Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, chọn từ chính xác và nói rõ ràng, ngắn gọn. Tránh câu thừa, sửa lỗi mạo từ và giới từ (ví dụ: "in southern Vietnam", "for almost 18 years", "to pursue higher education"). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và giới hạn dài độ tối đa 3-4 câu. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản nếu cần nêu thêm chi tiết.

예시: I come from Subjunct City in southern Vietnam, where I was born and raised for almost 18 years. I moved to Hunt City to pursue higher education about four years ago.

제안: Cần nêu rõ một ý chính và giải thích cụ thể; tránh từ sai nghĩa như "hotel", "profile". Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (ví dụ: "hometown", "provides", "open spaces", "fresh air"). Giữ tối đa 3 câu: trả lời trực tiếp rồi thêm lý do cụ thể và ví dụ ngắn. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết ý.

예시: I love my hometown because it has wide open spaces and lots of greenery. Because of that, the air feels fresh and it’s easy to relax outdoors.

제안: Sửa thời gian và thì cho chính xác (dùng hiện tại hoàn thành cho kinh nghiệm kéo dài: "I have lived"). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (ví dụ: "memories", "who always help me"). Nói câu chủ đề trực tiếp rồi nêu 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như "for example" đúng chỗ.

예시: I have lived in Sofian City for nearly 18 years, so I have many fond memories there. For example, my neighbors are very friendly and always help me when I need assistance.

제안: Cần đưa ra ý kiến rõ ràng với lý do hợp lý và diễn đạt gãy gọn. Sửa cấu trúc câu và thì (ví dụ: "I don't think so" + lý do: "few job or study opportunities"). Tránh câu lủng củng; dùng liên từ như "because", "so", hoặc "therefore" để nối ý. Giới hạn 2-3 câu và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về thiếu cơ hội.

예시: I don't think it is, because there are fewer educational and job opportunities in my hometown. That’s why many young people, including me, move to bigger cities to study and work.

× My hometown is Subjunct City in the southern Vietnam.

✓ My hometown is Subjunct City in southern Vietnam.

Use 'in southern Vietnam' not 'in the southern Vietnam'. The definite article 'the' is not used before country regions when speaking generally, and 'southern' modifies 'Vietnam' directly.

× This said Alice, where I was born and raised for a almost 18 years until I moved to Hunt City for pursuing higher education.

✓ It is called Alice, where I was born and raised for almost 18 years until I moved to Hunt City to pursue higher education.

Several problems: 'This said Alice' is incorrect phrasing; use 'It is called' or 'It is named'. 'for a almost 18 years' should be 'for almost 18 years' (remove 'a'). 'for pursuing' should be 'to pursue' because purpose uses 'to' + base verb. The corrected sentence uses proper structure and verb form.

× Although I have moved to Ho Chi Minh City for nearly four years, I really love my hotel because it profile me a rim spaces so that I can create a fresh air.

✓ Although I have lived in Ho Chi Minh City for nearly four years, I really love my hometown because it provides me with a calm space so that I can enjoy fresh air.

Use 'have lived' (present perfect) to indicate duration up to now; 'moved' is a past action. 'hotel' is wrong contextually; 'hometown' fits. 'profile me a rim spaces' is incorrect; use 'provides me with a calm space' or 'gives me space'. 'create a fresh air' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoy fresh air'. Also correct verb forms and prepositions.

× I lived in Sofian City for nearly 18 years, so I have had a lot of memory here.

✓ I lived in Sofian City for nearly 18 years, so I have many memories from there.

'have had a lot of memory here' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'have many memories' or 'have a lot of memories' to express recollections. 'from there' clarifies location.

× For example, the neighbors are very friendly with who always have me when I need.

✓ For example, the neighbors are very friendly and are always there for me when I need help.

'with who' is incorrect—use 'and are' or 'who are'. 'always have me' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'are always there for me'. Add 'help' after 'need' or rephrase 'when I need them'.

× No, I don't think so. For me, because I pursue higher education, I go to a big city. Therefore I think to find opportunities they must have is isn't fit.

✓ No, I don't think so. For me, because I pursued higher education, I went to a big city. Therefore I think it is not suitable for finding opportunities.

Tense and structure problems: 'because I pursue higher education, I go' should be past tense if referring to the reason you left: 'because I pursued... I went'. The final clause 'Therefore I think to find opportunities they must have is isn't fit' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'Therefore I think it is not suitable for finding opportunities' or 'Therefore I think it is not a good place to find opportunities.'