Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом естественный и информативный, но есть несколько моментов для улучшения: 1) Лаконичность — первая фраза слишком длинная; можно сразу назвать текущую должность и опыт. 2) Грамматика и формулировки — фраза "English as a second Language" лучше как "English as a Second Language" или "ESL teacher"; "Firstly I started" звучит неестественно, лучше "I started". 3) Согласованность времен и связки — вместо "and somehow now" лучше использовать связующее слово "and now" или "and I now". Конкретные шаги: сократите ответ до 2–3 предложений, начните с основной информации (тема), затем добавьте одно краткое уточнение о смене уровня детей. Варьируйте лексику: используйте "I work as", "I've been working for", "I began my career".

예시: I work as an ESL teacher and I have about nine years' experience. I began teaching lower secondary students but I now teach primary school children.

제안: Хорошая, связная и информативная ответная реплика, но есть пара моментов: 1) Начало — "Currently I'm working at" можно сделать более кратким: "I currently work at". 2) Логическая связка — фраза о карьере и отпуске по уходу за ребёнком уместна, но можно сделать её компактнее и более естественной, использовав связки "after" или "following". 3) Избегайте разговорных выражений вроде "try something new" в формальном тесте; лучше "try a new environment" или "move into private education".

예시: I currently work at a private school. I began my career in a state school, but after my maternity leave I decided to move into private education.

제안: Ответ понятный, но есть ошибки в согласовании и формулировках и некоторая тавтология: 1) Грамматика — "number of student" → "number of students"; "in each grade" не совсем точно для описания класса, лучше "in each class". 2) Повторения — фразы "give more personal attention" и "work with them individually" дублируют смысл; стоит объединить или расширить одну мысль. 3) Структура — можно начать с утверждения, затем привести причину и краткий пример того, как это помогает. Используйте связочные слова: "because", "so", "which means".

예시: Definitely. Because classes are small, with only about 20 students each, teachers can give more individual attention, which helps struggling pupils improve.

제안: Очень хороший ответ: естественный и образный. Можно лишь сделать пару улучшений: 1) Убрать разговорные заполнители — "so huge" можно заменить на "very large"; 2) Немного сократить: одна короткая причина с примером достаточно. 3) Улучшить связку между описанием и выводом, например использовать "so" или "therefore".

예시: Yes, I do. The campus is very large and surrounded by trees and greenery, so we can take walks during breaks to relax.

제안: Ответ понятный, но содержит разговорные и грамматические ошибки: 1) Стиль — "I'm gonna" и "'cause" слишком неформальны; в тесте используйте "I'm going to" и "because". 2) Грамматика — "enter and study master degree" → "enter a master's program" или "study for a master's degree". 3) Логика — можно добавить краткий план или временную перспективу (e.g., when you plan to start). 4) Структура — начните с основной цели, затем укажите действие и причину.

예시: I'm going to study for a master's degree next year so I can move up the career ladder and become a head teacher at my school.

× I've been working as an English as a second Language teacher for about 9 years.

✓ I've been working as an English-as-a-Second-Language teacher for about nine years.

The phrase 'English as a second Language' needs articles and hyphenation to form a single compound noun modifying 'teacher' (English-as-a-Second-Language teacher). Also numbers under ten are often written as words in formal writing; hyphens connect the compound adjective. Suggestion: use hyphens for multiword modifiers and write small numbers in words.

× Firstly I started as a teacher of lower secondary school and somehow now I am teaching primary school children.

✓ Firstly I started as a teacher at a lower secondary school and now I am teaching primary school children.

The phrase 'teacher of lower secondary school' is unidiomatic; English uses 'teacher at a lower secondary school' or 'a lower-secondary-school teacher'. Also 'somehow now' is awkward; removing 'somehow' makes the sentence clearer. Suggestion: use the preposition 'at' with 'school' and consider hyphenating compound adjectives.

× Currently I'm working at a private school.

✓ Currently I work at a private school.

Progressive 'I'm working' is acceptable for temporary actions, but context describes a current regular job — the simple present 'I work' is more natural. Suggestion: choose simple present for habitual or permanent jobs, present continuous for temporary or ongoing actions.

× I started my career at an ordinary state school, but after my maternity leave I decided to try something new and switch to private education.

✓ I started my career at an ordinary state school, but after my maternity leave I decided to try something new and switch to private education.

No grammatical error in tense here; sentence is correct. No change needed. Explanation: Past tense verbs 'started' and 'decided' correctly describe completed actions in the past.

× The first reason is the number of student in each class.

✓ The first reason is the number of students in each class.

The noun 'student' should be plural because it refers to multiple students in each class. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one item.

× It allows us to give more personal attention and to each student and work with them individually.

✓ It allows us to give more personal attention to each student and to work with them individually.

Original sentence has extra 'and' and incorrect word order. The correct structure pairs the infinitives: 'to give ... to each student' and 'to work with them individually'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure when listing infinitive actions.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is incorrect here because 'would you like' asks about preference or desire, not current opinion. 'Do you like' correctly asks whether the speaker likes their workplace now. Suggestion: use 'Do you like' for general opinions, 'Would you like' for polite offers or hypothetical desires.

× The campus of my workplace is so huge and it's surrounded by greenery and high trees.

✓ The campus of my workplace is so huge and it's surrounded by greenery and tall trees.

'High trees' is not idiomatic; 'tall trees' is the correct adjective. 'Greenery' is uncountable and fine. Suggestion: use 'tall' for tree height.

× That gives us the opportunity just to walk around during the break and unwind a bit.

✓ That gives us the opportunity to just walk around during the break and unwind a bit.

Adverb placement: 'just' typically comes before the verb phrase 'to walk' in this context. Alternatively, 'the opportunity to walk around' (omitting 'just') is cleaner. Suggestion: place adverbs close to the verb they modify.

× I'm gonna enter and study master degree in order to move up on my career ladder 'cause I want to be a head teacher in my school.

✓ I'm going to enter and study for a master's degree in order to move up my career ladder because I want to be a head teacher at my school.

Several issues: colloquial 'gonna' should be 'going to' for formal speech. 'Study master degree' requires preposition and possessive: 'study for a master's degree'. 'Move up on my career ladder' is unidiomatic — use 'move up my career ladder' or 'move up the career ladder'. Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause'. 'Be a head teacher in my school' better as 'at my school'. Suggestion: use formal forms in test responses and correct prepositions and possessive forms for degrees.