Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use varied tenses and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repeating 'used to' twice in similar sentences.

예시: Yes, I love flowers. When I was a child I often played with them and would braid them into crowns with my sisters, which made our outdoor games feel magical.

제안: Use correct grammar and organize details with linking words. Begin with a clear statement about who loves flowers, then give two specific examples using connectors like 'for example' or 'she also' but avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, my sister loves flowers. For example, she often picks wildflowers from park bushes and she owns many dresses with floral patterns, which shows how much she adores them.

제안: Be direct and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific location and one sensory detail connected by a linking word like 'however' or 'but'. Correct singular/plural errors.

예시: Not many flowers grow in my neighborhood; however, there are plenty around my school, and they often have a pleasant fragrance that brightens the path.

제안: Avoid repetition and be more concise. Give a clear frequency statement, then one reason with a linking word. Replace repeated phrases like 'I love' with varied vocabulary.

예시: I sometimes photograph flowers, although not every day. I usually post the best shots on social media because I appreciate their colours and aesthetic appeal.

제안: Provide a clear opinion and support it with a specific example or reason. Use linking words like 'instead' and avoid vague phrases such as 'to general.' Also correct modal and plural agreement.

예시: Not very often. Instead of sending physical bouquets, many people prefer sharing photos of flowers on social media platforms like Instagram, especially for celebrations.

× Yes, I do love flowers.

✓ Yes, I love flowers.

Using 'do' for emphasis is not ungrammatical but is unnecessary in a simple present statement. Remove 'do' for a natural affirmative response. Suggestion: use simple present to express general likes.

× I used to play with them when I was a child.

✓ I used to play with them when I was a child.

Sentence is correct; 'used to' properly indicates a habitual past action. No correction needed.

× I used to dress up with flowers around my head, especially with my sisters.

✓ I used to dress up with flowers around my head, especially with my sisters.

Sentence is correct. 'Used to' correctly describes past habitual action and structure is fine.

× My sister loved flowers, she also loves picking them out on random places like bushes in the park and she also have a lot of dresses with flowers on them and just flowers in the park.

✓ My sister loved flowers; she also loves picking them from random places like bushes in the park, and she also has a lot of dresses with floral patterns.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency (switching from 'loved' to 'loves') and subject-verb agreement ('she have' -> 'she has'), and awkward preposition 'picking them out on random places' -> 'picking them from random places'. Fix by using past or present consistently; here keep contrast by starting with past then present is acceptable but keep punctuation; correct verb agreement and natural prepositions. Suggestion: choose consistent tense or clearly indicate contrast, and use 'has' for third person singular.

× They aren't really flowers in our area, but I see some flowers around our school and it's really great ones too.

✓ There aren't really many flowers in our area, but I see some around our school, and they're really lovely ones too.

Incorrect structure: 'They aren't really flowers in our area' is ungrammatical. Use 'There aren't' with a quantifier ('many'). 'It's really great ones' mixes singular 'it' with plural 'ones'—change to 'they're' or rephrase. Suggestion: use 'there are/aren't' for existence and match pronouns in number.

× They smell nice.

✓ They smell nice.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense to describe a general quality. No change needed.

× I do take photos of flowers, but not daily.

✓ I do take photos of flowers, but not daily.

Grammatically acceptable: 'do take' adds emphasis. No correction needed. Suggestion: can simplify to 'I take photos of flowers, but not daily.'

× I love looking at them and I love posting them on social media and I just love the aesthetics of it, but I don't really do it daily.

✓ I love looking at them, I love posting them on social media, and I just love the aesthetics of them, but I don't really do it daily.

Pronoun-number agreement: 'the aesthetics of it' should be 'the aesthetics of them' because it refers to 'flowers' (plural). Also improve sentence flow with commas and conjunctions. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match the noun number.

× In my country, I don't think people really send flowers to others.

✓ In my country, I don't think people often send flowers to others.

'Really' is acceptable but 'often' more precisely expresses frequency asked by question. Grammatically the original is acceptable; this revision aligns better with the question about frequency. Suggestion: use adverbs of frequency when answering 'Do people often...'.

× I think they prefer posting it on social media such as Instagram or Facebook.

✓ I think they prefer posting it on social media, such as Instagram or Facebook.

Minor punctuation: add comma before examples. More importantly, 'posting it' is vague—if referring to flowers, use 'posting about them' or 'posting pictures' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'posting pictures of flowers on social media.'

× They prefer posting it to general.

✓ They prefer posting it in general.

'To general' is incorrect. Use 'in general' to mean 'generally.' However, 'posting it in general' is still unclear; better: 'They generally prefer posting on social media.' Suggestion: use correct adverbial phrase 'in general' or rephrase for clarity.