Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the hometown and one or two key features. Fix basic grammar (e.g., 'which is the capital of Taiwan' → only if true; if not, correct city) and avoid repetition. Use linking words sparingly to connect ideas and give one specific example. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: My hometown is Taoyuan, a city in northern Taiwan. It has a wide variety of restaurants, including many Japanese and Korean options, and lively night markets, which I like visiting in the evenings because of the food and atmosphere.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating what you like. Use correct tense and avoid filler words. Explain briefly how transportation makes life easier, using one concrete detail or example and a linking word (e.g., 'for example' or 'so'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I like the excellent public transport in my hometown because it connects well with nearby cities. For example, I can take a direct train to work, so I don't need to drive and can save time and avoid traffic.

제안: Answer the question directly with a time frame (e.g., 'most of my life' or 'since I was born'). Then add one specific supporting detail about memories or schooling, using a linking word like 'for example' or 'because'. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

예시: I have lived there for most of my life — since I was born. For example, I attended elementary and junior high school there, so I have many childhood memories from local festivals and friends.

제안: State your opinion clearly and give one or two specific reasons. Use linking words ('because', 'for example', 'however') correctly and complete your thoughts. Mention concrete benefits for young people (jobs, education, nightlife, transport) and keep to 2–3 complete sentences.

예시: Yes, I think it's a good place for young people because public transport is reliable and there are many job and study opportunities nearby. For example, good train connections make it easy to commute to universities and workplaces in neighboring cities.

× My hometown is Taipan, where is a capital of Taiwan and there is there are many different kinds of food such as Japanese and Korean restaurants and there are many night market which is my favorite place at night. Umm, I very love it because.

✓ My hometown is Taipan, which is the capital of Taiwan, and there are many different kinds of food such as Japanese and Korean restaurants. There are also many night markets, which are my favorite places at night. I really love it.

Errors: incorrect relative clause 'where is a capital' should be 'which is the capital' and missing definite article 'the capital'. 'there is there are' is redundant. 'night market' should be plural 'night markets' and 'which is my favorite place' should agree in number 'which are my favorite places'. 'I very love it' is ungrammatical; use 'I really love it'. Suggestion: use 'which' for non-defining clauses, include 'the' for unique nouns like 'capital', ensure subject-verb agreement and correct adjective/adverb choice.

× And in my opinion, my hometown is a very convenient city because the transportation which connect connected with other places.

✓ In my opinion, my hometown is a very convenient city because the transportation connects it with other places.

Errors: 'which connect connected' is wrong form; use present simple 'connects' for third-person singular 'transportation'. Also supply the object 'it' to show what is connected. Suggestion: use correct verb form for subject-verb agreement and keep sentence concise.

× And if I want and I it means I don't need to drive a car or ride my ride my motorcycle, I can arrive the place.

✓ If I want to go somewhere, I don't need to drive a car or ride my motorcycle; I can reach the place by public transport.

Errors: sentence is disfluent and contains repetition 'and I it means' and 'ride my ride my'. Also 'arrive the place' is incorrect collocation—use 'arrive at a place' or 'reach the place'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use 'want to go somewhere', and choose correct verbs and prepositions ('reach' or 'arrive at').

× Actually, I lived there when I was such child.

✓ Actually, I lived there when I was a child.

Error: 'such child' is incorrect; use the article 'a' with 'child'. The past tense 'lived' is fine. Suggestion: use 'a child' for general reference to childhood.

× There are there were many interesting memories and including my junior high school memories and elementary he he memories.

✓ There are many interesting memories, including those from junior high school and elementary school.

Errors: redundant 'There are there were', inconsistent tense. Use present 'There are' to state existing memories and remove filler 'he he'. Also add 'school' after 'elementary' and use 'including those from' to be clear. Suggestion: avoid redundant tense shifting and fillers, and complete noun phrases.

× And as a result, although I worked in other cities, I.

✓ As a result, although I have worked in other cities, I still consider Taipan my home.

Error: sentence is incomplete and lacks a main clause after 'although'. Suggestion: complete the contrast by adding the main clause, and choose appropriate tense ('have worked' for experience) to fit the context.

× In my opinion, my hometown is a good place for young people because the transportation is very convenient, in contrast to some cities, some remote cities, and if there there are not convenient transportation and they cannot arrive other place at night, it is very.

✓ In my opinion, my hometown is a good place for young people because the transportation is very convenient. In contrast, in some remote cities, if the transportation is not convenient and people cannot reach other places at night, life is more difficult.

Errors: run-on sentence, repetition 'some cities, some remote cities', incorrect phrase 'there are not convenient transportation' (use 'the transportation is not convenient'), and 'arrive other place' should be 'reach other places'. The final 'it is very' is incomplete. Suggestion: split into two sentences, avoid repetition, use correct subject-verb constructions, and complete the comparative idea.