Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), fix verb forms and word choice, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words to contrast city and residential area.

예시: I come from Osaka, the second-largest city in Japan. However, I grew up in a residential neighbourhood, which is much quieter and more relaxed than the city centre, so I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Be specific and grammatically correct. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, however, and). Avoid vague phrases like ‘a part of nature’s’.

예시: I like that my hometown combines natural areas with excellent transport links. For example, there are parks and rivers nearby, and frequent trains make it easy to reach the city for work or shopping.

제안: Give a direct answer then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct phrasing (e.g. ‘since I was born’ is fine) and avoid exaggerations like ‘I know everything’. Use linking words to connect sentences.

예시: I have lived there since I was born, so I grew up in the same neighbourhood. As a result, I can easily show visitors local restaurants, parks and good shopping streets.

제안: Answer the question directly and use accurate grammar and vocabulary. Clarify who benefits (young people or parents) and provide specific reasons and examples. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘also’.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because there are parks and safe play areas for children. Also, the nearby shops, schools and community activities make it convenient for families.

× My hometown is Osaka in Japan, which is the second largest city, so it's real develop and we go so many buildings, but I'm originally from umm, part of the residence area, which is really quiet and uh, relaxed place, so I really like.

✓ My hometown is Osaka in Japan, which is the second largest city, so it's really developed and has many tall buildings, but I'm originally from a residential area, which is really quiet and relaxed, so I like it a lot.

Multiple adjective/adverb errors: 'real develop' should be 'really developed' (adverb + past participle) to describe state; 'so many buildings' is awkward for tall/large; use 'has many tall buildings' or 'many buildings'; 'part of the residence area' should be 'a residential area' (correct adjective form); 'relaxed place' -> 'relaxed' as adjective modifying area and add 'it' as object of 'like'. Suggest using correct adjective/adverb forms and natural collocations such as 'really developed', 'residential area', and include necessary pronouns like 'it'.

× So I really like a part of nature's, however we have, uh, lots of transport, easy to get to city as well.

✓ I really like the natural areas, and we also have lots of transport, so it is easy to get to the city.

'a part of nature's' is ungrammatical and misuses possessive form; use 'natural areas' or 'nature'. 'Lots of transport' is acceptable but follow with 'so it is easy to get to the city' for clarity. Fix quantifier/collocation and sentence flow.

× So we have both side of umm, positive things, which is my favorite part in my hometown.

✓ We have the best of both worlds, with positive aspects of both nature and the city, which is my favorite part of my hometown.

'Both side of positive things' is incorrect conjunction/phrase structure. Use an idiom or correct structure like 'the best of both worlds' or 'both sides have positive things'. Also 'my favorite part in my hometown' should be 'of my hometown'. This fixes conjunction and prepositional choice.

× I've lived there since I was born, so I grew up there and I know everything about my hometown.

✓ I have lived there since I was born, so I grew up there and I know a lot about my hometown.

Mixing 'I know everything' is exaggerated; use 'a lot' for naturalness. 'I've lived there since I was born' is correct present perfect for continuing situation; keep consistent. Clarify register by avoiding absolute 'everything'.

× So if I show people around, like I know a lot of places such as restaurant and park and nice place to shop.

✓ If I show people around, I know many places such as restaurants, parks, and nice places to shop.

Preposition and plural errors: 'such as restaurant and park and nice place' should use plurals and commas: 'restaurants, parks, and nice places to shop.' Use 'many' not 'a lot of' optionally. Ensure parallel list structure.

× I would say it's really good for parents to grow their children because we have both side of nature and city, so it's really good to let their kids play at the park, but also there are lots of stores that parent.

✓ I would say it's really good for parents raising their children because we have both nature and the city, so it's great for letting kids play in the park, and there are also lots of stores for parents.

'To grow their children' is unnatural; use 'raising their children'. 'Both side of nature and city' -> 'both nature and the city'. 'Let their kids play at the park' -> 'letting kids play in the park'. Final fragment 'stores that parent' is incomplete; fix to 'stores for parents'. Modal 'would say' is fine but verbs and prepositions need correction.