Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition, filler sounds (uh, um) and self-corrections. Use correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “flowers offer a romantic atmosphere”).

예시: I love flowers. They are visually attractive and often have a pleasant scent, so they create a romantic and calming atmosphere. For example, seeing a vase of roses in my room helps me relax after a busy day.

제안: Give a structured answer: topic sentence + specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., “she especially likes planting them,” “she plants many flowering plants and trees”). Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make it coherent and avoid repetitions.

예시: Yes, my mother loves flowers and enjoys gardening. She plants many flowering plants and small trees in her backyard, so the garden is colorful in spring. For example, last year she planted tulips and jasmine, which attracted many bees and made the yard smell wonderful.

제안: Answer directly with one clear sentence about current situation, then add a contrast with past location using linking words (however, but). Fix grammar and avoid hesitation. Be specific about examples of flowers or seasons.

예시: I live in Singapore now, so there are fewer visible flowers near my home because the tropical climate lacks distinct seasons. However, when I lived in Hangzhou, there were many varieties of flowers in spring, such as cherry blossoms and magnolias, which made the city smell lovely.

제안: Keep sentences short and grammatical. Start with a topic sentence, then give a reason and an example. Remove fillers and repetitions. Use correct verb forms (e.g., “I enjoy looking at them afterwards”) and linking words (so, because) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I go out because I enjoy their colors and shapes. For example, I photograph blooming roadside trees and later look at the pictures to remember the scenes and relax.

제안: Provide a clear general statement followed by specific examples. Correct grammar (e.g., “boys or girls” → “young people” or “men and women”) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, for birthdays, or on special occasions) and give concrete occasions when flowers are sent.

예시: Yes, people in China often send flowers on special occasions. For example, young people send roses to their partners for anniversaries, and others send bouquets for birthdays, graduations, or to congratulate someone on a new job.

× Most importantly, flowers are also offers flowers offer a a romantic atmosphere.

✓ Most importantly, flowers also offer a romantic atmosphere.

Article errors and repetition: 'are also offers flowers offer a a' contains extra verbs and duplicated articles. The correct verb form with plural subject 'flowers' is 'offer' (not 'offers'). Remove the extra 'a' before 'romantic atmosphere' because 'a' is needed only once and the phrase 'offer a romantic atmosphere' is correct. Suggestion: simplify the clause to 'flowers also offer a romantic atmosphere.'

× So every time I see a flower I can feel some beauty BU beautiful things that male that uh, make me feel relax, uh, relaxed.

✓ So every time I see a flower I can feel beautiful things that make me feel relaxed.

Word choice and form errors: 'some beauty BU beautiful things' is redundant; use 'beautiful things.' 'Male' is a mispronunciation of 'make.' Use correct verb 'make.' 'Relax' should be the adjective 'relaxed' to describe how the speaker feels. Suggestion: remove fillers and redundant words and use correct adjective form 'relaxed.'

× She especially like planting them.

✓ She especially likes planting them.

Subject-verb agreement / pronoun-related: The subject 'She' requires third-person singular verb form 'likes' not 'like.' Although listed as 'Incorrect use of pronouns', the immediate fix is correct verb agreement. Suggestion: use 'likes' with 'she.'

× So in her in her backyard she plants a numerous flower plants and flower flowering trees.

✓ So in her backyard she plants numerous flowering plants and ornamental trees.

Plural and word order errors: 'a numerous' is incorrect—'numerous' does not take 'a.' 'flower plants' is redundant; use 'flowering plants.' 'flower flowering trees' is repetitive; consider 'ornamental trees' or 'flowering trees.' Suggestion: remove the article before 'numerous' and use proper noun phrases: 'numerous flowering plants and ornamental trees.'

× They are very beautiful every.

✓ They are very beautiful all year round.

Incomplete structure and word choice: 'every' is incomplete; likely intended 'everywhere' or 'every season' or 'all year round.' Given context about backyard plants, 'all year round' fits. Suggestion: replace fragment with full adverbial phrase 'all year round.'

× And I back to my hometown.

✓ And when I go back to my hometown,

Missing verb and tense: 'I back' is not a correct verb phrase. Use 'I go back' or 'when I go back' to indicate returning. Suggestion: use 'when I go back to my hometown' or 'when I return to my hometown.'

× They are always some types of flowers are flowery or flourishing.

✓ There are always some types of flowers that are in bloom or flourishing.

Article and structure errors: The sentence repeats 'are' and lacks correct clause structure. Use the existential 'There are' to introduce types, and the relative clause 'that are in bloom or flourishing.' Also 'flowery' is less appropriate than 'in bloom' or 'flourishing.' Suggestion: use 'There are always some types of flowers that are in bloom or flourishing.'

× I now lived in Singapore.

✓ I now live in Singapore.

Tense error: 'now' indicates present time, so use present simple 'live' not past 'lived.' Suggestion: match tense to time adverbials: use present tense with 'now.'

× They are not so many flowers near my home.

✓ There are not so many flowers near my home.

Pronoun/subject error: 'They are not so many flowers' is ungrammatical. Use existential 'There are not so many flowers' to talk about existence/quantity. Suggestion: start with 'There are' when stating quantity or existence of things in a place.

× But maybe because, uh, there's no obvious seasons here, but I used to live in a live in Hangzhou, China.

✓ But maybe because there are no obvious seasons here; I used to live in Hangzhou, China.

Redundant conjunctions and tense agreement: The sentence repeats 'but' and uses 'there's' with plural 'seasons'—use 'there are no obvious seasons.' Also 'in a live in Hangzhou' repeats 'live in.' Suggestion: remove fillers and duplicates and use correct plural verb 'there are.'

× There are many, uh, varieties of.

✓ There are many varieties of flowers.

Incomplete sentence: 'varieties of' needs an object. Add 'flowers' to complete the idea. Suggestion: always include the noun after 'varieties of.'

× They make the whole city fragrant.

✓ They make the whole city fragrant.

This sentence is correct as is; no grammatical correction needed. Explanation: The subject 'They' (flowers) and verb 'make' are appropriate; the meaning is clear.

× Yes, I like taking photos of, uh, flowers.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of flowers.

Unnecessary fillers: Grammatically the sentence is correct; remove filler 'uh' and the extra comma. The gerund 'taking' is correctly used after 'like.' Suggestion: avoid filler words in responses.

× Uh, every time I go out, uh, uh, and see some uh, flowering plants or trees are in bloom, I, I take photos of them so I can, uh, I can I.

✓ Every time I go out and see flowering plants or trees in bloom, I take photos of them so I can enjoy and appreciate them later.

Wordiness, repetition and clause structure: Remove fillers and duplicated words. '...trees are in bloom' should be rephrased to 'trees in bloom' within the same clause. 'so I can enjoy and appreciate them later' completes the purpose clause. Suggestion: streamline the sentence, remove disfluencies, and use correct infinitive/gerund forms after 'can.'

× I, I take photos of them so I can, uh, I can I. Enjoying it and appreciate it. Appreciate, appreciate them afterwards they make me they.

✓ I take photos of them so I can enjoy and appreciate them afterward; they make me happy.

Incorrect verb forms and fragments: 'Enjoying it and appreciate it' mixes gerund and base forms incorrectly and lacks a subject. Use 'so I can enjoy and appreciate them afterward.' The fragment 'they make me they' is incomplete; likely intended 'they make me happy.' Suggestion: use parallel verb forms after 'can' (base form) and complete the final clause with an emotion word like 'happy.'

× For example, a boys or girls send roses to their lovers.

✓ For example, boys or girls send roses to their lovers.

Article and number mismatch: 'a boys or girls' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove 'a.' The sentence itself is acceptable without modal changes. Suggestion: use 'boys or girls' or 'a boy or a girl sends' if singular intended.

× People, uh, people choose some flowers, uh. And to send it to their friends.

✓ People choose some flowers to send to their friends.

Redundancy and incorrect pronoun: Remove repeated 'people' and filler. Combine the clauses: 'choose some flowers to send to their friends.' Also change 'it' to 'them' if referring to 'flowers' (plural). Suggestion: use concise clause structure and correct pronoun agreement.