Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and use a clear topic sentence. Mention one or two specific cultural details and use correct verb tenses. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: I come from Bukidnon, a province in the Philippines. I lived there for almost 17 years before moving to Manila. Bukidnon is known for its rich indigenous culture; for example, the annual Kaamulan Festival showcases traditional dances and colorful native costumes.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural forms and verb choice, and add one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "for instance" or "also").

예시: I like Bukidnon for its natural scenery and outdoor activities. For instance, the mountains and rivers are perfect for hiking and picnics, and Lake Apo is a popular spot for families to relax.

제안: Use correct tense consistency (present perfect for duration and present simple for habits), avoid small grammar errors, and be concise. Combine two ideas with a linking phrase like "however" or "but".

예시: I lived in Bukidnon for almost 17 years before moving to Manila to study and work. However, I still visit my family there whenever I have free time.

제안: Provide a clear opinion first, then give two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases (e.g. "locked off opportunity") with precise expressions like "limited opportunities" and correct subject-verb agreement.

예시: I don't think it's a good place for many young people because there are limited educational and job opportunities. As a result, most teenagers and young adults move to cities to study and start their careers, so the town’s population is mainly older people.

× I live there for almost 17 years before I move here in Manila.

✓ I lived there for almost 17 years before I moved here to Manila.

The sentence refers to a past period that finished when the speaker moved, so past tense should be used. Use 'lived' and 'moved' to indicate completed past actions. Suggestion: use simple past for completed actions and keep tense consistent.

× They have a very nice culture there.

✓ It has a very nice culture there.

The subject refers to 'hometown' (singular), so the verb should agree with a singular subject. Replace 'They have' with 'It has'. Alternatively, if referring to 'people' use 'They have a very nice culture'. Ensure pronoun matches the intended noun.

× They celebrate Kamalan Festival every year to represent the ethnic tribes, the people who live there.

✓ They celebrate the Kamalan Festival every year to represent the ethnic tribes, the people who live there.

Missing definite article before the festival name; also sentence structure is acceptable otherwise. Add 'the' before the festival name when referring to a specific event. Ensure article usage matches proper nouns that require it.

× I like Bukidnon because it has many tourist attraction such as mountain, rivers, lakes that good to band with your friends and family and also it's good for picnics and hikings.

✓ I like Bukidnon because it has many tourist attractions such as mountains, rivers, and lakes that are good for bonding with your friends and family, and it's also good for picnics and hiking.

Multiple issues: 'attraction' should be plural 'attractions'; 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains'; missing verb 'are' before 'good'; 'band' is incorrect word choice—use 'bonding'; 'hikings' is uncountable 'hiking'. Ensure plural nouns match and use correct verb forms and gerunds.

× I lived there for almost 17 years before I moved out here in Manila to pursue my studies and career.

✓ I lived there for almost 17 years before I moved out here to Manila to pursue my studies and my career.

Sentence mostly correct but needs preposition placement and possessive consistency: 'moved out here to Manila' is awkward—'moved out here to Manila' adjusted to 'moved out here to Manila' kept but adding 'my' before 'career' clarifies possession. Suggest smoother phrasing: 'moved to Manila to pursue my studies and my career.'

× But if I have a free time, I went there to visit my families.

✓ But if I have free time, I go there to visit my family.

Conditional referring to habitual present requires present simple: 'if I have free time, I go'. 'a free time' is incorrect—'free time' is uncountable. 'Went' is past; use 'go'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' unless multiple families intended. Use consistent tense for habitual actions.

× I don't think so because most of the teenagers and young adult moved to the city to pursue their studies and build their career because the town was locked off opportunity so most of the people who live there is the elder.

✓ I don't think so because most teenagers and young adults move to the city to pursue their studies and build their careers, since the town lacks opportunities, so most of the people who live there are elderly.

Multiple pronoun and agreement issues: 'young adult' should be plural 'young adults'; verb tense for general truth is present simple 'move'; 'their studies and build their career' should be 'their studies and build their careers' for agreement; 'locked off opportunity' is incorrect phrase—use 'lacks opportunities'; 'most of the people who live there is the elder' has subject-verb disagreement and wrong noun—use 'are elderly' or 'are older people'. Fix pronouns and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Is your home town a good place for young people?

✓ Is your hometown a good place for young people?

Not a grammar error in tense but 'home town' is commonly written as one word 'hometown'. This is a spelling/compound word convention rather than grammar; maintain standard form 'hometown'.

× They celebrate Kamalan Festival every year to represent the ethnic tribes, the people who live there.

✓ They celebrate the Kamalan Festival every year to represent the ethnic tribes, the people who live there.

No change needed for verb form 'celebrate' because it correctly matches present simple for habitual action. Included here only to note that present simple is appropriate for regular events.