Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, give one or two specific details (location, length of residence) using correct tense and avoid redundancy. Use linking words only if adding details.

예시: My hometown is Mokadata, a quiet neighborhood in the countryside. I have lived there with my family for over twenty years, and it is a safe and peaceful place to raise children.

제안: Give specific, coherent details and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence stating what you like, then support with specific examples (friendly neighbors, scenery, agriculture). Use linking words (for example, also) and correct noun-verb agreement. Avoid unclear phrases and incomplete statistics.

예시: I like my hometown mainly because of its friendly community and beautiful scenery. For example, most residents are hardworking and welcoming, and the town is surrounded by rice fields and farmland, which makes the air feel fresh and peaceful.

제안: Answer directly with a correct time expression, then add one specific supporting detail. Use present perfect correctly (have lived) and avoid redundant phrases. Keep it to one or two sentences.

예시: I have lived there for almost twenty years with my family. During that time we have built many memories through family gatherings and local festivals.

제안: Give a clear yes/no answer, then explain with specific reasons relevant to young people (events, jobs, facilities). Use linking words (for example, because, for instance) and correct phrasing (recommend to, young people). Be concise and stick to two sentences max.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because there are community events and seasonal festivals that create social opportunities. For instance, every February we hold a festival celebrating sweet potatoes with music, food stalls and activities that attract many young visitors.

× It is located in quiet neighborhood in Mokadata.

✓ It is located in a quiet neighborhood in Mokadata.

Missing definite/indefinite article before a singular countable noun. 'Neighborhood' is a singular countable noun and requires an article; use 'a' here because it is one of many neighborhoods. Suggestion: use 'a' or 'the' depending on context; here 'a quiet neighborhood' is appropriate.

× I've been living there with my family more than 20 years ago.

✓ I have lived there with my family for more than 20 years.

Incorrect combination of present perfect continuous/tense with a past time expression 'ago'. 'Have been living' or 'have lived' should pair with a duration using 'for' not 'ago'. Use present perfect with 'for more than 20 years' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to present. Suggestion: say 'I have lived there for more than 20 years.'

× I could say that my hometown is safe and peaceful to live.

✓ I could say that my hometown is safe and peaceful to live in.

Missing preposition 'in' after 'live' to complete the phrasal verb 'live in'. Without 'in' the sentence is ungrammatical. Suggestion: include 'in' at the end: 'peaceful to live in.'

× Our population approximately people who live there.

✓ Our population is approximately [number] people who live there.

Sentence missing verb and a numeric quantifier. 'Approximately' must modify a number; a verb 'is' is needed for 'population' as subject. Suggestion: supply an estimated number and include 'is', e.g. 'Our population is approximately 5,000 people.'

× Many people in our town is friendly and hardworking, most of them.

✓ Many people in our town are friendly and hardworking; most of them are.

Subject 'Many people' is plural, so verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Also the tag 'most of them' needs a verb for clarity. Suggestion: use plural verb forms and restructure: 'Many people in our town are friendly and hardworking; most of them are.'

× It has a strong sense of community, what I really like about my hometown.

✓ It has a strong sense of community, which I really like about my hometown.

Relative clause connector is incorrect. Use 'which' to refer to the preceding clause 'It has a strong sense of community.' 'What' would introduce a noun clause and is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'which' or rephrase: 'I really like its strong sense of community.'

× Turn a lot off scenery and surrounded by agricultural areas and rice field which makes feel refreshing for the.

✓ There is a lot of scenery, and it is surrounded by agricultural areas and rice fields, which makes it feel refreshing.

Multiple issues: 'Turn a lot off' is garbled; missing subject and auxiliary; 'rice field' should be plural 'rice fields'; missing subject 'it' in 'makes it feel'. Use 'There is' to introduce existence and proper relative clause. Suggestion: 'There is a lot of beautiful scenery, and it is surrounded by agricultural areas and rice fields, which makes it feel refreshing.'

× I've been living there for almost 20 years ago with my family and there are a lot of memories with my family and gathering time, spending and navigating in our local town.

✓ I have lived there for almost 20 years with my family, and I have many memories of family gatherings, outings, and exploring our local town.

Again, present perfect should not combine with 'ago'; use 'for almost 20 years'. Sentence is also wordy and has unclear nouns 'spending and navigating'. Use clearer nouns/verbs: 'memories of family gatherings, outings, and exploring'. Also add subject 'I' for the second clause and use parallel structure.

× Yes, I generally do.

✓ Yes, I generally do agree.

Response 'Yes, I generally do.' is vague because 'do' needs an object or complement in context. Adding 'agree' clarifies what the speaker means. Suggestion: say 'Yes, I generally agree.' or simply 'Yes, generally.'

× I really like to recommend for some people especially to young generation to visit there in our hometown in February, always celebrate a commodity festival to honor our local product, which is sweet potato or camote.

✓ I would especially recommend that young people visit our hometown in February, when we celebrate a festival to honor our local product, the sweet potato (camote).

Problems: incorrect verb 'like to recommend for'; preposition misuse 'to visit there in our hometown' should be 'visit our hometown'; awkward clause order. Use 'recommend that' plus base verb. 'When' introduces the time of celebration. Also clarify 'commodity festival' as 'festival'. Suggestion: 'I would recommend that young people visit our hometown in February when we celebrate a festival honoring our sweet potato (camote).'

× There are several activities in our town and there are a lot of food selling in near in our bazaar and it is convenient for me to live there.

✓ There are several activities in our town, and many food stalls sell near our bazaar, so it is convenient for me to live there.

Incorrect prepositions 'selling in near in' and awkward phrasing. Use 'many food stalls sell near our bazaar' or 'there are many food stalls near the bazaar'. Also connect ideas with 'so' to express result. Suggestion: 'There are several activities in our town, many food stalls near the bazaar, and it is convenient to live there.'