Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more fluently and organize the response into a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Reduce hesitations (ums/uhs) and correct basic grammar (e.g., "I have a master's degree" and "I work as an R&D specialist"). Keep the answer to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I have a master's degree and I currently work as an R&D specialist. I work for a company in the beauty and skincare sector, focusing on product development.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the company/industry, then add one specific detail about the company's activities. Avoid repetition and finish your thought. Use linking words like "and" or "which" to connect ideas.

예시: I work for an e-commerce platform in the beauty and skincare industry, which sells cosmetics and skin-care products online. The company focuses on digital marketing and product distribution.

제안: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence, then list two specific positive and, if relevant, one negative point. Use correct grammar (e.g., "It has some disadvantages, but overall I like it because it provides insurance and job security") and avoid unnecessary hesitations.

예시: Overall, it is a good place to work. It provides insurance and good job security, and the working atmosphere is friendly with flexible hours, although advancement can be slow.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same words. Provide two clear reasons (e.g., friendly culture and short commute). If mentioning negatives, keep them brief and specific. Use linking words like "because" and "also" for coherence.

예시: Yes, I like working there because the culture is friendly and supportive, and the office is close to my home, so my commute is short. However, some tasks can be repetitive at times.

제안: Start with a clear statement of your future goal, then give two specific steps or reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I want to start my own business"), and avoid fragment sentences. Mention realistic plans or timeline to sound convincing.

예시: In the future I want to start my own business and become independent. I plan to gain more management experience over the next two years and then establish a skincare brand that focuses on sustainable ingredients.

× I'm a graduate, I have a umm, master of degree.

✓ I'm a graduate; I have a master's degree.

Run-on sentence and article/possessive form error. Use a semicolon or separate into two sentences, and use 'master's degree' (possessive) rather than 'master of degree'.

× Nowadays I, uh, I'm work, I, uh, work, uh, as a company.

✓ Nowadays I work for a company.

Incorrect verb form and preposition use. Use simple present 'work' (not 'I'm work') and the preposition 'for' to indicate employment at a company.

× Uh, I work in a company as a, umm, R&D expert.

✓ I work at a company as an R&D expert.

Preposition and article choice: 'work at/for a company' is natural; use the indefinite article 'an' before the vowel sound in 'R&D'.

× I work in a company that a company active in a a beauty and a skin care industry and this company is a platform and e-commerce.

✓ I work for a company that is active in the beauty and skincare industry; it is a platform and an e-commerce business.

Missing verb 'is', article misuse, repetition, and word order issues. Insert 'is' after 'that', use 'the beauty and skincare industry', avoid duplicate 'a', and add articles 'a' before 'platform' and 'an' before 'e-commerce business'.

× I like work it because it's.

✓ I like working there because it's convenient/interesting/beneficial.

Incorrect verb form and object. Use the gerund 'working' after 'like' and use 'there' or 'it' appropriately; complete the sentence with a reason (e.g., 'convenient').

× Uh, it has a disadvantage as an advantages, but I like it because it, uh, has insurance, insurance, job security, uh, and uh, it have a, it has a friendly atmosphere and, uh, flexible working hours.

✓ It has disadvantages as well as advantages, but I like it because it provides insurance and job security, and it has a friendly atmosphere and flexible working hours.

Plural/singular and verb agreement issues, repetition, and awkward phrasing. Use parallel structure 'disadvantages as well as advantages', use 'provides' for services (insurance), and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it has').

× Yes, I like because it has a good atmosphere, friendly atmosphere and competitive atmosphere and umm A repetitive umm and uh, it is a near distance workplace and.

✓ Yes, I like it because it has a good, friendly, and competitive atmosphere. It is also a short commute to work.

Missing pronoun 'it', article and adjective order issues, and incomplete sentence. Use 'I like it because', combine adjectives properly, and replace vague 'near distance workplace' with 'short commute' or 'is nearby'.

× I want a step out of comfort zone and I I'm independence and I have a new freedom, so I want to run in my business.

✓ I want to step out of my comfort zone and become independent; I want the freedom to run my own business.

Incorrect article usage, verb form, and sentence structure. Use 'step out of my comfort zone', 'become independent', and 'run my own business' for natural phrasing.

× I want. Establish a company.

✓ I want to establish a company.

Sentence fragment and missing infinitive marker. Combine into one sentence using the full infinitive 'to establish'.

× I think I success in there.

✓ I think I will succeed there.

Incorrect word form and preposition; 'success' is a noun, use the verb 'succeed'. Use future 'will' to express expectation about the future and 'there' as the place.