Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh câu quá dài. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ phù hợp và sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: "pitch", "walk in farming").

예시: My hometown is Wangwen, a large village near the mountains. It is close to a small sports field and surrounded by farmland, where many people work as farmers.

제안: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng cần mạch lạc hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ và rút gọn lặp từ. Có thể thêm một ví dụ cụ thể ngắn gọn hơn về hoạt động buổi sáng để làm rõ ý.

예시: I like my hometown because the weather is pleasant year-round and the mornings are especially fresh. Moreover, the air quality is much better than in big cities, and people are very friendly — for example, neighbors often stop to chat in the morning.

제안: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và trực tiếp. Bạn có thể liên kết câu bằng một liên từ để mạch lạc hơn và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tần suất về thăm) nếu cần mở rộng.

예시: I lived in my hometown for about 18 years, but I now live in the city for work. I usually return home for major holidays and family events, roughly three or four times a year.

제안: Ý tưởng rõ ràng và có lý do. Nên sửa vài lỗi nhỏ, tránh lặp từ, và dùng từ chính xác hơn (ví dụ: "move to the cities" thay vì "live for the cities"). Có thể thêm một gợi ý hoặc so sánh ngắn về nơi phù hợp hơn cho giới trẻ.

예시: No, I don't think so, because there are few job opportunities in my hometown. Most jobs are in agriculture, which tend to be low-paid and unstable, so many young people move to cities to pursue better careers.

× My hometown is Wangwen, which is a large village in this city, is located near a pitch and a lot of mountain and people there mostly walk in farming.

✓ My hometown is Wangwen, a large village in this city. It is located near a field and several mountains, and most people there work in farming.

The original sentence has multiple clauses joined incorrectly and mixed ideas, causing a run-on and awkward phrasing. Split into two sentences for clarity and correct noun forms: 'a field' is more natural than 'a pitch' and 'several mountains' instead of 'a lot of mountain'. 'people there mostly walk in farming' is ungrammatical; use 'most people there work in farming'. Suggestion: break complex information into shorter sentences, use correct noun plurals, and choose appropriate verbs (work in farming).

× It's better than in many big cities for air quality and the people they are very friendly.

✓ The air quality is better than in many big cities, and the people are very friendly.

The phrase 'the people they are very friendly' incorrectly uses a subject pronoun 'they' redundantly. Remove the extra pronoun and make a clear subject ('the people') with the verb 'are'. Also separate ideas with a comma and conjunction. Suggestion: avoid redundant pronouns and ensure each clause has a single clear subject and verb.

× For example, neighbors often greet each other.

✓ For example, neighbors often greet one another.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'each other' is typically used for two people; 'one another' is better for groups. Keep present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'one another' for mutual actions among more than two people.

× I have lived in my hometown for about 18 years, but currently I live in the city for work.

✓ I lived in my hometown for about 18 years, but I currently live in the city for work.

The use of present perfect 'have lived' conflicts with the fact the speaker now lives in the city, so simple past 'lived' clarifies a completed period. Maintain 'currently' with simple present 'live'. Suggestion: use past tense for periods that are finished and present tense for current situations.

× I usually go back home during holidays or on special occasions to visit my family.

✓ I usually go back home during the holidays or on special occasions to visit my family.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'holidays' for natural English when referring to general holiday periods. 'During the holidays' is the common collocation. Suggestion: learn common prepositional phrases with articles.

× No, I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because it doesn't have many job opportunities.

✓ No, I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because it doesn't have many job opportunities.

The sentence is correct; no pronoun error. Included here to indicate no change needed. Suggestion: none.

× Most people work in agriculture, so jobs are often low paying and unstable.

✓ Most people work in agriculture, so jobs are often low-paying and unstable.

Compound adjective before a noun should use a hyphen: 'low-paying jobs'. The original used 'low paying' without hyphen, which is less correct in formal writing. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives when placed before nouns.

× As a result, many young people live for the cities to find better careers.

✓ As a result, many young people move to the cities to find better careers.

The phrase 'live for the cities' is incorrect. Use 'move to the cities' to indicate relocation. 'Live in the city' describes residence, but here the action is relocating for careers, so 'move to' is appropriate. Suggestion: choose verbs that accurately reflect intended actions (move to + place).