Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the place, then add one or two specific details using correct grammar. Avoid filler words ('uh') and wrong possessives ('his'). Use linking words if adding details.

예시: My hometown is Kuminda, a district in Bangladesh. It is known for its many rivers and for unique local desserts, which attract visitors from neighboring areas.

제안: Organize your response: start with one main point, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, also) and avoid repetition ('beautiful' twice). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I especially like the local desserts because they are unique to our district. For example, we make a sweet called X that you can’t find elsewhere. I also love the rivers, which make the scenery peaceful and popular for picnics.

제안: Give a clear, direct answer first with correct tense and numbers. Remove redundant phrases and hesitations. If necessary, add one short clarification with a linking word (for example, "so").

예시: I have lived in Kuminda since I was two years old, so I’ve spent about twelve years there. I grew up there and know the town well.

제안: Answer directly and support your opinion with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, and). Avoid vague or contradictory descriptions and repeated words.

예시: Yes, I think it’s great for young people because it is safe and community-oriented, with friendly, helpful neighbors. Also, there are pleasant green spaces and rivers where young people can relax and socialise.

× Uh, my hometown is in Kuminda, Bangladesh which is the second largest or third largest uh district in my country and it has famous for his river and his special desert item foods.

✓ Uh, my hometown is Kuminda, Bangladesh, which is the second- or third-largest district in my country, and it is famous for its rivers and its special dessert items.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns 'his' to refer to a place; places require 'its' (pronoun error). Also 'has famous for' is ungrammatical; the correct structure is 'is famous for' (verb usage). 'Desert' is the wrong word; 'dessert' is correct for sweet foods. Hyphenation and punctuation improve readability. Suggestion: replace 'his' with 'its', use 'is famous for', and 'dessert items' for sweet foods. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× I like the sweets and the dessert items the most because we have the most special and unique dessert item in my district and there are several rivers in my hometown and it attracts me more than anything and all over the beauty of my hometown is very beautiful.

✓ I like the sweets and dessert items the most because we have very special and unique desserts in my district. There are several rivers in my hometown, which attract me more than anything, and overall my hometown is very beautiful.

The original mixes singular and plural ('dessert item' vs 'dessert items') and repeats redundant adjectives ('most special and unique' and 'all over the beauty... is very beautiful'). Use 'very special and unique desserts' and 'overall' instead of 'all over the beauty'. Also change 'it attracts me' to 'which attract me' to refer to 'rivers' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: use concise, non-redundant adjectives and match plural/singular consistently. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× After since I I have birth I seen the whole hometown and I have lived there since I was 2 years old and the approximate I if I have to estimate approximate I have lived there 12 years in my life.

✓ Since my birth I have known the whole hometown, and I have lived there since I was two years old. If I have to estimate, I have lived there for about twelve years of my life.

The original contains incorrect time expressions ('After since', 'I I have birth'), incorrect verb forms ('I seen' should be 'I have seen' or better 'I have known'), word order issues, and awkward repetition ('approximate I if I have to estimate approximate'). Use 'since my birth' and 'I have lived there since I was two years old' for correct tense and time reference. Use 'for about twelve years' to express an approximate duration. Suggestion: simplify time phrases and correct verb forms. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× Yeah, absolutely. It's a very beautiful place. It it is. It's a grey green city and it's a beautiful city with a largest village and there is loving and helping people and everyone should visit my hometown.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. It's a very beautiful place. It's a green-gray city, and it's a beautiful city with a large village. There are loving and helpful people, and everyone should visit my hometown.

Several article and adjective issues: 'a largest village' is incorrect; use 'a large village' (superlative 'largest' requires 'the' and context). 'Grey green' is awkward; 'green-gray' or 'greenish' works. 'There is loving and helping people' is ungrammatical: for plural people use 'there are', and 'helping' should be 'helpful' (adjective form). Suggestion: correct article usage ('a' vs 'the'), use proper adjective forms, and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 22)