Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise in the topic sentence, avoid repeating ideas and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Use a linking phrase when adding personal habit to make it coherent.

예시: I come from a small village in southern Tamil Nadu, known for its rich red soil and extensive jackfruit and cashew plantations. In addition, the village has a weekly market where farmers sell fresh produce, and I visit my family there whenever I have free time.

제안: Fix repetition and grammatical errors, combine sentences with linking words, and provide a specific example or reason to make the answer more vivid.

예시: I particularly like the pond near my house because it is full of fish and a few ducks, which creates a peaceful atmosphere. For example, I usually sit by the pond in the evenings and chat with friends about our day, which helps me relax after studying.

제안: Give a clear timeframe in the topic sentence and avoid vague phrasing like 'tend to miss.' Use linking words to connect past and present and add a specific memory to support your feeling.

예시: I lived in my hometown until I finished high school at age 17, and then I moved to Chennai for college. I still miss it because of memories like celebrating festivals with my family in the village square, which I often recall when I feel homesick.

제안: Make the answer more natural by starting with a clear opinion, correct grammar (singular/plural and tense), and add one concrete example of an institution or program to support your claim.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because several reputable schools and a vocational training center have opened recently. For instance, the new science-focused high school offers scholarships and modern labs, helping students graduate wellprepared for university.

× I travel to my native place with my family whenever I get free time.

✓ I travel to my native place with my family whenever I get free time.

No change needed. The sentence is acceptable; however, a more natural preposition would be 'in my free time' or phrase 'when I am free'. Suggestion: 'whenever I am free' for smoother English.

× I like the pond which is near to my home which has which has a lot of fishes and few ducks.

✓ I like the pond which is near my home; it has a lot of fish and a few ducks.

Preposition 'near to' is nonstandard in many varieties of English; use 'near'. 'Which has which has' is a repetition and incorrect. 'Fishes' as plural is usually 'fish' when referring to multiple individuals of the same species. Use 'a few' rather than 'few' when you mean some ducks (positive quantity). Also split into two clauses for clarity.

× I often go there whenever I have free time.

✓ I often go there whenever I have free time.

No grammatical change required. Sentence is correct. Optionally use 'when I have free time' to avoid redundancy with 'whenever' but both are acceptable.

× Also I tend to meet my friends and have a chit chat with them which makes me quite relaxed.

✓ Also, I tend to meet my friends and have a chat with them, which makes me quite relaxed.

'Chit chat' is informal; 'a chat' is more natural. Add comma after 'Also' and before the relative clause. 'Which makes me quite relaxed' correctly refers to the preceding idea; no pronoun change needed beyond removing 'them' ambiguity—keeping 'them' is fine as friends are the object.

× I stayed in my birthplace until I completed my high school.

✓ I stayed in my birthplace until I completed high school.

Article 'my' before 'high school' is unnecessary in general statements about education level. Tense is appropriate ('stayed' and 'completed' in past). Use concise phrasing.

× After that, I moved to a different place called Chennai, which is where I currently live.

✓ After that, I moved to a different place called Chennai, where I currently live.

The clause 'which is where' is wordy; replacing with 'where' is more natural. Tenses are consistent: past action of moving, present state of living.

× I tend to miss my hometown because it gives me beautiful memories and the quality time I spent with my family and friends.

✓ I tend to miss my hometown because it gives me beautiful memories and reminds me of the quality time I spent with my family and friends.

Mix of present and past is acceptable but the original 'it gives me beautiful memories and the quality time I spent' is awkward. Use 'reminds me of' to link present tendency to past experiences. Ensure 'spent' remains past to match the time reference.

× Yes, my native place is a great place for young children.

✓ Yes, my native place is a great place for young people.

Question asked about 'young people'; replying 'young children' changes meaning. Use matching adjective 'young people' to be consistent with the question.

× A lot of reputed education institutions have come up in the recent years where they are providing quality education.

✓ A lot of reputable educational institutions have come up in recent years, where they provide quality education.

'Reputed' is awkward here; 'reputable' is the correct adjective. 'Education institutions' should be 'educational institutions'. 'In the recent years' should be 'in recent years'. Use present simple 'provide' to state a general fact rather than 'are providing' unless emphasizing ongoing action.

× This really help them to graduate and aspire what they want to achieve in the future.

✓ This really helps them graduate and pursue what they want to achieve in the future.

Subject 'This' is singular, so verb should be 'helps' not 'help'. 'Help them to graduate' is acceptable but 'helps them graduate' is more natural. 'Aspire what they want to achieve' is incorrect collocation; use 'pursue what they want to achieve' or 'aspire to what they want to achieve' (better: 'pursue').