Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and linking words, and add one specific example. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love flowers. I enjoy them because they come in many colours and shapes, and I often paint and photograph them. For example, last spring I painted a series of tulip studies to practise colour blending.

제안: Good direct response and relevant details. Improve by reducing hesitations, using a linking phrase for coherence, and adding a specific detail about a shared activity to show engagement.

예시: Yes, I do. In fact, a close friend of mine loves flowers and we often exchange gardening tips. For instance, she taught me how to propagate roses from cuttings, which worked well last summer.

제안: Make the explanation more grammatical and specific. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a clear example of types of flowers or places where they grow. Avoid repetition and incorrect quantifiers.

예시: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because the mild climate suits them. For example, neighbours grow roses, bougainvillea and orchids, so you often see colourful displays in front gardens and parks.

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, remove hesitations, and give one specific, coherent example. Explain why you photograph them and who receives the photos. Avoid unclear phrases like “forget me.”

예시: Yes, I often take photos of flowers and send them to my dad and friends. For example, last week I photographed an unusual wildflower near the river and sent the pictures to my father because he studies plants and enjoys identifying them.

제안: Good content and clear examples of occasions. Improve accuracy of grammar and cohesion: use plural agreement and linking words, and add a brief comparison or reason to enrich the answer.

예시: People do send flowers on special occasions such as Mother's Day, Valentine's Day and anniversaries. However, it's not common to give flowers in everyday life, probably because people prefer small practical gifts for routine visits.

× I really like flowers because they're so much variety, colors, they're pretty, you can paint them, you can photograph them everywhere.

✓ I really like flowers because there's so much variety and color; they're pretty, you can paint them, and you can photograph them everywhere.

The phrase 'so much variety, colors' mixes countable and uncountable forms. Use 'there's so much variety and color' or 'there are so many varieties and colors.' Also add conjunctions for clarity and correct list punctuation. Suggestion: decide between 'much' (uncountable) or 'many' (countable) and use parallel structure.

× Every flower have a different meaning in Victoria and flower language from 19th century preaching, and it's really interesting.

✓ Every flower has a different meaning in Victoria and in the language of flowers from the 19th century, and it's really interesting.

Subject 'Every flower' is singular and requires singular verb 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Also revise 'flower language from 19th century preaching' to 'the language of flowers from the 19th century' for clarity and correct noun phrase order. Suggestion: match singular subjects with singular verbs and reorder modifiers for clarity.

× When I see a flower that I haven't seen, uh, in a long time, I photograph that flower and I send them to my dad and to friends.

✓ When I see a flower that I haven't seen in a long time, I photograph it and send it to my dad and to friends.

Pronoun 'them' is plural but refers to singular 'a flower'; use singular pronoun 'it'. Also remove extra commas and unnecessary pronoun repetition for fluency. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches its antecedent.

× I love to photograph, umm, especially forget me. Not because they're not the common when I where I live.

✓ I especially love to photograph forget-me-nots, not because they're uncommon where I live.

'Forget me' is incorrect noun form; the flower name is 'forget-me-nots' (plural) or 'forget-me-not' (singular). 'Not the common' is ungrammatical; use 'uncommon'. Also fix word order 'where I live' and remove filler words. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms for flower names and choose appropriate adjectives ('common' vs 'uncommon').

× It is so much variety and colors and people in their garden have flowers from different countries, so they are much, much flowers.

✓ There is so much variety and color, and people in their gardens have flowers from different countries, so there are many, many flowers.

Mixes uncountable 'much' with plural 'colors' and misuses 'they are much, much flowers.' Use 'there is' for uncountable 'variety and color' and 'there are many' for countable 'flowers.' Also pluralize 'gardens' to match 'people.' Suggestion: distinguish countable and uncountable nouns and use 'there is/there are' accordingly.

× Yes, I'm constantly taking pictures of flowers. When I see a flower that I haven't seen, uh, in a long time, I photograph that flower and I send them to my dad and to friends.

✓ Yes, I'm constantly taking pictures of flowers. When I see a flower that I haven't seen in a long time, I photograph it and send it to my dad and my friends.

Repeat of earlier pronoun error: 'them' should be 'it' for a singular flower; 'friends' should be preceded by 'my' for consistency. Also streamline repetition. Suggestion: make pronouns and possessives consistent with their nouns.

× Well, they do for Mother's Day and for Valentine's Day some boyfriend gave flowers to their girlfriends, uh, when it's their anniversary.

✓ Well, they do for Mother's Day and for Valentine's Day: some boyfriends give flowers to their girlfriends when it's their anniversary.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'some boyfriend gave' mixes singular and plural forms; use 'some boyfriends give'. Also maintain present-tense habit for general statements. Add punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: keep number agreement between subject and verb and use consistent tense for habitual actions.

× But it's not that common to send flowers or, or to give them in daily life.

✓ But it's not that common to send or give flowers in daily life.

Stylistic repetition 'or, or' and pronoun 'them' is unnecessary; use parallel verbs 'send or give flowers.' Tense is fine but simplify for natural speech. Suggestion: remove stammering and redundant words, keep parallel structure.