Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the town or region, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid uncertain phrases and irrelevant facts. Use linking words to improve flow.

예시: I come from Kyiv, the capital city of Ukraine. It is a lively city with historic architecture and many cultural festivals, which makes it well known to visitors.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then two specific reasons with brief examples. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" correctly.

예시: I especially like the traditions and food in my hometown. For example, at New Year families gather for a big meal with traditional dishes like borscht and varenyky, which brings everyone together and creates a festive atmosphere.

제안: Answer directly with a clear time statement, then briefly explain any changes. Keep sentences concise and avoid grammar errors (tense and article use). Use linking words like "however" or "because" to connect ideas.

예시: I have lived in Kyiv my whole life. However, because of safety concerns in 2022 my family temporarily moved to a safer part of Ukraine, although we decided to remain residents of the country.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons or comparisons. Avoid vague phrases like "I guess" and correct conditional structures. Use linking words such as "because", "although", or "for example".

예시: Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because universities offer strong programs and there are many clubs and internships for students. However, some people move to other European cities for certain jobs or opportunities.

× 'My hometown is Ukraine, and actually we have the center of Europe is located on the West side of Ukraine in some countryside.'

✓ 'My hometown is in Ukraine, and actually the center of Europe is located on the west side of Ukraine in the countryside.'

'My hometown is Ukraine' needs the preposition in before a country. 'the center of Europe' requires the definite article the. 'West' should be lowercase when used as a direction. Use 'the countryside' (definite article) or just 'countryside' (no article) but 'the countryside' sounds natural here.

× 'I don't really remember the name of that, but my hometown is so impressive and I think a lot of people know about my country.'

✓ 'I don't really remember its name, but my hometown is very impressive, and I think many people know about my country.'

'the name of that' is awkward; use the pronoun its to refer to the place. 'so impressive' is conversational; 'very impressive' is more appropriate. 'a lot of people' is acceptable but 'many people' is more concise.

× 'Favorite thing about my whole town, I would say it's our nation and tradition and of course our food because in my opinion our food is the best in the world and I'm so obsessed with our tradition For example, we have tradition that for new year we celebrate that together with our relatives of our family and most of the.'

✓ 'My favorite things about my hometown are our nation and traditions, and of course our food, because in my opinion our food is the best in the world and I am very proud of our traditions. For example, we have a tradition that for New Year we celebrate together with our relatives and family.'

The original lacks clear subject-verb agreement and contains fragments. Start with 'My favorite things... are' to match plural subjects. Use plural 'traditions' and 'a tradition' for one custom. Capitalize New Year. Remove the unfinished ending 'and most of the.' and replace with 'and family' for clarity.

× 'I have been living there for my whole life and to be honest, most of the Ukrainians went from our country in 2022.'

✓ 'I have been living there my whole life, and to be honest, many Ukrainians left our country in 2022.'

'I have been living there for my whole life' is better as 'I have been living there my whole life' (omit for). 'Most of the Ukrainians went from our country' is unidiomatic; 'many Ukrainians left our country' uses correct verb 'left' and natural quantifier 'many'.

× 'But my parents decided that we will stay in Ukraine.'

✓ 'But my parents decided that we would stay in Ukraine.'

When reporting a past decision, use the past-in-time modal 'would' (backshift from will) to match past tense 'decided.' Using 'will' is inconsistent.

× 'But we were not stayed in my country, in my city, which is Kiev, We went to some safer place.'

✓ 'But we did not stay in my city, Kyiv; we went to a safer place.'

'were not stayed' is incorrect passive/tense. Use simple past 'did not stay.' Use Kyiv (preferred English name) and lowercase 'safer place' with article 'a.' Capitalization fixed and sentence split for clarity.

× 'I guess if you could find a better place to improve yourself, especially in Europe, but I think that our country is so good for improvement and developing yourself too.'

✓ 'I guess you could find a better place to improve yourself, especially in Europe, but I think our country is also good for self-improvement and personal development.'

The original mixes conditional and opinion awkwardly. Remove 'if' to form a conditional suggestion with 'you could.' Replace 'so good for improvement and developing yourself' with natural collocations 'good for self-improvement and personal development.'

× 'We have really great education, if we'll compare that with some countries.'

✓ 'We have really great education if we compare it with some countries.'

'we'll compare' (we will) is incorrect here; use simple present 'we compare' for general comparisons. 'that' should be 'it' referring to education. Combine clauses without comma or with appropriate conjunction.