Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “here” and “in the town” together).

예시: I come from Macau, a small city on the south coast of China. It blends Chinese and Portuguese cultures, so you can see colonial-era heritage buildings alongside traditional Chinese temples.

제안: Improve grammar and provide a specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid informal phrases like “taste yummy.” Mention one or two particular snacks and a reason why the people are friendly.

예시: I like the local food, especially almond cookies and egg tarts, because they are fresh and flavorful. In addition, people in my hometown are friendly and helpful, which makes the atmosphere welcoming for visitors.

제안: Use the correct tense for duration questions (present perfect) and give a concise time reference. Add a brief supporting detail if relevant. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement).

예시: I have lived in Macau since I was born, so I’ve spent my whole life there. Growing up there gave me a deep familiarity with the local traditions and neighborhoods.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence plus two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague words like “stuff” and repetition. Mention concrete facilities, activities, or job/education opportunities that make it good for young people.

예시: Yes, definitely. Macau is a good place for young people because it offers convenient public transport, such as regular buses and a light rail, and there are many entertainment options and part-time job opportunities in the tourism and hospitality sectors.

× My hometown is in Macau, which is a small city and it contains both Chinese and Western cultures here, with many heritage buildings in the town.

✓ My hometown is Macau, which is a small city that contains both Chinese and Western cultures and has many heritage buildings.

The sentence has redundant and awkward articles and phrasing. Using 'is in Macau' is acceptable but 'My hometown is Macau' is more natural. 'which is a small city and it contains' is wordy; replace with 'that contains' to connect the relative clause correctly. 'Here' and 'in the town' are redundant together; use 'has many heritage buildings.' This fixes article and clause usage and improves fluency. (ID 17)

× The local snacks of my hometown is really taste yummy and people here is nice to others.

✓ The local snacks of my hometown really taste yummy, and people here are nice to others.

Two subject-verb agreement errors: 'snacks' is plural so the verb should be 'taste' not 'is taste'; 'people' is plural so use 'are' not 'is.' Also remove the extra 'really' placement and use a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. 'Taste yummy' is informal but acceptable in speaking; for more formal speech use 'are really tasty.' (ID 27)

× I live in Macau since I was born because my parents is also from Macau so I grew up here.

✓ I have lived in Macau since I was born because my parents are also from Macau, so I grew up here.

When describing an action that began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'have lived' with 'since.' 'My parents is' is subject-verb agreement error; use 'are.' The sentence contains multiple clauses: add a comma before 'so' for clarity. This addresses tense and agreement issues. (ID 6)

× Yes, definitely. My hometown is welcomed to all kinds of people, including young youngsters and it it provide trains and stuff.

✓ Yes, definitely. My hometown welcomes all kinds of people, including young people, and it provides trains and other facilities.

'Is welcomed to' is incorrect; use the active verb 'welcomes.' 'Young youngsters' is redundant; use 'young people.' There is a repeated 'it it' and subject-verb agreement: 'it provide' should be 'it provides.' 'Stuff' is vague; replace with 'other facilities' for clarity. These changes fix adjective/adverb misuse, redundancy, and verb form. (ID 13)