Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar, remove repetition, and provide a concise structure: a direct topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details (with linking words), and a brief concluding remark. Correct grammatical errors (e.g. 'flowers are important for the environment' not 'flowers are environment are important for'). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I adore flowers because they improve the environment and boost mood. For example, having potted plants at home can reduce stress and freshen the air. However, they do need regular watering and care to stay healthy.

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example about your mom (what she grows or how she cares for them) using linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, my mother loves flowers. For instance, she grows several kinds of roses and jasmine on the balcony, which fill the room with a pleasant scent and make our home feel welcoming.

제안: Organize the response: direct answer, reason with specific details, and a brief consequence. Avoid repetition and incorrect words ('floors' → 'flowers'). Use linking phrases like 'because' and 'as a result'.

예시: Not many, because our climate is very hot and dry for most of the year. As a result, flowers need more watering and shade to survive, so people usually grow hardier plants instead.

제안: Answer directly and avoid long unrelated anecdotes. Correct grammar ('I'm not interested in photography'). If mentioning a friend, make the example brief and relevant. Use linking words to contrast your view and the friend's.

예시: No, I don't take photos of flowers because I'm not interested in photography. However, my friend loves photographing flowers; she keeps a large album of different species and believes each one creates a unique mood.

제안: Give a clear, structured answer: start with a direct yes/no, then list a few common occasions with linking words and one specific example. Avoid repetition and filler words, and use correct collocations ('visit patients in hospital' not 'hospital visiting visitors').

예시: Yes, people often send flowers. For example, flowers are common gifts for weddings, funerals, and when visiting someone in hospital, as they express sympathy, celebration, or well wishes.

× I adore flowers. I strongly believe that flowers are environment are important for, environment for and they are important psychologically as well.

✓ I adore flowers. I strongly believe that flowers and the environment are important, and they are important psychologically as well.

Original sentence has repetition and incorrect phrase order ('flowers are environment are important for, environment for') causing sentence structure confusion. Combine related ideas with conjunctions and correct noun order: 'flowers and the environment are important.' Use commas and 'and' to connect clauses for clarity.

× They make you feel better and my perspective, they give good energy.

✓ They make you feel better; from my perspective, they give good energy.

Missing proper linkers and punctuation. 'my perspective' should be introduced as a prepositional phrase 'from my perspective' and the clauses need proper separation (semicolon or period) to avoid a run-on sentence.

× On the flip side, you should water them.

✓ Also, you should water them.

'On the flip side' implies a contrast, but the idea is additive (care tip). Use 'also' for addition. Ensure the discourse marker matches the intended meaning.

× Yes, my mom, Take my mom for instance, she adores flowers.

✓ Yes, my mom. Take my mom for instance; she adores flowers.

Comma splices and unnecessary repetition of pronoun 'she' after naming subject can create awkwardness. Use a period or semicolon and rephrase to avoid redundancy.

× Uh, flowers are refreshing from my perspective.

✓ Flowers are refreshing from my perspective.

Remove filler 'Uh' in formal responses. The sentence is otherwise correct; avoid hesitation words in spoken-test answers for clarity.

× They give a good feeling, they add uh, they have their own vibes in our room as well as the scent.

✓ They give a pleasant feeling; they add their own vibe to our room with their scent.

Original has run-on clauses and filler 'uh'. Combine ideas compactly and use singular 'vibe' or 'vibes' consistently. 'Add their own vibe to our room with their scent' is clearer and grammatical.

× Well no not really because the weather in my country is really hot.

✓ Well, no, not really, because the weather in my country is very hot.

Add commas for clarity and change 'really hot' to 'very hot' for style; original is acceptable but punctuation was missing. This fixes sentence flow and clarity.

× Like we have almost only two season like there is a little period for the other two seasons and the floors need water, need care, need umm a good air as.

✓ We mostly have only two seasons; there is a short period for the other two seasons, and the flowers need water, care, and good air.

Multiple issues: 'two season' should be 'two seasons' (plural), 'floors' is wrong word — should be 'flowers', and listing needs parallel structure: 'need water, care, and good air.' Remove filler 'umm' and correct pluralization.

× Actually, I don't because I'm not interesting in photography.

✓ Actually, I don't because I'm not interested in photography.

Incorrect adjective form 'interesting' used instead of past participle adjective 'interested' to describe personal feeling. Use 'interested in' to express lack of interest.

× But take my friend for instance. She adored flowers.

✓ But take my friend for instance. She adores flowers.

Context is present habitual preference, so present tense 'adores' is correct; 'adored' implies past. Match tense to meaning.

× She has a type of every flower like crows and many other kinds because they are refreshing.

✓ She likes every type of flower, such as roses and many other kinds, because they are refreshing.

'Has a type of every flower' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'likes every type of flower.' 'crows' is likely 'roses' (spelling error), and use 'such as' to give examples. Also ensure article usage and word choice are correct.

× Actually they give a different vibe to their own.

✓ Actually, they give a different vibe of their own.

Awkward ending 'to their own' should be 'of their own' to indicate possession. Add comma after 'Actually' and rephrase for naturalness.

× Yes they do absolutely for you.

✓ Yes, people in my country do; they absolutely send flowers.

Original is unclear and missing subject. Make subject explicit: 'people in my country do' or 'yes, they do' with clear antecedent. Add commas for clarity.

× For instance, take take uh hospital visiting hospital visiting visitors for instance, umm for wedding party gathering.

✓ For instance, people send flowers for hospital visits, weddings, and parties.

Original repeats phrases, includes fillers, and is ungrammatical. Simplify and list occasions clearly: 'hospital visits, weddings, and parties.' Remove repetitions and fillers.

× It's a good sample of love and peace kind.

✓ It's a good symbol of love and peace.

'Sample of love and peace kind' is incorrect collocation. Use 'symbol of love and peace' or 'gesture of love and peace.' This corrects word choice and idiomatic expression.