Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence stating location, then add one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms and word order, and avoid redundant fragments. Keep within 2–3 sentences and link ideas (e.g., "and", "so").

예시: My hometown is a small town called Converted, near Trump city. It has a different atmosphere from the big city — it is calm and full of nature, so I can enjoy quiet walks and fresh air.

제안: Be more specific and coherent: begin with a topic sentence naming what you like, then give a specific example and a brief reason. Use linking words such as "because", "for example", or "also" to connect ideas. Correct repetition and article usage ("a big historical building").

예시: I like the natural areas in my hometown because they are peaceful and easy to reach. For example, there is a large historical building surrounded by gardens, so I often go there to relax and escape the noise of the city.

제안: Answer directly and concisely: start with the exact length of time, then add one short supporting detail or feeling. Avoid fragmented sentences and repetition. Use linking words like "and" or "but" for contrast.

예시: I have lived there for four years. I remember many good moments there, but I still miss its unique natural scenery and relaxed atmosphere.

제안: Provide a clear opinion with reasons: state yes or no, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors ("because", "so"). Avoid unnatural phrasing and sentence fragments. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and give one brief example of missing facilities.

예시: Frankly, my hometown is not a good place for young people because it is quite remote and lacks entertainment options. For example, there are no cinemas or modern cafés, so young people often move to the city for social life.

× Where hometown is converted located nearby in Trump.

✓ My hometown is located near Trump.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words ('converted'). Use standard subject-verb-object order: 'My hometown is located near Trump.' Replace 'nearby in' with 'near' to show location concisely.

× This have different atmosphere for me.

✓ This has a different atmosphere for me.

Subject-verb agreement error and missing article. 'This' (singular) requires 'has' (third person singular). Use the article 'a' before 'different atmosphere' to indicate one distinct atmosphere.

× Big city it's quite small and calm so we I can enjoy the nature.

✓ Although the city is quite small and calm, I can enjoy nature.

The original mixes clauses and has pronoun errors ('we I') and unnecessary article 'the' before 'nature.' Use a subordinating conjunction ('Although') or a simple sentence and the correct pronoun 'I.' 'Nature' is uncountable so no article is needed.

× I like the natural places mostly in my hometown because I now live in in a big city where it's hard to find green spaces and calm atmosphere.

✓ I mostly like the natural places in my hometown because I now live in a big city where it's hard to find green spaces and a calm atmosphere.

Remove the duplicate 'in.' Move adverb 'mostly' before the verb phrase for natural word order. Add article 'a' before 'calm atmosphere' to indicate one kind of atmosphere.

× For example, we have a big historical architecture.

✓ For example, we have a large historic building.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun referring to style; use 'building' for a countable example. Use 'large' or 'big' and 'historic' (adjective form) rather than 'historical' for buildings of significance.

× I have lived in there for four years.

✓ I have lived there for four years.

The verb 'live' with 'there' does not require the preposition 'in.' Remove 'in' to form the correct present perfect expression of duration.

× I can remember the memories clearly, but I still long for the unique nature and common atmosphere. In my hometown.

✓ I can remember my memories clearly, but I still long for the unique nature and familiar atmosphere of my hometown.

The sentence fragments and awkward phrasing need consolidation. Use 'my memories' or simply 'I remember clearly.' 'Common atmosphere' is unclear; 'familiar atmosphere' better conveys longing. Move 'in my hometown' into the main sentence and avoid sentence fragment.

× It's frankly speaking, my hometown is so not. Good place for younger people.

✓ Frankly speaking, my hometown is not a good place for young people.

The original has incorrect word order and unnecessary punctuation. Place 'Frankly speaking' at the start, use the negative 'is not a good place,' and use 'young people' rather than 'younger people.' Remove 'so' which is misplaced.

× This is because it's quite. Remote from big city and entertainment.

✓ This is because it is quite remote from big cities and entertainment.

Split sentence and wrong punctuation cause fragments. Adverb placement: 'quite remote' should be together. Use plural 'big cities' or 'a big city' for clarity and combine with 'and entertainment' as a continuous phrase.