Name— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, then one brief supporting detail. Avoid repeating synonyms ("kind of hard or difficult"). Use a linking word for clarity.

예시: I find it difficult to remember people's names, but I can usually recognize them by their faces or voices.

제안: Start with a direct answer then give a specific method with a linking word. Correct phrasing and avoid vague phrases like "this could help me."

예시: I usually remember names by talking to people regularly; the more we communicate, the more I associate their name with their personality and appearance.

제안: Give a clear main feeling and one reason. Improve sentence structure and avoid redundancy ("okay or fine"). Use a linking word to contrast feelings.

예시: I feel a bit awkward when someone forgets my name, but I'm usually fine with it because we don't speak regularly.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear cause and one specific remedy. Correct grammar (e.g. "had an operation" and "had to be sedated") and avoid long, unclear clauses.

예시: Yes, I often forget names; I had an operation and was sedated, which affected my memory. To improve it I do brain exercises like puzzles and repeat names during conversations.

× For me it is kind of hard or difficult to remember names however I could recognize someone through faces and also through their voices

✓ For me, it is kind of hard or difficult to remember names; however, I can recognize someone by their face and by their voice.

The sentence mixes present ability incorrectly using 'could' which implies past or conditional; use present simple 'can' for general ability. Also use singular 'face' and 'voice' as general references and correct prepositions: 'by' instead of 'through'. Add punctuation for clarity.

× Likewise what I've mentioned so it is hard or difficult for me to remember names. However through often communication it can help me to know more about the person and this could help me

✓ As I mentioned, it is hard for me to remember names. However, frequent communication can help me learn more about the person, and this can help.

Use present simple 'is' for a general statement and replace the incorrect phrase 'through often communication' with 'frequent communication'. Use 'can' for present possibility rather than conditional 'could' at the end. Reorder words for natural English.

× I feel like it is a bit awkward when they can't remember my name. However I find it okay or fine since if I do not regularly communicate with the person which is okay on my side.

✓ I feel it is a bit awkward when they can't remember my name. However, I think it's fine if I do not regularly communicate with the person.

Remove redundant 'like' and 'or' choices and simplify. The clause 'since if I do not...' is ungrammatical and redundant; use a single conditional 'if I do not regularly communicate' and remove 'which is okay on my side'. Use contractions consistently and punctuation.

× I tend to forget people's names like what I've mentioned earlier and the reason behind this is because I had an operation before which is the have to seditate me and I think this affected my memory. However, I'm trying different things like answering puzzles which helps my brain to recognize more.

✓ I tend to forget people's names, as I mentioned earlier. The reason is that I had an operation before which required sedation, and I think this affected my memory. However, I'm trying different things like solving puzzles, which help my brain to improve recognition.

Use present simple 'tend to' and clarify sequence with commas. Replace awkward phrase 'the have to seditate me' with 'required sedation' (correct noun and verb form). Use past tense 'had' for the operation and past/present effect 'affected' is correct. Change 'answering puzzles' to 'solving puzzles' and adjust 'helps' to 'help' to agree with plural 'things' (subject-verb agreement).