Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a direct topic sentence (I am a student), then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words if needed (for example, because, so).

예시: I am a student. I recently finished my senior secondary education in the medical stream, and I plan to study abroad for my higher education because I want access to better research facilities.

제안: Answer directly and clarify the misunderstanding: briefly restate that you do not work and give a clear, specific detail about your current status. Keep it short and natural, one or two sentences.

예시: I don't work at the moment; I am a student. I just completed my senior secondary education in the medical stream and I am preparing to apply to universities abroad.

제안: Respond to the question while correcting the premise politely: say you are not working and then, if possible, comment hypothetically about the place (if you know it) or explain you have no experience. Provide one clear sentence plus one supporting detail if necessary.

예시: I am actually a student, so I haven't worked there. Therefore I can't say whether it's a good place to work, but from what I've heard the institution has a supportive environment.

제안: Give a direct response that corrects the assumption and then add a concise reason. Use correct grammar and a linking phrase such as 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: I don't work there, so I can't judge whether I would like it. If I had to choose, I would prefer a place with flexible hours and good mentorship because I will be studying at the same time.

제안: Good direct answer. Improve by adding one specific detail about the type of part-time job or why you want it, using a linking word to expand briefly. Keep to two sentences maximum.

예시: I plan to get a part-time job when I go abroad for further studies, ideally in a healthcare setting such as a clinic or research assistant role. This would help me gain practical experience and support my living expenses while studying.

× Actually, I am a student and I recently completed my senior secondary in the medical stream.

✓ Actually, I am a student and I recently completed my senior secondary studies in the medical stream.

The original sentence uses 'senior secondary' as a noun phrase but it's more natural to say 'senior secondary studies' or 'senior secondary education'. Adding 'studies' clarifies the noun and corrects the adjective-noun usage. Suggestion: use complete noun phrases (e.g., 'senior secondary studies' or 'senior secondary education').

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The original line contains an extraneous '>' character, which is not grammatical punctuation. Removing the character fixes the sentence structure. Suggestion: ensure only appropriate question punctuation is used.

× I earlier mentioned I am a student and I recently completed my Senior Center in the medical stream.

✓ I mentioned earlier that I am a student and I recently completed my senior secondary studies in the medical stream.

Problems: word order ('earlier mentioned' should be 'mentioned earlier'), missing complementizer 'that' for clarity, and 'Senior Center' is likely incorrect term for the qualification — use 'senior secondary studies' or 'senior secondary education'. Also avoid unnecessary capitalization. Suggestion: place adverb 'earlier' after the verb and use correct noun phrase for the qualification.

× Sorry, I'm a student.

✓ Sorry, I'm a student.

No grammatical correction needed. The sentence is correct as a short answer. Included here to acknowledge it matches the prompt context.

× I am a student and I have not experience about the work so I can't prefer this place is good for work or bad.

✓ I am a student and I have no experience of the work, so I can't say whether this place is good or bad for working.

Errors: 'have not experience' should be 'have no experience' (incorrect adjective/quantifier usage), 'experience about the work' should be 'experience of the work' or better 'experience working', and 'I can't prefer this place is good for work or bad' is ungrammatical—use 'I can't say whether this place is good or bad for working.' Suggestions: use 'no experience' for lack of experience, use 'say whether' to express inability to judge, and use 'for working' or 'for work' for purpose.

× I'm looking forward to a part time job when I go to abroad for my further studies.

✓ I'm looking forward to a part-time job when I go abroad for my further studies.

Errors: 'go to abroad' is incorrect preposition use — correct is 'go abroad' (no 'to'). 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as a noun modifier. The gerund 'looking forward to' is correct and should be followed by a noun phrase ('a part-time job'). Suggestion: remove 'to' after 'go' and hyphenate 'part-time'.