.

예시: I need to remember a few important things every day, such as my work tasks and my phone and keys. For example, I keep a simple to‑do list on my phone so I don't miss appointments, and I put my keys in the same place each evening.

제안: Explain a reliable method you use to remember important things, with clear sequencing and linking words (e.g. 'first', 'then'). Avoid describing accidental memory and reduce hesitations. Mention practical strategies (notes, alarms, routines) to show proactive behaviour.

예시: I usually use practical methods to remember important things: first, I set alarms or reminders on my phone for appointments, and second, I keep essential items like my keys and phone in a fixed place near the door. This way I rarely leave home without them.

× I think I knew that I'm good at memorizing maybe in the second grade of the middle school because, uh, I used to, to have, uh, 80% or maybe 90% in the, in the quiz and exams of, uh, of geography.

✓ I think I realized that I was good at memorizing in the second year of middle school because I used to get 80% or maybe 90% in geography quizzes and exams.

Error type 9: The student used 'knew' and a present continuous 'I'm' incorrectly for a past realization; 'realized' (past simple) fits better. Also 'second grade of the middle school' is awkward; use 'second year of middle school'. 'Used to have 80%' is incorrect collocation; say 'used to get 80%'. Simplify and correct verb tenses to past to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for past realizations and common collocations like 'get a score'.

× Of course, who doesn't? I think every, every human in the world, uh, no matter how he, he is memorizable, he will forgot anything important.

✓ Of course, who doesn't? I think every person in the world, no matter how good their memory is, will forget important things.

Error type 5: 'will forgot' mixes future auxiliary with past form; correct is 'will forget' (base form). 'Every, every human' is repetitive; use 'every person'. 'He is memorizable' is incorrect phrasing; use 'how good their memory is'. Also 'anything important' should be 'important things' for natural English. Suggestion: use 'will' + base verb for future and choose natural noun phrases.

× Sometimes, uh, such, uh, such as, uh, like me, for example, some, uh, sometimes I forgot my keys, I forgot my phones, which is those two elements are very important.

✓ Sometimes, for example, I forget my keys or my phone, and these two items are very important.

Error type 12: Pronoun and noun forms are incorrect and inconsistent: 'I forgot' should be present habitual 'I forget' if speaking generally; 'phones' (plural) is odd if referring to one phone. 'Which is those two elements are very important' is ungrammatical; use 'and these two items are very important'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for habitual actions and correct singular/plural nouns and pronouns.

× Interesting question indeed. Because I don't have a specific daily routine. Because if I have to, then I won't have to to remember or or save the the daily routine. Because sometimes I need to focus that I'm not that I'm not.

✓ That's an interesting question. I don't have a specific daily routine. If I did, I wouldn't need to remember or save the routine. Sometimes I need to focus, and I'm not always able to.

Error type 26: Sentence fragments and repetitive 'Because' lead to unclear structure. Tense and modal use were confusing: 'If I have to, then I won't have to to remember' is contradictory and contains a doubled 'to'. Clarify conditional: 'If I did' (hypothetical) with 'wouldn't need'. The last sentence was incomplete; clarify with 'I'm not always able to' or similar. Suggestion: avoid starting multiple sentences with 'Because'; combine into clearer conditional and complete clauses.

× I think I remember things after I forgot them and after I I go out from home.

✓ I think I remember things after I forget them and after I leave home.

Error type 6: Tense inconsistency: mixing past 'forgot' with present 'I think' leads to awkward meaning. For habitual behavior, use present simple: 'forget' and 'leave'. Also 'go out from home' is unnatural; use 'leave home'. Suggestion: use present simple for repeated actions and natural verb phrases.

× For example, when I forgot my phone, I go out from home and I take the bus and after I take the bus I remember with some coincidence maybe I saw another one using his phone so I remember.

✓ For example, when I forget my phone, I leave home and take the bus. After I get on the bus, I might remember when I happen to see someone else using their phone.

Error type 11: Prepositions and phrasing are incorrect: 'go out from home' should be 'leave home'; 'after I take the bus' better 'after I get on the bus'; 'remember with some coincidence' is unnatural—use 'might remember when I happen to see'. Also 'another one using his phone' is awkward and gender-specific; use 'someone else using their phone'. Suggestion: use idiomatic prepositions ('leave home', 'get on the bus') and natural connectors like 'when' or 'when I happen to'.