Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, use plural agreement and smoother linking. Limit to max 4-5 sentences and add one specific detail (e.g. types or places).

예시: Yes, I love flowers. I feel happy when I see colorful flowers, especially roses and lilies, and I often take photos of them in parks. They make me feel refreshed and calm, so I try to visit a botanical garden when I can.

제안: Use correct verb forms and plural nouns; give one or two specific examples and link sentences logically. Avoid repeating words; use connecting words like 'for example' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, a close friend of mine loves flowers. For example, she grows roses and marigolds in her garden and often photographs them to post on social media, so she enjoys sharing her hobby with others.

제안: Correct tense and word choice, remove fillers, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus a supporting detail with a linking word. Provide a specific place you visit.

예시: Not many flowers are near my apartment because I live in the city center. However, when I want to see flowers, I usually visit the nearby park or a small botanical garden to enjoy their beauty.

제안: Clarify meaning and fix grammar; avoid unclear phrases (e.g. 'my patient flower'). Use one or two precise examples and linking words like 'and' or 'also'.

예시: Yes, I often photograph flowers during my commute because there are flower beds along the road. I also take pictures of bouquets that patients receive at the hospital to share with their families.

제안: Use accurate vocabulary and grammar; replace unclear words ('sandy flowers', 'symbol of the congratulate') with precise terms like 'send flowers to congratulate'. Provide specific occasions and a linking phrase.

예시: Yes, people often send flowers to congratulate others on occasions like birthdays and graduations. It is also common to bring flowers when visiting someone in the hospital to wish them a speedy recovery.

× I'm always happy when I'm seeing beautiful flowers, uh, different color and I always take a picture when I have a chance and flower always made me fresh and happy.

✓ I'm always happy when I see beautiful flowers of different colors, and I always take a picture when I have the chance; flowers always make me feel refreshed and happy.

The sentence incorrectly mixes continuous present 'I'm seeing' with a habitual meaning; use simple present 'I see'. 'Different color' should be pluralized to 'different colors' (singular/plural issue). 'Flower always made me' is wrong tense and subject-verb agreement: use simple present 'flowers always make me' and 'feel refreshed' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, pluralize countable nouns, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, one of my friends, uh, she love flowers so much and she plants a lot of flower in her house and in her garden and she often take a photo of flower and post on social media and she happy to do that.

✓ Yes, one of my friends, she loves flowers so much and she plants a lot of flowers in her house and in her garden. She often takes photos of flowers and posts them on social media, and she is happy to do that.

Multiple third person singular errors: 'she love' should be 'she loves'; 'she often take' should be 'she often takes'; 'post' should be 'posts'. Also pluralize 'flower' to 'flowers' and use 'photos' or 'a photo' consistently. Finally 'she happy to do that' needs the verb 'is'. Suggestions: conjugate verbs for third person singular (add -s/-es), pluralize countable nouns, and include auxiliary verbs where necessary.

× Uh, unfortunately not because I'm living in the apartment and I live in the center of the city so I didn't see flower too often, but uh, when I wanna see a beautiful flowers, I always go to the part and enjoy beauty.

✓ Unfortunately not, because I live in an apartment in the center of the city, so I don't see flowers very often. But when I want to see beautiful flowers, I always go to the park and enjoy their beauty.

Use simple present 'I live' for a permanent situation rather than 'I'm living'. 'I didn't see' is past tense but the meaning is habitual—use 'I don't see'. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'; 'wanna' is informal, use 'want to'; 'part' should be 'park'; 'enjoy beauty' needs a determiner and plural 'their beauty'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual facts, avoid informal contractions in formal speaking, pluralize nouns, and check word choice.

× When I'm going to my workplace, I always take a photo along to the road because there are some flowers to the next to the road and also I always take a photo of my patient flower when their family bring the flowers.

✓ When I go to my workplace, I always take photos along the road because there are some flowers next to the road. I also always take photos of my patients' flowers when their families bring flowers.

'When I'm going' is unnecessary continuous—use simple present 'When I go' for habitual actions. 'Take a photo along to the road' is ungrammatical; use 'take photos along the road'. 'to the next to the road' is incorrect word order—use 'next to the road'. 'My patient flower' is incorrect; use 'my patients' flowers' (possessive plural) and match verb number: 'families bring' rather than 'family bring'. Suggestions: use simple present for routines, correct prepositional phrases ('next to'), use possessive for patients' flowers, and pluralize where appropriate.

× Yeah, in my country, uh, sandy flowers is a symbol of the congratulate or some people, uh, on special day, such as a birthday, uh, graduation days.

✓ Yes, in my country, flowers are a symbol of congratulations and people give them on special days, such as birthdays and graduation days.

'Sandy flowers' is unclear—likely meant 'sending flowers' or simply 'flowers'. 'Is a symbol of the congratulate' mixes noun forms; use 'are a symbol of congratulations'. Subject-verb agreement: 'flowers are' not 'flowers is'. 'Some people... on special day' needs rephrasing: 'people give them on special days'. Suggestions: choose correct word forms (sending vs sandy), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate nouns ('congratulations') and plural forms for 'days'.

× And when we see someone in the hospital, it's common.

✓ And when we visit someone in the hospital, it is common to bring flowers.

The original sentence is incomplete and vague; 'see someone in the hospital' is fine but doesn't state what is common. Clarify the action: 'it is common to bring flowers.' Suggestions: make sure the sentence completes the intended idea and use appropriate verbs like 'visit' if referring to hospital visits.