Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh tiếng ngập ngừng (umm, MMM) và thêm một câu hỗ trợ cụ thể. Ví dụ: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, tiếp theo là lý do và một chi tiết cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I love flowers. I am especially fond of brightly colored flowers because they brighten my home and often have a pleasant fragrance. For example, I enjoy placing a small bouquet of roses on my table to cheer up the room.

제안: Sắp xếp ý rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp, dùng liên từ để nối câu, sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., 'are very into', 'bouquet' not 'bucket'), và tránh lặp từ; cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về một người hoặc một dịp.

예시: Yes, several of my friends love flowers too. For instance, one friend often gives me a small bouquet when she finds a beautiful arrangement, and we sometimes visit flower markets together to enjoy choosing blooms.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, tránh câu vòng vo; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác (e.g., 'don't have much time'); thêm chi tiết cụ thể về nơi bán hoa hoặc yếu tố địa phương.

예시: Not really. Most people near my house are quite busy and don't have much time to plant flowers or trees, but there are a few flower shops nearby where people can buy bouquets.

제안: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, loại bỏ lặp và ngập ngừng, sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., 'I don't often take photos' / 'I rarely receive flowers'); cung cấp ví dụ khi bạn chụp ảnh và lý do vì sao.

예시: I don't often take photos of flowers because I rarely receive them, but when I am given a bouquet I usually photograph it to keep the memory or to share it on social media.

제안: Cải thiện rõ ràng và ngữ pháp: trả lời trực tiếp, sửa lỗi cấu trúc (e.g., 'Yes, people in my country often send flowers to express emotions and to make others happy'); thêm một ví dụ về dịp gửi hoa.

예시: Yes, people often send flowers in my country to express feelings or celebrate events. For example, it is common to send flowers on birthdays, anniversaries, or to congratulate someone on a new job.

× MMM yes I'm really into flowers because I like something full of color and have a good smell.

✓ MMM yes I'm really into flowers because I like things that are full of color and have a good smell.

The original uses 'something' which is singular and vague; 'into' requires plural noun when speaking generally about flowers. Use 'things that are full of color' to describe characteristics. Also keep parallel structure 'full of color and have a good smell' by referring to 'things' so 'have' agrees. Suggestion: use plural noun or rephrase to 'I like flowers that are...'.

× I think that my friends umm very into flowers like me because they always give me umm nice flower bucket when they saw it and we can share some fun with each other.

✓ I think that my friends are very into flowers like me because they always give me nice bouquets when they see them and we can share fun with each other.

Missing auxiliary 'are' for 'very into' (be + into). 'Flower bucket' is unnatural; 'bouquets' is correct. Tense 'saw' should be present 'see' to match habitual action. Pronoun 'it' should agree with plural 'bouquets' so use 'them'. Also remove extraneous 'umm' and adjust word order. Suggestion: include 'are' and use correct nouns and present tense for habitual actions.

× It's not at all because people around my house umm are not umm. It's like they don't have many times to plant tree or even flowers umm but they still have some store around here to umm purchase flower.

✓ Not really, because people around my house don't have much time to plant trees or even flowers, but there are some stores around here where you can buy flowers.

'It's not at all' is unnatural; use 'Not really'. 'Don't have many times' is incorrect; use 'don't have much time' (uncountable). 'Plant tree' needs plural 'trees'. 'Some store' should be 'some stores' or 'there are some stores'; 'purchase flower' should be 'buy flowers'. Also add 'where you can' to make clause natural. Suggestion: use correct uncountable nouns and plural forms and natural phrases for availability.

× Is not always that I take photo of flowers in my daily life because umm, I uh, rarely, uh, I, I was rarely receive flower, umm, but if I, umm, if I have given, I have been given a flower, I will take a photo of it.

✓ I don't always take photos of flowers in my daily life because I rarely receive flowers, but if I am given a flower, I will take a photo of it.

Missing auxiliary 'do' for negative present simple: use 'I don't always take'. 'Take photo' needs plural 'photos'. 'Was rarely receive' is ungrammatical; use 'rarely receive' (present simple). Conditional should be 'if I am given a flower' (passive present) not 'if I have been given' which mixes tenses awkwardly. Keep pronouns and number consistent. Suggestion: use correct auxiliaries, plural nouns, and simple present/passive structure for habitual statements.

× Yes, I people in my country often send flowers to others is the way that they are, that they can express their emotion and to like bring happy to everyone.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others; it is a way for them to express their emotions and to bring happiness to everyone.

Remove stray 'I'. Sentence needed a main verb and subject structure: 'it is a way for them to...' 'Express their emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'To like bring happy' is ungrammatical; use 'to bring happiness'. Suggestion: omit extra pronouns, use 'it is a way for them to...' and correct noun forms 'emotions' and 'happiness'.