Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (I work as a secondary school teacher.), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/so). Keep answer under five sentences and correct small grammatical errors (e.g., “it helps me help students” not “help me to help”).

예시: I work as a secondary school teacher. I enjoy my job because it allows me to help students overcome learning difficulties; for example, I design targeted support programs that improve their exam results.

제안: Give a complete sentence with correct grammar and add one specific detail to enrich your reply. Use a linking word if adding a reason or advantage. Avoid short fragmented answers.

예시: I work at a secondary school located near my home, which makes my commute short and gives me more time to prepare lessons.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two concise specific reasons using linking words (for example, because and also). Eliminate repetition and correct word order (e.g., “my manager” not “the manager”).

예시: Yes, it is. The atmosphere is friendly because my colleagues and my manager are very supportive, and they often encourage me to try new teaching methods.

제안: Provide a clear opinion then explain reasons with linking words (but/yet/so). Avoid vague phrases like “it's very great” and reduce repetition. Specify what kind of change and why (career growth, new challenges).

예시: Yes, I like it, but I enjoy changing workplaces occasionally for new challenges. For example, I usually stay about five years at a school so I can gain experience before moving to a different environment to advance my career.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about your plan, then add specific reasons and expected results. Use correct verb forms (e.g., “pursue a PhD”) and avoid repetition. Limit to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: I plan to continue my academic education by pursuing a PhD, because it will deepen my subject knowledge and improve my career prospects, such as qualifying me for senior teaching or administrative roles.

× I'm working. I work as a teacher in secondary school.

✓ I'm a teacher at a secondary school.

Using both 'I'm working' and 'I work' is redundant and awkward. For a permanent job, simple present 'I work' or a stative 'I'm a teacher' is preferable. Use 'at a secondary school' for the usual preposition and include the article 'a'.

× I really enjoy I really like my job because it helps me to help students to overcome their difficulties.

✓ I really like my job because it helps me help students overcome their difficulties.

The sentence repeats phrases and uses unnecessary 'to' before verbs. Combine 'enjoy' or 'like' (not both) and remove the extra 'to' before 'help' and 'overcome'. Use the bare infinitive after 'help' (help students do something).

× For example, I design for them a program that helps them that helps us

✓ For example, I design programs for them that help them.

Word order is incorrect: 'design for them a program' should be 'design programs for them.' The clause 'that helps us' seems unintended and redundant, so remove it. Match plural 'programs' with general practice.

× I work in a school it located near to my home

✓ I work in a school that is located near my home.

Two independent clauses are run together; use 'that is' to link or a conjunction. 'Located' needs the auxiliary 'is' (there be / be issue). Also use 'near my home' (no 'to' after 'near').

× I like the atmosphere in this school. I like the environment with my with my colleagues, with the manager because they also they always support me, encouraging me.

✓ I like the atmosphere at this school. I have a good relationship with my colleagues and the manager because they always support and encourage me.

Use 'at' for institutions. Avoid repeated phrases ('with my with my'). 'Environment with my colleagues' is awkward; 'have a good relationship with' is clearer. Remove duplicate 'they' and use parallel verbs 'support and encourage'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner question is already in the transcript; however the student's reply follows. No correction needed to this question; included here for context. (If intended as student sentence, 'Would you like' asks preference; 'Do you like' asks current opinion.)

× Yes, I like it. It's very great. But I like the change. I like to change my work from time to time or my place from time to time.

✓ Yes, I like it. It's great. But I like change. I like to change jobs or workplaces from time to time.

'Very great' is nonnative collocation; 'great' suffices. 'I like the change' should be 'I like change.' Use 'change jobs' or 'change workplaces' rather than 'change my work' and avoid repetition 'from time to time' twice.

× I think five years in each school is enough for me, then I look for change.

✓ I think five years at each school is enough for me; then I look for a change.

Use 'at each school' and add article 'a change' for clarity. Consider 'then I will look for a change' to make future intention explicit, but present simple 'I look for' can express habitual action.

× My plan is to continue my education, my academic education.

✓ My plan is to continue my academic education.

Combine the two phrases to avoid repetition. Use adjective 'academic' before 'education' to specify.

× I like to go ahead to PhD.

✓ I would like to go on to a PhD programme.

'Go ahead to PhD' is unidiomatic. Use 'go on to' or 'pursue' and include article 'a' before 'PhD' or 'a PhD programme'. 'Would like' is more polite for future plans.

× This will help me to will help me to to improve in my career later.

✓ This will help me to improve my career prospects.

The phrase duplicates 'will help me' and has an extra 'to'. Use a concise phrasing: 'help me improve my career prospects' or 'help me progress in my career.' Remove repeated words and redundant infinitive 'to'.