Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, add a specific reason or example, and avoid vague phrases like "wild imagination" or "nature empowers you." Use one or two linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I love flowers, mainly because of their fragrance. For example, the scent of jasmine in the evening makes me feel calm and reminds me of family gatherings, so I often enjoy walking in gardens to breathe it in.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a specific contrasting detail. Use a linking word like "however" and a brief example to make the response more informative.

예시: No, not many. However, plants are more popular here than cut flowers; for instance, my neighbor collects potted succulents and spends time arranging them on his balcony.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and follow with specific details and a linking word to clarify why. Avoid repetition and keep it within a few concise sentences.

예시: No, there aren't many flowers where I live. Mainly there are coconut trees and dense shrubs, so colorful flower beds are rare in my neighborhood.

제안: Answer directly, then give concise reasons with concrete detail. Replace vague qualifiers like "not really beautiful" with specific criteria, and use a linking word such as "because" or "so."

예시: Not usually, because I rarely see interesting flowers nearby. When I do find a unique bloom, such as a bright bougainvillea outside a café, I sometimes take a photo.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then add specific occasions and a brief comparison. Use linking words like "for example" and avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes, people do send flowers, but mostly for special occasions. For example, bouquets are common for graduations, Valentine's Day, and birthdays, while on ordinary days flowers are rarely exchanged.

× It just creates this wild imagination of how they become so beautiful and how the nature empowers you.

✓ It just creates a wild imagination of how they become so beautiful and how nature empowers you.

Remove the article before 'nature' and change 'this wild imagination' to 'a wild imagination' for natural English. 'The nature' is incorrect when speaking about nature in general; use 'nature' without an article. Also 'this' is less natural than 'a' in this context.

× Flowers are not really a very high trend here in my country, but we do have some people who love plants.

✓ Flowers are not really a big trend here in my country, but we do have some people who love plants.

'A very high trend' is not idiomatic. Use quantifiers that collocate with 'trend' such as 'big trend' or 'popular trend'. 'Big' or 'very popular' are correct alternatives.

× No, there isn't. Most of the things you can see around here in my place are trees and shrubs and mostly coconuts, but there aren't really enough flowers.

✓ No, there aren't. Most of the things you can see around here in my place are trees and shrubs and mostly coconut trees, but there really aren't enough flowers.

The reply 'No, there isn't' mismatches the plural subject 'flowers' and the following plural description. Use 'No, there aren't.' Also 'mostly coconuts' is unclear; use 'mostly coconut trees' to name the plants. Reordering 'really' to 'really aren't' sounds more natural.

× Not really for the reason that I don't see them often and if there is one, it's not really beautiful or very unique, which is why I don't photograph a lot of flowers in my daily life.

✓ Not really, because I don't see them often, and if there is one, it's usually not very beautiful or unique, which is why I don't photograph many flowers in my daily life.

Replace 'for the reason that' with 'because' for natural speech. Change 'not really beautiful or very unique' to 'usually not very beautiful or unique' for clarity. Use 'many flowers' instead of 'a lot of flowers' after 'photograph' for better collocation and consistency.

× Yes, some people, especially if there are important events like graduation or during Valentine's Day or birthdays, yes, they send those.

✓ Yes, some people do, especially for important events like graduations, Valentine's Day, or birthdays; they send flowers then.

Use 'for' instead of 'if' to indicate occasions. 'Graduation' should be plural 'graduations' or 'a graduation' depending on context; 'for important events like graduations' is natural. Remove 'those' and explicitly say 'flowers' for clarity. Rephrase to avoid repetition of 'yes'.