Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Correct phrasing and avoid repetition (e.g., “bring flowers” twice). Use a linking phrase if adding detail.

예시: Yes, I love flowers. For example, when I go out with someone I care about I often bring them flowers as a small gesture to show appreciation.

제안: Use correct grammar and be specific: say “my mother is fond of flowers.” Give one clear detail about what she does (e.g., types she grows or when). Avoid vague words like “phenomenon.”

예시: Yes, my mother is very fond of flowers. She grows roses and marigolds in our garden and enjoys their fragrance every morning.

제안: Organize the answer: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct phrases like “in the heart of Ahmedabad” and avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

예시: No, not many. I live in the heart of Ahmedabad, so there are few parks nearby. However, about 5 or 6 kilometres from my home there is a nice garden where I sometimes go to see flowers.

제안: Be concise and give a specific frequency or example. Use a linking word to explain why you photograph them and avoid circular phrasing (“photographs make photos more beautiful”).

예시: Yes, I often photograph flowers because I find their colors and patterns attractive. For example, I usually take photos of street marigolds when I walk to work.

제안: Clarify and organize: state a clear opinion, then give specific occasions and avoid hesitation. Use correct collocations like “send flowers for occasions such as…”.

예시: Yes, people here often send flowers for many occasions. For instance, families send bouquets at weddings, funerals, religious festivals, and to celebrate birthdays.

× I bring flowers and it's a gesture to bring a gift flowers to each other.

✓ I bring flowers; it's a gesture to give flowers to each other.

The error is using the noun 'gift' before 'flowers' unnecessarily and awkwardly. The verb form 'to give' (base form) is correct here after 'gesture to'. Use 'give flowers' rather than 'bring a gift flowers'. This makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, my mother is a fond of flower.

✓ Yes, my mother is fond of flowers.

The phrase 'is a fond of' incorrectly uses the indefinite article 'a' with the adjective 'fond'. Also 'flower' should be plural when speaking generally. Remove 'a' and pluralize 'flower' to 'flowers'.

× She grows flower at our house as well and she likes the smell of the phenomenon.

✓ She grows flowers at our house as well, and she likes their smell.

Use plural 'flowers' for general cultivation. 'Grows flower at' is wrong: use 'grows flowers at our house'. 'The smell of the phenomenon' is unnatural and unclear; 'their smell' (referring to the flowers) is concise and correct.

× No uh, I live in an heart of Ahmedabad, so there is no such garden or anything like flower for flowers to grow.

✓ No. I live in the heart of Ahmedabad, so there are no gardens or open spaces for flowers to grow.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'heart' in this idiom: 'the heart of Ahmedabad'. Count nouns must agree: 'no such garden' should be plural 'no gardens' or 'no such garden or open space'. Also 'anything like flower' is incorrect; use 'spaces for flowers to grow'. Change 'is' to 'are' to agree with plural 'gardens'.

× But there is this place I go, it is near my house is around 5 to 6 kilometers away from my house. It's a good place where?

✓ But there is a place I go that is about 5 to 6 kilometers from my house. It's a good place to visit.

Original contains repetition and a fragment 'It's a good place where?' which is ungrammatical. Combine clauses: 'a place I go that is about 5 to 6 kilometers from my house.' Replace the question fragment with a complete comment: 'It's a good place to visit.' Use 'about' for approximate distance.

× Yes, I often take photos of flowers as I think flowers are very beautiful and it makes the photo even more beautiful.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I think flowers are very beautiful and they make the photos even more beautiful.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'photos' or 'flowers'. Use 'they' to refer to 'flowers' (plural) and 'photos' should be plural 'photos'. Also 'as' is fine but 'because' clarifies reason.

× Yes, people in our country often send to flowers for many occasions like get together or something familiar with the family event and also uh, and on.

✓ Yes, people in our country often send flowers for many occasions like family gatherings and other events.

Remove incorrect preposition 'to' after 'send'. Use natural collocations: 'family gatherings' instead of 'get together' and 'other events' instead of the unclear phrase 'something familiar with the family event and also uh, and on.' Simplify to create grammatical and natural phrasing.