Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more concisely and correct grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like "but" correctly and avoid invented words (e.g., "expert fee").

예시: My hometown is a medium-sized city in central Vietnam. It is not as bustling as Ho Chi Minh City, but it is very charming and has well-preserved French colonial architecture, which makes it unique.

제안: Clarify unclear phrases and fix grammar. Give one linking phrase between ideas (e.g., "also"), and be specific about the cuisine or a dish to make the answer more vivid.

예시: I love the strong sense of community in my hometown. Everyone knows each other and people are very supportive. Also, the local street food, especially the grilled pork and noodle soup, is delicious and affordable, so I often miss it when I'm away.

제안: Use the correct tense and avoid fillers. Give a clear time frame in one sentence, then a brief supporting detail about why you left or how often you return. Remove hesitations like "uh" and duplicate words.

예시: I lived there for the first 18 years of my life and completed my primary and secondary schooling there. I moved to a bigger city recently to attend university, but I usually return home during holidays by train.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and then contrast with a linking word like "however". Fix unclear phrases (e.g., "lack bad lifestyle") and be specific about which opportunities are limited.

예시: It's a mixed bag. On the positive side, it offers a relaxed lifestyle and a safe environment for young people. However, for those seeking dynamic careers or advanced study options, the job market and universities are more limited than in larger cities.

× My hometown is a medium sized city in the central part of Vietnam, is not as bustling as bits a city like Ho Chi Minh City, but it has a very beautiful and charming expert fee that makes it quite unique.

✓ My hometown is a medium-sized city in the central part of Vietnam. It is not as bustling as a big city like Ho Chi Minh City, but it has a very beautiful and charming atmosphere that makes it quite unique.

This sentence contains several problems: missing hyphen in 'medium-sized' (compound adjective), incorrect word order and missing subject-verb in the second clause ('is not' requires a subject), incorrect word 'bits a' should be 'a big', and 'expert fee' is a wrong phrase; 'atmosphere' fits context. Suggestion: use hyphenated compound adjectives before nouns, ensure each clause has a subject and verb, and choose correct nouns ('big', 'atmosphere').

× What I love MO is the strong sense of community. Everyone knows each other and people are incredibly friendly and supportive. Also, the local cuisine is absolutely delicious and very affordable, which I always make when I'm away.

✓ What I love most is the strong sense of community. Everyone knows each other, and people are incredibly friendly and supportive. Also, the local cuisine is absolutely delicious and very affordable, which I always miss when I'm away.

Errors: 'MO' is a typo for 'most' (superlative/adverb), missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'and' in a compound sentence, and 'make' is incorrect verb choice; context requires 'miss' (to long for). Suggestion: correct typos to the correct adverb 'most', use comma in compound sentences, and choose verbs that express intended meaning ('miss' when you long for food).

× I'd live there for the first, uh, 18 years of my life, basic schooling my entire childhood and high school years.

✓ I lived there for the first 18 years of my life, attending school throughout my childhood and high school years.

Errors: 'I'd live' incorrectly uses conditional/contracted form instead of simple past 'I lived'. 'Basic schooling' is awkward and missing a verb; 'attending school' correctly expresses continuous past action. Suggestion: use simple past for finished periods ('I lived') and add a gerund clause to describe ongoing past activity ('attending').

× I only move away recently to pursue my university's 30s in the big city, but I still go back whenever I have a the the train.

✓ I only moved away recently to pursue my university studies in the big city, but I still go back whenever I have the time.

Errors: 'move' should be past tense 'moved' for a recent completed action. 'University's 30s' is nonsense; intended 'university studies'. 'a the the train' is garbled; context requires 'the time' (or 'the chance'). Suggestion: use past tense for completed actions, replace unclear phrases with standard collocations ('university studies'), and remove duplicated words and choose the correct noun ('time' or 'chance'). },{