Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu tính tự nhiên và rõ ràng; nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng sai và câu quá dài, rối. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi tên địa danh nếu cần, dùng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về vị trí và đặc điểm (ví dụ: ngành công nghiệp, dân số). Tránh những từ mơ hồ như “grounded population” và cấu trúc lộn xộn.

예시: My hometown is Vung Tau, located in the south of Vietnam. It is an industrial city with many factories and a large population, so it is quite bustling.

제안: Ý chính rõ nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (a lots → a lot of), danh từ số nhiều/số ít không đúng và cấu trúc chưa mạch lạc. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó dùng liên từ để nêu ví dụ cụ thể và thời gian. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (tên quán, khu mua sắm, hoạt động) để tăng tính cụ thể.

예시: I like the variety of places in my hometown, such as restaurants, supermarkets and shopping malls. For example, on weekends when I don’t have university classes, I usually go to a nearby mall with my friends to take photos and relax at a café.

제안: Câu trả lời hầu như không hiểu được do sai thì, cấu trúc và nhiều từ không phù hợp (“18 years old”, “player”, “jewel”). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng cấu trúc Present Perfect: “I have lived there for X years.” Sau đó thêm một câu ngắn nêu cảm nhận hoặc dự định tương lai, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác.

예시: I have lived there for eighteen years since I was born. I really enjoy living there because it is a lively and beautiful city, and I plan to continue living there for the foreseeable future.

제안: Ý trả lời phù hợp nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (missing verb, articles, plural forms) và lời diễn đạt lặp. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tiếp theo nêu 2-3 lý do cụ thể với liên từ, dùng từ vựng chính xác như “entertainment” → “entertain themselves” hoặc “places to hang out”.

예시: Yes, I think it is a great place for young people because there are many cafés, clubs and shopping malls. These places offer plenty of entertainment options where young people can hang out, take photos and create memories.

× My hometown but You, which is located in the South of Vietnam, is an industrial with many companies and a large space grounded population.

✓ My hometown, which is located in the south of Vietnam, is an industrial city with many companies and a large population.

Student used incorrect pronoun 'You' and odd phrases. Use relative clause 'which is located...' and noun 'city' after 'industrial'. 'Large space grounded population' is ungrammatical; correct to 'large population'. Also lowercase 'south' when used with 'of Vietnam' can be lowercase or capitalized; commonly 'the south of Vietnam' is fine. Suggestion: remove 'but You', use 'industrial city' and 'large population'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× My hometown has a lots of beautiful place like restaurant, supermarket and shopping mall.

✓ My hometown has a lot of beautiful places like restaurants, supermarkets, and shopping malls.

Used 'a lots' which is incorrect; correct form is 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. Also 'place' should be plural when listing examples. Each noun should be plural when referring to categories. Add commas and 'and' for listing. Grammar problem type ID:14

× So for example in the weekend when I don't have lesson in the university, I often hang out with my friend to take the photos and relax.

✓ For example, on the weekend when I don't have classes at university, I often hang out with my friends to take photos and relax.

Use 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend', 'lesson' should be plural 'classes', 'in the university' -> 'at university', 'my friend' -> 'my friends' to match habitual plural activity, 'take the photos' -> 'take photos' (no article). Also move 'for example' to the beginning and add commas. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I lived there for about 18 years old when I was born to now and I feel this player too beautiful and exciting to live and in the future I still jewel.

✓ I have lived there for about 18 years since I was born, and I feel this place is very beautiful and exciting to live in; in the future I still want to stay here.

Use present perfect 'have lived' for an action from past to present. 'for about 18 years old' is wrong; use 'for about 18 years' or 'since I was born'. 'Player' is wrong word; should be 'place'. 'Too beautiful' implies excess; use 'very beautiful'. 'to live' -> 'to live in'. 'I still jewel' is unclear; likely meant 'I still want to stay' so use 'want to stay here' or 'will still live here'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, I think my hometown a good place for young people because there are many cafes, a bar club and a shopping malls and I think a young people can get there to entertainment and take your photo to keep memory.

✓ Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because there are many cafes, bars and shopping malls, and young people can go there for entertainment and take photos to keep memories.

Missing verb 'is' after 'I think my hometown'. Use parallel plural nouns 'bars and shopping malls'. 'A bar club' is unnatural; use 'bars'. 'A young people' is wrong; use 'young people'. 'Get there to entertainment' -> 'go there for entertainment'. 'Take your photo to keep memory' should be 'take photos to keep memories' or 'take photos to remember'. Fix sentence flow and punctuation. Grammar problem type ID:26