Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Correct place names and use one or two sentences as a topic sentence followed by a specific detail. Avoid small factual errors and redundant phrases.

예시: I come from Sumy, a city in north‑eastern Ukraine with about 200,000 residents. I love it for its friendly community and relaxed atmosphere, which makes it a comfortable place to grow up.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (hotel→hometown), and coherent supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and finish the thought. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and give a specific example.

예시: What I like most about my hometown is people’s resilience. Even during the war, locals still enjoy small pleasures, for example meeting friends for breakfast at a cafe or spending evenings with family, which shows how much community life matters.

제안: Give a clear timeframe in the first sentence and then add one or two specific feelings or reasons. Avoid repetition and correct name spelling. Limit to maximum of 4–5 sentences.

예시: I have lived in Sumy all my life; I was born and raised there. Even when I travel abroad, I often miss home and feel a strong desire to return because of my family ties and childhood memories.

제안: Be honest but more balanced and diplomatic. Start with a topic sentence answering the question, then give specific pros and cons using linking words (however, although, on the other hand). Avoid extreme phrasing and keep it calm and measured.

예시: It's a mixed picture for young people: on the one hand, Sumy offers strong community ties and social life; however, because of the current security situation, opportunities and safety are limited, so many young people face difficult choices about staying or leaving.

× My hometown is located in Ukraine, particularly in northwest.

✓ My hometown is located in Ukraine, particularly in the northwest.

Missing definite article before 'northwest'. Use 'the northwest' when referring to a region of a country. Suggestion: include 'the' before regional directions (the north, the south, the northwest).

× It is called Sumi.

✓ It is called Sumy.

Spelling error of the city name affects clarity. Use the correct proper noun spelling 'Sumy'. Ensure proper nouns are spelled correctly and consistently.

× Around 200,000 people live here.

✓ Around 200,000 people live here.

Sentence is grammatically correct for plural 'people'. No change needed; included for completeness.

× My favorite thing about my hotel is that despite the fact that it's war and really hard situation in our city, people still find this passion to live and to enjoy simple moments.

✓ My favorite thing about my hometown is that, despite the war and the difficult situation in our city, people still find the passion to live and enjoy simple moments.

Multiple issues: wrong noun 'hotel' should be 'hometown'; article omissions before 'war' and 'difficult situation' require 'the' when referring to a specific ongoing situation; adjective 'hard' more natural as 'difficult'; unnecessary infinitive 'to' before 'enjoy'. Suggestions: use correct noun, include definite articles for specific situations, choose natural adjective, and remove extra 'to' before verbs after 'find'.

× For example, going to a cafe for breakfast or spending time with their families.

✓ For example, people go to a café for breakfast or spend time with their families.

Fragment lacking a clear subject and main verb. Make it a full sentence by adding subject and correct verb forms. Also use consistent verb forms 'go' and 'spend'.

× And it's really.

✓ And it really is.

Incomplete sentence: missing complement after 'really'. Reorder to form complete emphasis 'it really is'. Alternatively add an adjective (e.g. 'it is really uplifting'). Ensure sentences are complete with subject and verb or a clear predicate.

× I was born in Sumi and I lived in Suma for all of my life.

✓ I was born in Sumy and I have lived in Sumy all my life.

Inconsistent tense and spelling. Use present perfect 'have lived' to indicate continuous action up to now ('for all my life' / 'all my life'); correct proper noun spelling 'Sumy'. Remove redundant 'of' in 'all my life'.

× I can't imagine living somewhere out of my city and whenever I'm somewhere abroad, I always want to come back and sometimes I even cry about it.

✓ I can't imagine living anywhere outside my city, and whenever I'm abroad I always want to come back and sometimes I even cry about it.

Use 'outside' or 'out of' with correct collocation: 'living anywhere outside my city' is more natural. 'Somewhere abroad' simplified to 'abroad'. Remove unnecessary comma and streamline phrasing.

× Even though it's war right now, I still find this passion to come back.

✓ Even though there is a war right now, I still feel this desire to come back.

'It's war' is colloquial and missing article; use 'there is a war' or 'the war'. 'Find this passion to come back' is unnatural — use 'feel this desire to come back'. Use present tense 'feel' for current state.

× Honestly, it's hard to give a direct answer for this question because it's obvious that living in our city can be hard, despite the fact that young people really enjoy living here.

✓ Honestly, it's hard to give a direct answer to this question because, although living in our city can be difficult, many young people still enjoy living here.

Use 'answer to this question' not 'for'; avoid repeating 'hard'—use 'difficult'; reorder clause for clarity and consistency. 'Despite the fact that' is wordy; 'although' is more concise. Use 'many young people' for natural quantification.

× It's obviously dangerous and it's a little rude to say, but you can die in any moment to be honest.

✓ It's obviously dangerous, and it's a bit blunt to say, but you can die at any moment, to be honest.

'A little rude' better expressed as 'a bit blunt' in this context. Use idiomatic 'at any moment' not 'in any moment'. Add commas for natural pauses. 'To be honest' as a parenthetical phrase should be set off by commas.