Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha net ve doğru gramer kullanımıyla verilmeli. Şehir adını yanlış telaffuz etmeyin ve tekrarları ("Bursa Bursa", "in Turkey in Turkey") ile gereksiz kelime tekrarlarından kaçının. Kısa bir giriş cümlesi ve gerekiyorsa bir bağlaçla ek bilgi verin. Örneğin, önce doğduğunuz yer ile şu an yaşadığınız yeri net belirtin.

예시: I'm originally from Çorum, but I now live in Bursa. Bursa is a large city in northwestern Turkey, and I'll describe it for you.

제안: Düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve düzenli ifade edin. Bir konu cümlesi kullanın, ardından 1–2 destekleyici detay verin ve bağlaçlarla ilişkilendirin. Yer adlarını ve yemek isimlerini doğru yazın/söyleyin (ör. "İskender"). Gereksiz dolgu kelimelerinden ("uh", "which makes me it's") kaçının.

예시: I love Bursa because it offers both nature and great food. For example, Uludağ is a famous mountain nearby for skiing, and the city is known for İskender kebab, which is a must-try dish.

제안: Zaman ifadesi kullanırken daha kısa ve doğru bir cümle kurun. Karışık ve çelişkili ifadeler ("since I was born", "before born, my family moved") yerine tek, net bir zaman ifadesi tercih edin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu sözcüklerini çıkarın.

예시: I've lived in Bursa since I was born, so it's my hometown and I've spent my whole life here.

제안: Daha doğal bir onay cümlesi kurup sonra nedenlerini belirtin. "Very incredible" ve "tremendous" gibi aşırı genel sıfatlar yerine somut faydalar (eğlence, eğitim, iş imkânları) ve bağlaçlarla destek verin. Tekrarlardan kaçının ("they can go to the sea").

예시: Yes, Bursa is a great place for young people because it offers beaches for leisure and many universities and job opportunities nearby, so young people have both study and entertainment options.

× Actually I'm from curse but I live in Bursa. Since I will describe Bursa Bursa which is located of Turkey in Turkey.

✓ Actually I'm from Çorum, but I live in Bursa. I will describe Bursa, which is located in Turkey.

The original contains sentence structure and article/preposition errors. 'curse' seems to be a wrong word — likely 'Çorum' (a Turkish town) or another hometown; replace with the correct place name. Use a comma before 'but' to join two independent clauses. The second sentence should be 'I will describe Bursa, which is located in Turkey.' Use the relative clause 'which is located in Turkey' and the preposition 'in' rather than 'of'. Also remove the duplicated word 'Bursa' and the unnecessary 'Since'. Improved sentence flow and correct preposition use.

× To be honest, my hometown is very marvelous city in my country because my city has a lot of opportunities like famous mountain and delicious food like Skandar. Uh, which makes me it's.

✓ To be honest, my hometown is a very marvelous city in my country because it has many attractions, such as a famous mountain and delicious food like Iskender, which makes me proud of it.

Errors include missing and incorrect articles ('a very marvelous city'), incorrect quantifier ('a lot of opportunities' → 'many attractions'), and unclear phrasing. 'Skandar' is likely 'Iskender' (a Turkish dish). The clause 'Uh, which makes me it's' is ungrammatical; change to 'which makes me proud of it.' Use 'it' or 'my hometown' consistently. These fixes correct article use, quantifier choice, and sentence structure.

× I have lived since I was born, when I was a child. When I was, uh, before born, my family moved in Bursa.

✓ I have lived in Bursa since I was born. Before I was born, my family moved to Bursa.

Use present perfect 'have lived' with 'since' to indicate continuous action from birth to present: 'I have lived in Bursa since I was born.' The original repeats ideas and has incorrect word order. For the move, use simple past 'moved' with the preposition 'to' (moved to Bursa) and correct phrase 'before I was born.' Also include the preposition 'in' after 'lived' when specifying a city.

× Yes, my hometown is very incredible still for young people because it has a sea, which is very tremendous for everyone. They can go to the sea.

✓ Yes, my hometown is still very attractive for young people because it has a sea, which is great for everyone. They can go to the beach.

The phrase 'very incredible' is nonnative; use 'very attractive' or 'really great.' 'Still' should come before the adjective 'still very attractive.' 'A sea' is okay, but 'which is very tremendous' is unnatural — 'great' or 'appealing' is better. 'Go to the sea' is a literal translation; say 'go to the beach' or 'go to the seaside.' These changes correct adjective use and produce natural collocations.