Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, accurate answer and avoid incorrect or confusing geographical statements. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “My hometown is Taiwan”) and then add one or two specific, relevant details (location, a notable city or region) using linking words. Keep it concise and natural (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

예시: My hometown is in Taiwan. It is an island in East Asia, south of mainland China, and the capital is Taipei. Many people know Taiwan for its night markets and technology industry.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence about what you like, then give specific supporting details and examples. Use linking words like “for example” or “in particular” and avoid unclear or incorrect names. Mention one or two specific foods or features and explain why you like them. Keep it natural and concise.

예시: I especially like the local cuisine in my hometown. For example, the garlic beef and a regional beef dish called Pingyao beef are very popular, and I enjoy them because the meat is tender and seasoned with fragrant spices.

제안: Give a direct time-frame answer first, then add a brief relevant detail about your current situation. Use clear linking words such as “but” or “however” correctly and avoid redundant or awkward phrases. One or two supporting sentences are enough.

예시: I lived in Taiwan from birth until I finished university, so for about 22 years. However, after studying there for four years I moved to Beijing to look for work.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and one brief example. Use linking words (because, however, for example) and avoid fillers and repetition. Explain why jobs are limited and suggest who might succeed there. Keep it coherent and no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: I don't think it's a great place for young people because there are few private-sector job opportunities. For example, many employers are state-owned enterprises that often hire through personal connections, so unless you have those contacts it's hard to find work.

× My hometown is Taiwan.

✓ My hometown is Taiwan.

No correction needed; sentence is acceptable. Keep as 'My hometown is Taiwan.' Note: 'the' is not used before country names like Taiwan.

× The capital city in Shenzhen province is in the central part of China, not far away from Beijing.

✓ Shenzhen is a city in Guangdong province in the southern part of China, not far from Hong Kong.

Original sentence contains factual and article errors. 'The capital city in Shenzhen province' is incorrect because Shenzhen is a city, not a province capital, and 'Shenzhen province' is wrong; the correct province is Guangdong. Also 'in the central part of China' contradicts geography. Correct the noun phrases and remove unnecessary 'the'. Ensure accuracy and use 'not far from' rather than 'not far away from'.

× Of special food such as garlic beef, especially pinyo beef.

✓ There are special foods such as garlic beef, especially Pinyo beef.

Sentence lacked a main verb and clear subject. Adding 'There are' fixes 'there be' and sentence structure. Capitalize proper noun 'Pinyo'. This meets Grammar Problem Type IDs 3 and 26.

× Pinyo is a base in Chinese province of Chinese province.

✓ Pinyo is a town in a Chinese province.

Original repeats 'Chinese province' and uses 'base' incorrectly. Use 'town' and a single 'Chinese province' to correct redundancy and choose a suitable noun.

× It is famous for its beef.

✓ It is famous for its beef.

Sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. Keep as is.

× I've lived in Taiwan since I was born and I spent my university lifestyle life also in Taiwan.

✓ I've lived in Taiwan since I was born, and I spent my university years in Taiwan as well.

Mixed tenses: 'I've lived... since I was born' (present perfect) is fine. 'I spent my university lifestyle life' is ungrammatical and wordy. Use 'spent my university years' to match past period and improve collocation. Remove redundant words.

× But after studying in four years in Taiwan, I moved in Beijing to seek a job.

✓ But after studying for four years in Taiwan, I moved to Beijing to look for a job.

Use 'for four years' to indicate duration. Use 'moved to Beijing' (correct preposition) not 'moved in Beijing'. Prefer 'look for a job' or 'seek a job'—'look for' is more natural in this context.

× No, I don't think it is a great place for young people to live in cause uh, young people cannot find a job in Chinese province.

✓ No, I don't think it is a great place for young people to live because young people cannot find jobs in that province.

Replace informal 'cause' with 'because'. Use plural 'jobs' for generalability (quantifier/plural issue). Use 'that province' or the province name rather than 'Chinese province' for clarity. Remove filler words.

× Uh, you, you know, there are more state owned enterprises than private companies.

✓ There are more state-owned enterprises than private companies.

Hyphenate 'state-owned' as a compound adjective and remove filler 'you, you know'. Sentence otherwise correct; keep plural nouns for comparison.

× So umm, unless you have a special connections in state owned.

✓ So, unless you have special connections in state-owned enterprises.

'a special connections' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use plural 'connections' or 'a special connection'. Add the noun 'enterprises' after 'state-owned' to complete the phrase. Remove filler 'umm' and add comma for clarity.