Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good direct response and relevant detail. Improve naturalness and grammar: use articles and prepositions correctly, shorten redundancy, and avoid capitalization errors. Also combine ideas into one coherent sentence and keep within 3–4 sentences max.

예시: I am currently a student at Kazan University, studying at the Faculty of Pharmacy. I enjoy my courses because they give me a solid foundation in pharmaceutical sciences and practical lab skills.

제안: Answer is relevant but a bit wordy and contains grammar mistakes (articles, plural agreement) and informal phrasing. Be concise: acknowledge not working, state reason for seeking part-time work, and give one or two specific examples of what you need the money for. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I don't currently work, but I am looking for a part-time job because my scholarship doesn't cover all my expenses. For example, I need extra money to pay for books and to cover social activities with friends.

제안: Too brief. Even if you don't work, expand your answer by imagining or referring to the kinds of workplaces you'd consider good, and give reasons. Use linking words to make it coherent.

예시: I don't have a workplace now, but I think a good place to work would be one with supportive supervisors and flexible hours, because that would help me balance work with my studies.

제안: Reply repeats information and is redundant. Instead, briefly state you don't work and then say what you would like in a workplace if you did. Keep sentences varied and avoid repeating the same phrase.

예시: I don't have a workplace at the moment because I'm focusing on my studies, but if I worked I would prefer a job with flexible hours and opportunities to learn new skills.

제안: Clear ambition and enthusiasm, which is good. Improve formality (avoid "wanna" and fillers like "uh"), correct tense and collocations ("dedicated my life to it"), and vary vocabulary. Add a specific step or plan to make it concrete.

예시: I hope to build a career in chemistry and become a research scientist. To achieve this, I plan to complete my pharmacy degree, gain lab experience through internships, and then pursue a postgraduate degree in chemical research.

× Currently I'm a student, I study in University of Kazan at the Faculty of Pharmacy.

✓ Currently I'm a student; I study at the University of Kazan in the Faculty of Pharmacy.

The original sentence runs two independent clauses with a comma splice and misuses prepositions. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses and use 'at the University' and 'in the Faculty' for correct prepositions. Also add the definite article 'the' before University of Kazan. Suggestion: separate clauses or use a conjunction, and use 'at' + institution and 'in' + faculty.

× I'm a student, I don't work but I am looking for part time job because scholarship does not cover everyone needs.

✓ I'm a student; I don't work, but I am looking for a part-time job because my scholarship does not cover everyone's needs.

This sentence has a comma splice and several article and possessive errors. Use a semicolon or period between independent clauses, insert the article 'a' before 'part-time job', hyphenate 'part-time', use the possessive 'my scholarship', and 'everyone's needs' requires the possessive form. Also add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: correct punctuation, add articles, possessive forms, and hyphenate compound adjective.

× So I really need extra money for entertainment and hanging out with my friends.

✓ So I really need extra money for entertainment and for hanging out with my friends.

The phrase 'hanging out with my friends' is fine but parallellism is improved by including 'for' before both nouns: 'for entertainment and for hanging out.' This keeps the prepositional structure parallel. Alternatively, 'for entertainment and to hang out with my friends.' Suggestion: maintain parallel structure for coordinated prepositional phrases.

× I don't have place where I work because I'm studying at the university.

✓ I don't have a place where I work because I'm studying at the university.

Missing article 'a' before 'place' makes the noun phrase ungrammatical. Add 'a' to form 'a place.' The rest is acceptable. Suggestion: include indefinite article with singular countable nouns.

× I don't have time for job.

✓ I don't have time for a job.

Countable noun 'job' requires an article. Use 'a job' when speaking generally. Alternatively, 'work' (uncountable) could be used without an article: 'I don't have time for work.' Suggestion: use correct article or use uncountable noun form.

× I would love to build a proper career in the field of chemistry.

✓ I would love to build a proper career in the field of chemistry.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Would love to' properly expresses desire. No correction needed. Suggestion: none.

× I wanna be a scientist so badly because, uh, I think I was born for it and I really dedicated my life into it.

✓ I want to be a scientist so badly because I think I was born for it and I have really dedicated my life to it.

'wanna' is informal; use 'want to' in formal speech. 'Dedicated' requires the present perfect 'have dedicated' if referring to an action up to now. The correct preposition after 'dedicate' is 'to,' not 'into.' Also remove filler 'uh' in formal answers. Suggestion: use 'want to', use present perfect for actions continuing to present, and use 'dedicate to'. Replace 'so badly' with 'very much' for formality if desired.

× I really dedicated my life into it.

✓ I have really dedicated my life to it.

Using simple past 'dedicated' suggests a completed action in the past; since the dedication continues into the present, present perfect 'have dedicated' is more appropriate. The preposition should be 'to' not 'into.' Suggestion: use present perfect for ongoing relevance and correct preposition.