Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 在回答时要更自然、简洁并按顺序表达要点。避免重复和语法错误，时间信息应清晰（例如“I have worked for six years”）。开头用一句主题句直接回答问题，然后补充公司和职责的细节。注意冠词、动词时态和词序。

예시: I have been working for six years. Currently I’m a management accountant at Merck, a multinational pharmaceutical company, where I prepare and analyze financial statements.

제안: 回答应去掉填充词（uh），避免重复公司名称错误（Mark vs Merck），并用规范短句表达工作地点和主要职责。用连接词使句子更连贯，例如“and”或“where”。把“publish financial statements”改为更自然的短语如“prepare and publish”。

예시: I currently work at Merck, a multinational pharmaceutical company, where I am mainly responsible for preparing and publishing our financial statements.

제안: 可以在确认公司好之后给出具体例子支持观点，使用更准确的短语（e.g. “benefits and allowances are provided”）。避免泛泛而谈，举出一两项福利或工作环境的特点会更有说服力。句子保持简洁且使用连接词承接理由。

예시: Yes, definitely. The company offers generous benefits and allowances, such as health insurance and flexible working hours, so employees are generally very satisfied with the working environment.

제안: 回答要更完整并避免重复之前的内容。直接说你是否喜欢并给出具体原因，例如培训机会、职业发展。去掉断句‘It's very.’，改为完整描述感受。注意公司名拼写一致。

예시: Yes, I like it. Merck provides professional training and learning programs, which help me improve my skills and advance my career, so I feel motivated at work.

제안: 目标表述要更自然并更具体。用短语“study abroad”或“go abroad to study”并说明想学的具体技能或领域（例如 advanced accounting or financial management）。避免语法错误（a excellent -> an excellent, help my families -> help my family）。用逻辑连接词说明目的。

예시: In the next three years I plan to study abroad to gain advanced skills in financial management and auditing so that I can become an excellent professional and better support my family.

× I have worked for three, six years.

✓ I have worked for six years.

原句中的 "three, six years" 数字混淆，时态用现在完成时 (have worked) 表示从过去持续到现在的工作年限。应使用一个明确的数字 “six years”。建议：说出确切年数并使用正确的现在完成时表达持续时间。

× My most recent role is management accountant in Merck, which is a multinational pharmaceutical company I need to handle with financial statements with.

✓ My most recent role is management accountant at Merck, which is a multinational pharmaceutical company. I need to handle financial statements.

有两个问题：1) 公司通常用介词 at 而不是 in 来表示在某公司工作；2) 句尾的 "handle with financial statements with" 是错误搭配，正确说法为 "handle financial statements" 或 "deal with financial statements"。建议：使用固定搭配，例如 'work at [company]' 和 'handle financial statements'。

× Uh, currently, uh, my most recent role is at Mark, uh, which is uh, uh, multinational, uh, pharmaceutical company, uh, and there are several, uh, business factors in our company and mainly responsible for financial statement publish.

✓ Currently, my most recent role is at Merck, which is a multinational pharmaceutical company, and I am mainly responsible for publishing financial statements.

问题包括：1) 公司名拼写应统一（Merck）；2) 'business factors in our company' 用法模糊且不必要；3) 'mainly responsible for financial statement publish' 语序和词类错误，应为 'responsible for publishing financial statements' 或 'responsible for the publication of financial statements'。建议：使用主语 + be + responsible for + 动名词结构来表达职责。

× Yes, definitely. In my company there are several benefits and allowance which are provide for employees.

✓ Yes, definitely. In my company there are several benefits and allowances which are provided for employees.

错误点：1) allowance 应为复数 allowances 与 benefits 一致；2) 'which are provide' 动词形式错误，应为被动过去分词 'provided'。建议：名词与谓语保持数的一致，使用正确的被动语态 'are provided'。

× We are very happy to work in the current environment.

✓ We are very happy working in the current environment.

原句用法可理解但更自然的表达是用现在分词 'working' 表示在该环境下工作的状态。另外也可保留原句但 'happy to work' 常用于表示愿意做某事，'happy working' 强调正在进行的工作状态。建议根据想表达的含义选择 'happy working' 或 'happy to work'。

× Yes, definitely. Uh, in Mark there are several benefits which are provided to employees and also equipped with professional, uh, training and learning classes. It's very.

✓ Yes, definitely. At Merck there are several benefits provided to employees, and we also have professional training and learning classes.

问题包括：1) 公司前应使用介词 at 而不是 in；2) 'equipped with ... classes' 结构不恰当，通常说 'we have ... classes' 或 'the company offers ... classes'；3) 句尾 'It's very.' 不完整，应补充形容词如 'It's very good.'。建议：使用 'the company offers' 或 'we have' 来描述提供的培训，并补全句子。

× In the next three years, I plan to go abroad to study more professional skills on my current career.

✓ In the next three years, I plan to go abroad to study more professional skills related to my current career.

错误点：'study more professional skills on my current career' 介词用法不当，应使用 'related to' 或 'in' 表示与职业相关的技能。建议：使用固定搭配 'skills related to [career]' 或 'skills for my current career'。

× I would like to be a excellent person who can help my families.

✓ I would like to be an excellent person who can help my family.

问题有：1) 冠词使用错误，'a' 前接以元音音素开头的单词 'excellent' 应用 'an'；2) 'families' 用法不当，若指自己的家人应为不可数集体名词 'family' 或 'my family members'。建议：使用 'an excellent person' 和 'my family' 来表达帮助家人的意愿。