Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 语法与用词需改正，句子应更简洁自然。开头直接说明身份（I work as...），注意冠词与职业词形（an equipment engineer），以及简洁描述职责并使用连词衔接。可把信息限制在不超过5句，避免重复。

예시: I work as an equipment engineer at a technology company. I'm mainly responsible for maintaining and improving production equipment. I often coordinate with production teams to troubleshoot problems and implement upgrades.

제안: 回答要直接并用更地道的词汇描述地点与特点。避免重复的短语（I'm working, I'm working），用一个主题句说明地点，然后用1–2句具体支持。注意搭配，如“young people”而非“teenagers”如果谈职业和机遇。

예시: I work in Shenzhen, which is a modern and fast-growing city in southern China. It attracts many young professionals and entrepreneurs looking for career opportunities.

제안: 回答要流畅并避免语音犹豫（uh）与语法错误。开门见山回答，然后用一两个具体理由支持（technology companies, career opportunities, good infrastructure）。注意代词和句子完整性。

예시: Yes, definitely. Shenzhen is very modern and hosts many technology companies, so there are plenty of job opportunities and good infrastructure for professionals.

제안: 表达观点不应含糊（like or dislike），应清晰表态并给出具体原因。注意语法（a very beautiful city; offers business opportunities）并用更自然的短语表达缺点（crowded, high cost of living, competitive work culture）而非‘need to become work ethic’。

예시: I generally like working in Shenzhen because it's attractive and full of business opportunities. However, it can be crowded and competitive, which sometimes makes work-life balance difficult.

제안: 结构较清楚，但语法需改正并更具体。用现在完成或现在进行表达计划（I have resigned / I'm preparing）。说明具体计划细节（which country, field, timeline）可以增加信息量，并用正确短语（apply for a PhD, prepare my language skills）。

예시: I have resigned because I plan to study abroad and apply for a PhD program. At the moment I'm preparing my language skills and application materials for programs in the UK or the US next year.

× I am work, I work, I work.

✓ I work. / I'm working.

原句使用了 am 与动词原形 work 连用，属于句子结构错误。应使用 I work（一般现在）或 I'm working（现在进行）来表达“我工作”。建议掌握主语+be动词+动词 -ing 与主语+一般动词的区别。

× I'm working as a equipment engineering at technical company and I'm mainly responsible for meeting and improving production equipment.

✓ I'm working as an equipment engineer at a technical company, and I'm mainly responsible for maintaining and improving production equipment.

原句中 a equipment engineering 用法不正确：equipment 是名词，engineering 可作名词或形容词，但此处应用职业名 engineer；冠词 an 用于以元音音素开头的单词。technical company 前缺冠词 a。meeting 用错，应为 maintaining（维护）。建议学习职业名称用法、冠词以及动词搭配。

× I'm working, I'm working in Shenzhen, you know, it is very fancy and beautiful city.

✓ I'm working in Shenzhen. You know, it is a very modern and beautiful city.

原句重复表述且缺少冠词，fancy 用词不当，且句子结构混乱。应删去多余重复，给可数名词 city 加不定冠词 a，并用 more 合适的形容词 modern。建议注意句子连贯性与冠词使用。

× You can see many teenagers come here, find their business and the future.

✓ You can see many young people come here to start their businesses and seek a future.

teenagers 与 young people 用法区分；business （生意）作可数时需复数 businesses；find their the future 表达不自然，应说 seek a future 或 find their future。建议区分可数/不可数名词及固定搭配。

× Yes, definitely today. Since he's, uh, very modern city with many technology companies, so you can see a lot of younger people come here to find their.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's a very modern city with many technology companies, so you can see a lot of young people coming here to find work or opportunities.

原句中的 Since he's... 用法错误，主语与系动词不匹配。句尾不完整（find their.）。younger people 比 young people 多余比较含义。改为 it's a... 并用动名词短语 coming here，以及完整的目的表达。建议注意从句引导词和句尾补全。

× Well, I like or dislike Shenzhen because Shenzhen is very beautiful city and opportunity value opportunity to business.

✓ Well, I both like and dislike Shenzhen because Shenzhen is a very beautiful city and it offers many business opportunities.

原句 like or dislike 表达模糊，需明确 both like and dislike 或 I have mixed feelings。缺少冠词 a before city；opportunity value opportunity to business 结构混乱，应改为 offers many business opportunities。建议学习短语搭配与连词表达复合意见。

× But uh, it's a lot of people need to become work ethic.

✓ But, uh, there are a lot of people who need to develop a better work ethic.

原句缺乏连贯结构，应使用 there are 表示存在（There be issue），并需引入关系代词 who 连接从句。become work ethic 用法错误，应为 develop a work ethic 或 improve their work ethic。建议熟悉 there is/are 结构与关系从句用法，以及固定搭配 develop/improve a work ethic。

× Actually I'm resigned now because I want to go abroad for further study, so I'm prepared my language for the PhD apply.

✓ Actually I've resigned now because I want to go abroad for further study, so I'm preparing my language skills for my PhD application.

原句 I'm resigned 时态和用法不当，resign 的过去分词用法需与完成时连用：I've resigned 或 I resigned。I'm prepared my language 错用被动/完成结构，正确为 I'm preparing my language skills 或 I've prepared my language skills。PhD apply 用词错误，应为 PhD application。建议注意时态（现在完成表近期过去的动作）和名词短语搭配。