Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “My favourite machine at home is my car.”), avoid unnecessary phrases, and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Add one specific detail about why you like it using a linking word (because/so) and avoid grammatical errors (use correct article and tense).

예시: My favourite machine at home is my car. It’s a white 2007 Peugeot, and I like it because it’s reliable and comfortable for long trips.

제안: Give a clear opinion and explain it with simple, accurate reasons. Use linking words (because/so) and precise vocabulary (stains, fade, dirty) instead of unclear phrases. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

예시: Absolutely, they are very important because they help keep clothes and floors clean. For example, without washing machines clothes can become stained or discoloured, and sweeping machines make cleaning faster and easier.

제안: Avoid unclear comparisons and incorrect vocabulary. Give a direct answer and a clear reason with one specific consequence of not reading instructions. Use correct verb forms and simpler expressions.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions because using a machine incorrectly can damage it. For instance, if you don’t follow the manual you might break parts or void the warranty.

제안: Respond directly and use correct grammar. Use linking words (therefore/so) and give a specific reason or example about cost and safety. Replace vague phrases like “financial things” with concrete words (repair costs, replacement).

예시: Yes, it’s important to read instructions because it prevents damage and reduces repair costs. Therefore, by following the manual you can save money and ensure the machine is safe to use.

× To consider this fact that this kind of vehicle we named car is a kind of machine too.

✓ Considering the fact that this kind of vehicle, which we call a car, is also a kind of machine.

The original sentence has awkward word order and incorrect phrase choices ('To consider this fact that' and 'we named car'). This is a sentence structure problem: rearrange the clause to 'Considering the fact that' or use a relative clause 'which we call a car' and place modifiers next to the nouns they describe. Suggestion: use 'Considering the fact that' or 'Since' and a relative clause for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So my favorite machine is my own car, a 2007 Peugeot, and it's white.

✓ So my favorite machine is my own car, a 2007 Peugeot, and it is white.

Using the contraction 'it's' is acceptable conversationally, but in formal correction keep 'it is' to match tone. No plural issue here; primary concern is style. However original sentence is grammatically acceptable; this correction is stylistic. Suggestion: use 'it is' in formal responses. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Absolutely. If we didn't care about machines the color returned from, for example white to yellow and it looked so ugly and uncomfortable in house.

✓ Absolutely. If we did not take care of machines, their color could change from white to yellow, and they would look ugly and make the house feel uncomfortable.

Multiple problems: awkward phrasing 'care about machines the color returned', incorrect tense/modal choice, missing articles and plural agreement. This is primarily sentence structure: reorder phrase, use 'take care of' for maintenance, plural 'their' to match 'machines', and correct modal 'could change' and conditional structure 'If we did not... they would...'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb pairs and consistent plurality. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes I do because if I didn't I would not use the proper way that old people use it.

✓ Yes, I do, because if I did not, I would not use it in the proper way that older people do.

Problems include tense consistency and word order. 'If I didn't' should match present habit meaning 'if I did not', and 'old people' is better phrased as 'older people'. Also pronoun placement: 'use it in the proper way' is correct. This falls under third person singular/tenses and sentence structure. Suggestion: keep conditional forms consistent and place pronouns after the verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID:2

× So it makes it worse and the car probably the machine probably turn to knockout.

✓ So it makes things worse, and the car or machine would probably break down.

Original has repetition 'probably the machine probably' and incorrect idiom 'turn to knockout'. This is sentence structure and word choice: use 'break down' for mechanical failure and 'things' rather than repeating 'it'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use common phrasal verbs for machines failing. Grammar problem type ID:26

× As I said before, absolutely if you didn't respect the instruction, your machine would broken turn off.

✓ As I said before, absolutely; if you do not follow the instructions, your machine could break or turn off.

Problems: incorrect verb form 'would broken turn off' and incorrect use of 'respect the instruction' (should be 'follow the instructions'). Modal usage: use 'could' or 'might' for possible consequences and correct base verb 'break' or phrasal 'turn off'. Suggestion: use 'follow the instructions' and 'could break' or 'might turn off'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× So to save your money and financial things you should respect the instruction.

✓ So, to save money and protect your finances, you should follow the instructions.

Awkward phrase 'save your money and financial things' and 'respect the instruction' are incorrect collocations. This is sentence structure and word choice: use 'save money' and 'protect your finances' and 'follow the instructions'. Suggestion: learn common collocations: 'follow instructions', 'save money', 'protect your finances'. Grammar problem type ID:26