Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and simplify the response with correct grammar and concise wording. Start with a direct topic sentence saying whether you work or study, then add one brief supporting detail about your master's study (field or purpose). Use correct verb forms and avoid unnecessary words.

예시: I am a student. I am currently studying for a master's degree in [your subject] at university, so I am not working full‑time right now.

제안: Answer directly and organize information with a clear topic sentence stating your current situation, then use a linking word to mention past work. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I am not working' / 'I used to be a designer') and be specific about the design role or industry to add content.

예시: I am not working at the moment because I am saving money and focusing on my master's degree. Previously, I worked as a graphic designer for a marketing agency.

제안: Give a clear opinion about the workplace and support it with one or two specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'develop my skills', 'relieve stress') and avoid repeating words. Mention a concrete example of what made it good.

예시: Yes, it was a good place to work because Orbsam offered training and mentoring that helped me develop my design skills. The supportive team also reduced stress during busy projects.

제안: Respond directly about your feelings and give a specific reason or example. Use clearer language: say you were satisfied and explain briefly why (culture, opportunities). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I was generally satisfied with my workplace because I focused on the opportunities it offered, such as learning new skills and taking on interesting projects.

제안: State your goal clearly and explain one concrete step you will take. Remove vague or irrelevant ideas like 'to be rich' unless you explain how it relates to career goals. Use correct phrasing ('I want to become a school consultant') and mention the field or what skills you need.

예시: I hope to become a school consultant in the future. To achieve this, I plan to complete my master's degree with a focus on educational leadership and gain experience advising schools through internships or part‑time consultancy work.

× Actually as a forty person, I still be as still a student because I am learning for my master course at university.

✓ Actually, at forty, I am still a student because I am studying for my master's course at university.

Errors: 'as a forty person' is incorrect adjective/noun order and form; 'be as still' uses wrong verb form and adverb placement; 'learning for' is incorrect preposition/verb choice; 'master course' needs possessive. Type 13 applies because adjectives/adverbs and word choice are wrong. Suggestion: use 'at forty' to indicate age, use correct present continuous 'am still a student' and 'studying for my master's course' or 'studying for my master's degree.'

× Currently I have not to work because I have saving money for studying so I am focusing on my master degree.

✓ Currently I do not have to work because I have saved money for studying, so I am focusing on my master's degree.

Errors: 'have not to work' is incorrect modal/auxiliary structure; 'have saving' is wrong tense/verb form; missing possessive in 'master degree.' Type 4 applies for modal/auxiliary misuse and Type 9 for past participle 'saved' but primary is modal. Suggestion: use 'do not have to' to express lack of obligation and 'have saved' to show completed action. Use 'master's degree.'

× But before I used to a designer.

✓ But before, I used to be a designer.

Error: missing verb 'be' after 'used to' which requires base verb form. Type 5 applies because it's about past habit construction. Suggestion: use 'used to be' to describe past role/habit.

× I have trained many companies in my work life and Orbsam is a good place to develop develop my skill and burst burden, burden my mind.

✓ I have worked with many companies in my career, and Orbsam is a good place to develop my skills and relieve mental burdens.

Errors: 'have trained many companies' likely wrong verb choice; 'work life' unnatural, 'develop develop' repeated, 'burst burden, burden my mind' incorrect collocation. Type 13 fits for adjective/adverb and word choice issues. Suggestion: use 'worked with many companies' or 'trained at many companies' if intended, 'career' instead of 'work life,' plural 'skills,' and 'relieve mental burdens.'

× I feel like I always just satisfied about my workplace because I always chose to see the possibility in anything.

✓ I feel that I am usually satisfied with my workplace because I always choose to see the possibilities in everything.

Errors: tense and verb forms 'feel like I always just satisfied' missing auxiliary 'am' and adverb placement; 'chose' is past tense instead of present 'choose'; 'possibility' should be plural and 'in anything/everything' collocation. Type 12 applies for pronoun/verb sequence and overall sentence structure; also Type 6 present tense issue. Suggestion: use 'I am usually satisfied' and present tense 'choose' and plural 'possibilities.'

× Hopefully I want to be a school consultant in the future so I have to finish my master's degree very well to be to be rich, to reach my aim.

✓ Hopefully, I want to be a school consultant in the future, so I have to complete my master's degree successfully to achieve my goal.

Errors: 'finish ... very well' awkward; 'to be to be rich' repetition and incorrect infinitive; 'reach my aim' awkward collocation. Type 8 applies for verb forms and gerund/infinitive misuse. Suggestion: use 'complete my master's degree successfully' and 'achieve my goal' or 'reach my aim.'