Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and natural: correct pronunciation and grammar (Gansu, singular/plural agreement). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: My hometown is Lanzhou, in Gansu province. It’s a beautiful city by the Yellow River, but winters are very cold and the air is quite dry. I grew up enjoying the clear mountain views and local markets.

제안: Be specific and fluent: use correct verbs and clearer descriptions. Avoid hyperbole without support. Use linking words to connect opinion and reasons or examples. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I especially like the Lanzhou beef noodles, which are famous across China. The broth is rich and the noodles are hand-pulled, so they have a great texture. For example, I often go to a stall near the river because the soup there is particularly flavorful.

제안: Use correct tense and natural expressions for duration and habits. Provide a clear topic sentence about how long, then add linked supporting details about family ties and travel habits. Correct grammar and avoid repetition.

예시: I was born in Lanzhou and lived there for twenty years. My parents and many friends still live in the city, so I miss them a lot. I usually go back during summer and winter vacations to visit.

제안: Give a clear opinion with specific reasons and link them logically. Mention opportunities (jobs, education, leisure) if possible, and use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘food scene’, ‘recreational activities’). Stay concise.

예시: Yes, I believe Lanzhou is a good place for young people. The city has an energetic food scene and affordable living costs, and there are several universities nearby. Because of these factors, young people can enjoy life while saving money or studying.

× Well, my hometown is Lanzhou, located in Gangsu province.

✓ Well, my hometown is Lanzhou, located in Gansu province.

The sentence contains a spelling error rather than a grammatical article issue, but it also involves a proper noun that must be spelled correctly. 'Gangsu' is a misspelling of the province name 'Gansu'. Correct proper names to ensure clarity; no definite article is needed before the province name.

× That is a very beautiful city, but their temperature is is deep in the winter and their weather is so dry.

✓ That is a very beautiful city, but its temperatures are very low in the winter and the weather is very dry.

The plural possessive pronoun 'their' does not agree with the singular noun 'city'; use the singular possessive 'its'. 'Temperature' should be plural 'temperatures' when speaking generally, and 'is is' is a duplication; change to 'are' for plural. Also use 'very low' instead of 'deep' and replace 'their weather' with 'the weather' or 'its weather'. This improves subject-pronoun agreement and adjective usage.

× What do you like about your home town?

✓ What do you like about your hometown?

This is not strictly an article error but a spacing issue: 'home town' should be written as the single word 'hometown'. Ensure consistent compound noun spelling; no definite article required.

× To be honest, I really like my hometown beef noodles, which is the most famous noodles in China.

✓ To be honest, I really like my hometown's beef noodles, which are among the most famous noodles in China.

The phrase refers to 'noodles' (plural), so the relative clause must use the plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Also possessive form 'hometown's' clarifies the relationship. Use 'among the most famous' to avoid overstating if needed.

× You can sing it everywhere in other cities and I really like eat it.

✓ You can find it in many other cities, and I really like eating it.

'Sing' is incorrect here; likely intended 'find' or 'see'. Also English requires a gerund after 'like' when expressing general preferences: 'like eating', not 'like eat'. Replace 'everywhere in other cities' with 'in many other cities' for idiomatic usage.

× I think it's best food in the world.

✓ I think it's the best food in the world.

Superlative adjectives in English usually require the definite article 'the' before them: 'the best'. Without 'the' the sentence is ungrammatical.

× Actually, I was born there and I have lived there 20 years.

✓ Actually, I was born there and I have lived there for 20 years.

When expressing duration with the present perfect ('have lived') use 'for' plus the period of time: 'for 20 years'. This clarifies the time span and is grammatically required.

× My friend and my family members still live there.

✓ My friends and my family still live there.

'Friend' singular with 'my family members' is awkward; if referring to more than one friend use 'friends'. 'Family members' can be shortened to 'family'. Ensure number agreement between nouns if intended plural.

× I very miss them and I really like my hometown Lanzhou.

✓ I miss them very much, and I really like my hometown, Lanzhou.

'I very miss them' is not grammatical in English; use 'I miss them very much' or 'I miss them a lot'. Also add a comma before the appositive 'Lanzhou'. This fixes adverb placement and punctuation.

× When, when summer vacation and winter vacation, I will go back there.

✓ During summer and winter vacations, I will go back there.

The original has awkward phrasing. Use 'during' to indicate periods when an action happens and pluralize 'vacations' to match both occurrences. The future tense 'I will go back there' is fine; restructure the time phrase for clarity.

× Is your home town a good place for young people?

✓ Is your hometown a good place for young people?

Again 'home town' should be one word 'hometown'. No preposition error, but correct compound noun spelling improves accuracy.

× Yes, absolutely. I think my hometown is a good place for young people to focus their living because there are a lot of delicious food and diverse flavors.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I think my hometown is a good place for young people to base their lives because there is a lot of delicious food and many different flavors.

The phrase 'to focus their living' is unidiomatic; use 'to base their lives' or 'to live'. 'There are a lot of delicious food' mixes plural verb with uncountable noun; use 'there is a lot of delicious food' or 'there are a lot of delicious dishes'. 'Diverse flavors' is fine but 'many different flavors' is more natural.

× You can taste a lot of different flavors in there.

✓ You can taste a lot of different flavors there.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary when using 'there' to indicate a place. Remove 'in' for idiomatic English: 'taste flavors there' or 'taste flavors in the city' if specifying location.