Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be slightly more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “small town in Tanahu” already implies location). Pronounce proper nouns clearly and use a preposition: “in Tanahu District.”

예시: I’m from Damoli, a small town in Tanahu District in western Nepal. It’s a quiet place surrounded by hills, about two hours’ drive from the nearest city.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “quite less crowded” is incorrect). Use linking words to add a specific reason or example. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: I love that my hometown is peaceful and not crowded. Because it’s surrounded by hills and mountains, the air is fresher and there are many pleasant walking trails for me to relax on.

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct and coherent: give a clear time statement, then briefly explain why you stayed. Use correct tense and prepositions and avoid fragmented clauses. Add one specific supportive detail.

예시: I’ve lived there for almost 18 years — my family moved there when I was born. We stayed because the community is friendly and the area is close to nature, which I’ve always enjoyed.

제안: Answer directly, then give balanced reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “a good fit,” “lack of opportunities,” “many people tend”). Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a specific example of what’s missing or why some still stay.

예시: To be honest, it’s not a great fit for young people because there are limited job opportunities and few higher-education options. As a result, many people move to the city, although others prefer to stay for a quieter, more peaceful lifestyle.

× When I was born my family moved to there and because it has friendly and natural.

✓ When I was born, my family moved there because it is friendly and has a natural environment.

Error: incorrect preposition 'to there' and awkward clause 'because it has friendly and natural'. Use 'moved there' (no 'to') and rephrase the descriptive clause. Also maintain present simple 'is' for general state and add a noun 'environment' after 'natural'. Add a comma after the introductory time clause for clarity.

× I've been living there for almost 18 years.

✓ I have lived there for almost 18 years.

Error: Present perfect continuous 'have been living' is acceptable but 'have lived' better matches the question 'How long have you lived there?' Both are possible; prefer simple present perfect to emphasize duration. Use full form 'I have' in formal speech. No change in meaning, just style and register.

× What I really love about my hometown is that it is quite less crowded and populated compared to others and also it is surrounded by hills and mountains.

✓ What I really love about my hometown is that it is much less crowded and populated than others, and it is surrounded by hills and mountains.

Error: 'quite less' is ungrammatical; use 'much less' or 'less' alone. Use 'than' for comparisons (not 'compared to others' though that is possible). Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction. 'It is surrounded by hills and mountains' is fine.

× So many peoples tends to move towards the city but I think it is a ideal place for living peaceful life.

✓ So many people tend to move to the city, but I think it is an ideal place for living a peaceful life.

Errors: 'peoples' is incorrect plural of 'people' (use 'people'). Verb agreement: 'tends' should be 'tend' to match plural subject. Preposition 'towards' can be 'to' here. Article: use 'an ideal' (vowel sound 'ai') and include 'a' before 'peaceful life'. Also add a comma before 'but'.