Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên và chính xác ngữ pháp; nói ngắn gọn với 1 câu chủ đề rõ ràng và 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ. Tránh lặp từ và sửa động từ/điều hòa danh từ (ví dụ: 'learn language' → 'study languages' hoặc 'study a language'). Thực hành nối câu mượt mà bằng liên từ đơn giản như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

예시: I'm a high school student focusing on English because I plan to study languages at university in the future.

제안: Tránh lặp ý (đã nói là học sinh). Cần câu chủ đề ngắn gọn và thông tin cụ thể hơn (tên trường bằng cách viết đúng số nhiều/số ít và dùng mạo từ nếu cần). Sửa ngữ pháp: 'for gifted student' → 'for gifted students' hoặc 'the gifted school'. Có thể thêm vị trí lớp hoặc năm học để cụ thể.

예시: I'm a student at Lao Cai High School for Gifted Students, and I'm currently in the English class for third-year students.

제안: Cải thiện trôi chảy (loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng như 'uh') và ngữ pháp (điều hòa số nhiều: 'excellent teacher' → 'excellent teachers'; 'studying this school' → 'studying at this school'). Bắt đầu bằng 1 câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi cung cấp 1–2 lý do chi tiết với liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'since'.

예시: Yes, it is. It's the best high school in my city because it offers excellent teachers and strong academic support, which is why it was my dream to study there.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (động từ 'have' → 'has'); tránh lặp ý với câu trước. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn ('Yes, I would') rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể, có thể so sánh hoặc nêu ví dụ về chương trình học hoặc hoạt động thể hiện chất lượng trường.

예시: Yes, I would. It has many excellent teachers and a rigorous academic curriculum, for example advanced English and literature courses that help students improve.

제안: Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng ('umm'); sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ: 'study in a language university' → 'study languages at university'; 'after finish my studying' → 'after finishing my studies'; bỏ 'a your'. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng về mục tiêu nghề nghiệp và một kế hoạch ngắn gọn (ví dụ thời gian hoặc bước tiếp theo).

예시: In the future I want to study languages at university, and after I finish my studies I plan to become an English teacher and return to teach at my old school.

× I'm currently a high school student and I'm focusing on English because I want to learn language in university in the future.

✓ I'm currently a high school student and I'm focusing on English because I want to study languages at university in the future.

Use present continuous 'I'm focusing' is okay for current action. Change 'learn language' to 'study languages' and 'in university' to 'at university' for natural collocations and plurality. Suggestion: use 'study languages at university' or 'study a language at university'.

× I'm a student and I study at Laocai high school for gifted student and I'm in English class.

✓ I'm a student and I study at Laocai High School for gifted students and I'm in the English class.

Use capitalized proper noun 'Laocai High School'. 'for gifted student' needs plural 'students'. Include definite article 'the' before 'English class' for a specific class. Suggestion: 'Laocai High School for gifted students' and 'the English class'.

× Of course, local high school for all gifted students is the best high school in my city.

✓ Of course, the local high school for gifted students is the best high school in my city.

Add definite article 'the' before 'local high school' because a specific school is meant. 'for all gifted students' is wordy; 'for gifted students' is natural. Suggestion: always use 'the' when referring to a specific institution.

× It was uh, my dream to study here because it has uh, excellent teacher and I am studying this school now.

✓ It was my dream to study here because it has excellent teachers and I am studying at this school now.

'It has excellent teacher' needs plural 'teachers'. Use preposition 'at' with 'study at this school'. Mixing past 'was' and present 'am studying' is acceptable here but clarify: 'It has excellent teachers, and I am studying at this school now.' Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement and correct preposition.

× Absolutely, because it was my dream to study here and it also have a lot of excellent teachers and a strong academic curriculum.

✓ Absolutely, because it was my dream to study here and it also has a lot of excellent teachers and a strong academic curriculum.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' (singular) requires 'has' not 'have'. Also article usage 'a strong academic curriculum' is fine. Suggestion: use 'has' for singular subjects.

× Umm in the future I want to study in a language university and after finish my umm studying I will become a your English teacher and I will teach in my old school.

✓ In the future I want to study at a language university and after finishing my studies I will become an English teacher and I will teach at my old school.

Use preposition 'at' with 'university'. Use gerund 'after finishing my studies' rather than 'after finish my studying'. 'a your English teacher' is incorrect; use 'an English teacher' (article 'an' before vowel sound) and omit 'your'. Use 'teach at my old school' with 'at' preposition. Suggestion: practice gerunds after 'after' and correct article use ('an English teacher').