Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place and give one or two specific facts (location and a distinctive feature). Avoid fillers ("umm") and repetition. Use correct names ("Hyogo" prefecture) and concise phrasing within 2–3 sentences. Add a linking phrase if you give a second detail.

예시: My hometown is Kobe, which is in Hyōgo Prefecture in western Japan. It’s a large, international port city, and I love its multicultural atmosphere.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence stating what you like, then give specific supporting details and use linking words (for example, because, and, also). Be precise about locations and avoid unclear phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use descriptive vocabulary.

예시: I like Kobe’s combination of mountains and the sea because it gives wonderful scenery. For example, you can hike in the Rokko mountains and then drive down to the waterfront within 30 minutes, which makes the city very pleasant to live in.

제안: Give a clear, factual answer to the time question first (e.g., "all my life" or number of years). Don’t confuse place names with time expressions. Avoid irrelevant opinions and reduce fillers. If you wish, add one brief reason for staying (family, work, comfort). Keep it within 1–2 sentences.

예시: I have lived in Kobe all my life — so about 25 years. I’ve stayed because my family is here and the city offers good schools and services.

제안: Answer directly and then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, for instance). Mention concrete aspects that benefit young people (schools, universities, jobs, leisure). Avoid fillers and repetition; 2–3 sentences are enough.

예시: Yes, it’s a good place for young people because there are many schools and universities and plenty of part-time job opportunities. Also, there are cafes, music venues and sports facilities that make student life enjoyable.

× My hometown is Kobe. Umm, Kobe is in Hugo.

✓ My hometown is Kobe. Umm, Kobe is in Hyogo.

The error is a word error (place name misspelling) rather than grammar, but it functions like a preposition/place phrase issue; the correct prefecture name is 'Hyogo'. Use the correct proper noun for locations. Also 'in Hyogo' is the correct prepositional phrase for a city within a prefecture.

× Umm, Kobe is very big town and very international town.

✓ Umm, Kobe is a very big and very international town.

Missing articles and incorrect adjective order. English requires the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns ('a town') and coordinates adjectives before the noun ('a very big and very international town').

× I love, I love my hometown.

✓ I love my hometown.

Redundant repetition creates an unnatural sentence. Remove the repeated clause to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× My hometown has mountain and sea, so we live in Julian Mountain and Beach Sea, Yeah, so where the view is very beautiful and very comfortable to.

✓ My hometown has mountains and the sea, so we live near the mountains and the beach. The view there is very beautiful and comfortable.

Multiple issues: countable nouns need plural or articles ('mountains', 'the sea'); awkward place names 'Julian Mountain and Beach Sea' seem incorrect and were replaced with natural phrasing 'the mountains and the beach'; 'comfortable to' is ungrammatical—use 'comfortable' adjectivally and optionally 'comfortable there'. Also use 'near' to indicate location. Break into two sentences for clarity.

× Actually I'm living in COVID still now.

✓ Actually, I still live in Kobe now.

Present continuous 'I'm living' is unusual with stative verbs for permanent residence; use simple present 'I live'. Also 'in COVID' is incorrect for a place name; replace with 'in Kobe'. 'Still now' is redundant—use 'still' or 'now'.

× Umm I live in COVID since when I was born and I still living in COVID and COVID is very nice city so I don't wanna live.

✓ I have lived in Kobe since I was born, and I am still living there. Kobe is a very nice city, so I don't want to leave.

Use present perfect 'have lived' with 'since' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. 'Since when I was born' should be 'since I was born'. Use 'am still living' (present continuous) or 'still live there'. 'Don't wanna live' is informal and ungrammatical here; the intended meaning is 'don't want to leave'. Use 'leave' rather than 'live'. Also replace 'COVID' with 'Kobe' and add articles ('a very nice city').

× Is your home town a good place for young people?

✓ Is your hometown a good place for young people?

Not strictly a grammar error, but 'home town' should be one word 'hometown' for standard spelling. No other change needed.

× Yes, yes, of course. Umm, in COVID, a lot of uh, schools and university are there, so it's very umm, nice for students, yeah.

✓ Yes, of course. In Kobe, there are a lot of schools and universities, so it's very nice for students.

Use 'In Kobe' for location. Word order: 'there are a lot of schools and universities' is the natural existential construction. 'University' should be plural ('universities') to match 'a lot of'. Avoid filler words. Also place 'there' after the verb in existential sentences and use plural for countable nouns.