Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the town and country, then add one short precise detail (region or nearby city). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use proper word order: town, region, country.

예시: I come from Bisharik, a small town in the Fergana region of Uzbekistan. It's in the eastern part of Uzbekistan, near the city of Fergana.

제안: Give a clear main idea then support it with specific reasons. Use linking words (because, also) and avoid hesitations. Mention concrete details about what makes it comfortable (family, atmosphere, facilities) and keep to 1–3 supporting sentences.

예시: I like my hometown mainly because my family lives there, so I feel comfortable and supported. Also, it's peaceful and the community is close-knit, which makes it easy to relax and visit neighbors.

제안: Answer directly with a clear time period and a brief reason if needed. Use the present perfect or simple past appropriately: 'I've lived there since 2016' or 'I have lived there for X years.' Avoid fragmented words and filler sounds.

예시: I have lived there since 2016, so I have been there for about ten years. I moved back then because my family settled there.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific examples and linking words (because, for example, such as). Mention particular attractions or opportunities for young people (parks, shops, schools, activities). Avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: Yes, I think it's a good place for young people because there are many parks and sports facilities for outdoor activities. For example, there is a large community park and several youth clubs, and supermarkets and cafes make it convenient for socialising.

× My hometown is Central Asia. Asia is located uh Fergana, Uzbekistan, uh, Uzbekistan, Bergen region in Bisharik town.

✓ My hometown is in Central Asia. It is located in Fergana, Uzbekistan, in the Bukhara region, in Bisharik town.

The student omitted necessary prepositions 'in' before regions and used 'Asia' redundantly. Use 'in' to indicate location (preposition of place). Also 'Bergen' seems to be a misspelling of 'Bukhara' or a region name; ensure correct place name. Keep a clear sequence: region, country, town. Suggestion: Practice using 'in' + place (in + city/region/country) and list from larger to smaller (country/region/city).

× I, I like, uh, I like, uh, my hometown because it's uh, uh, comfort me and umm, there are my parents.

✓ I like my hometown because it comforts me and my parents are there.

The student used 'comfort me' without correct subject-verb structure and placed 'there are my parents' which is unnatural; 'there are' is used for existence and followed by plural noun, but the more natural phrasing is 'my parents are there.' This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure. Use subject + verb + object: 'it comforts me'. Suggestion: Form sentences with clear subject and verb; practice using 'comfort' as a transitive verb (it comforts me).

× I live in my parents and siblings.

✓ I live with my parents and siblings.

Using 'in' with family members is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'with' to indicate living together. This is a sentence structure and preposition error. Suggestion: Learn common collocations: 'live with someone', 'live in a house/apartment'. Replace 'in' with 'with' when referring to people you live with.

× I'll I'll leave it there in. 20 uh, since 2016 uh, because I. Create it.

✓ I've lived there since 2016.

The student attempted future 'I'll leave' and fragmented phrases; the correct answer to 'How long have you lived there?' requires present perfect: 'have lived' + 'since' for a starting point. Also 'create it' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'I've lived there since 2016.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions that began in the past and continue: 'I have lived there since 2016.' Practice contractions and removing unnecessary fillers.

× I think, uh, it's a, uh, good town for young people because uh, uh, there are, there are many, uh, park and supermarket and others.

✓ I think it's a good town for young people because there are many parks, supermarkets, and other facilities.

The student used singular nouns 'park' and 'supermarket' after 'many', which requires plural forms. Also 'and others' is vague; 'other facilities' is more natural. This is a singular/plural agreement error with quantifier 'many'. Suggestion: After 'many' use plural nouns (many parks). List items in plural when speaking generally about multiple places.