Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文を明確で自然にする必要があります。「because my teeth, umm」は意味不明なので削除または訂正してください。トピック文で直接答え、その後に理由を短く述べ、具体例を一つ加えると良いです。語彙はもっと適切な単語（e.g. surrounded, raised）を使い、発話のための詰まり（umm）を減らしましょう。最大5文以内にまとめてください。

예시: Yes, I love flowers. My mother teaches Japanese flower arrangement, so I grew up surrounded by them. Because of that, I’ve always enjoyed their colors and scents.

제안: 過去形と現在完了が混在しており意味が不明瞭です。まず誰を指すか明確にし、時制を統一してください。短い理由や具体的な行動（例：teaches classes, arranges flowers while traveling）を付け加えると効果的です。リンク語（for example, because）を使うとより論理的になります。

예시: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She teaches ikebana and often arranges flowers whenever we travel together, so I learned to appreciate them too.

제안: 重複表現（around my house, near my house）を避け、文を完結にしてください。具体例は良いですが、夏の部分が未完成なので結論を付け足しましょう。リンク語（for example, in spring, during summer）を維持しつつ、季節ごとの花の特徴を一文で述べると良いです。

예시: Yes, there are many flowers near my home because several parks and gardens are close by. For example, we enjoy cherry blossoms in spring and colorful roses and lilies in summer.

제안: 回答は簡潔で明確です。さらに自然にするには一文で理由を付け加えると良いでしょう（感情や状況を説明）。接続語（because, so）を使って流れを整理してください。

예시: No, I don’t usually take photos of flowers because I prefer to enjoy their scent and appearance in the moment.

제안: 良い一般化ですが、慣用的な表現に直し、より自然な例を追加すると良いです。たとえば「retire」や「weddings」「funerals」など代表的な場面を挙げ、接続語で説明を補強してください。

예시: Yes, people often send flowers for occasions like weddings or when someone retires. They are also common at funerals to express sympathy.

× Yes, I like flowers very much because my teeth, umm.

✓ Yes, I like flowers very much because of my mother.

The original sentence uses 'my teeth' incorrectly where the speaker likely meant 'my mother' or 'my family'. This is a pronoun/noun selection error. Replace the incorrect noun with the intended referent. Use clear nouns to avoid confusion.

× My mother teaches Japanese flower arrangements, so I have been surrounded by flowers since I was a child.

✓ My mother teaches Japanese flower arrangement, so I have been surrounded by flowers since I was a child.

The phrase 'Japanese flower arrangements' as the object of 'teaches' is awkward; 'teaches Japanese flower arrangement' (or 'teaches ikebana') is more natural. This is a pronoun/noun usage/word choice issue. Use the uncountable form 'arrangement' or the specific term 'ikebana.'

× Yeah, definitely. My mother loved flowers.

✓ Yeah, definitely. My mother loves flowers.

Tense inconsistency: the context implies she still loves flowers, so present tense 'loves' is correct. This involves incorrect pronoun/verb choice and tense; adjust verb to present to match meaning.

× She. Hope she has been teaching for our arrangement whenever we traveled together.

✓ She does. I hope she has been teaching us flower arrangement when we travel together.

Original fragment 'She.' is incomplete and 'Hope she has been teaching for our arrangement whenever we traveled together' is ungrammatical. This is sentence structure and verb form issue. Provide a complete sentence, use 'I hope', correct tense consistency ('has been teaching us' for ongoing action) and use 'when we travel' for habitual action.

× Yes, there are a plenty of flowers around my house because there are some parks and gardens near my house.

✓ Yes, there are plenty of flowers around my house because there are some parks and gardens nearby.

'a plenty' is incorrect; use 'plenty of' without 'a'. Also 'near my house' is better as 'nearby' for conciseness. This is a quantifier and word choice error.

× For example, in spring we can enjoy seeing cherry blossoms and during summer we can enjoy.

✓ For example, in spring we can enjoy seeing cherry blossoms, and during summer we can enjoy other flowers and festivals.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'we can enjoy.' It lacks an object and is therefore incomplete. This is a sentence structure error. Add a clear object like 'other flowers and festivals' to complete the thought.

× Actually, I don't take photos of flowers.

✓ Actually, I don't take photos of flowers.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change is needed. The present simple negative is appropriate for habitual action. Identified as correct for reference.

× I prefer seeing them instead of taking photos of them.

✓ I prefer looking at them to taking photos of them.

'prefer A to B' is the correct construction; 'instead of' is not wrong but 'prefer A to B' is more natural here. Also 'seeing' is better as 'looking at' when referring to viewing flowers. This is a preposition/verb choice improvement.

× Yes, people in my country usually send flowers to people who quit their job or who get married.

✓ Yes, people in my country usually send flowers to people who quit their jobs or who get married.

'quit their job' should be pluralized to 'quit their jobs' to match 'people'. This is a quantifier/pluralization issue (subject-verb/ noun number). Pluralize 'job' to agree with plural subject.