Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but a bit long and has minor grammatical issues. Make the response more concise, correct tense and add a linking phrase if you expand. For example, say one direct sentence about current status and one short supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so").

예시: I'm a recent high-school graduate preparing to start university. Because I want to study dentistry, I'm spending this time getting ready for my course and entrance requirements.

제안: Good direct answer and useful extra detail. Improve by using a slightly more natural contraction/structure and a linking word to connect ideas; avoid comma splice. Keep it to two sentences at most.

예시: I don't work at the moment because I'm focusing on my studies and preparing to enter university. I hope to start my degree next year.

제안: The response repeats previous information instead of addressing the question. Even if you don't work, briefly imagine or comment on what would make a good workplace to show ability to respond. Use a topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking phrase.

예시: I don't have a workplace now, but I think a good place to work is supportive and well-organized. For example, clear schedules and helpful colleagues make it easier to learn and progress.

제안: This repeats facts and doesn't answer the hypothetical part of the question. Instead, state whether you would like the kind of workplace you described and give a brief reason. Use a linking word to connect your preference and reason.

예시: Although I don't work, I would like to work in a friendly clinic because a positive atmosphere helps me feel comfortable and learn from experienced staff.

제안: Strong and relevant answer with clear goal and motivation. Improve by tightening the sentence and adding a specific detail about what kind of dentist or whom you want to help to make it more specific and natural.

예시: I plan to study dentistry at university and eventually become a general dentist. I'd like to work in a community clinic helping children and low-income families maintain good oral health.

× I am a student who just graduated from high school and waiting to go into university.

✓ I am a student who just graduated from high school and am waiting to go to university.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' before 'waiting' causes incorrect present continuous form; use 'am waiting' to match subject and tense. Also use 'go to university' for standard collocation.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The original has an extra character '>' which is punctuation error; remove it. The question is simple present and correct otherwise.

× At this moment I do not work, I'm focusing on my studies and planning to enter university soon.

✓ At the moment I do not work; I'm focusing on my studies and planning to enter university soon.

Use 'At the moment' rather than 'At this moment' for naturalness; replace comma with semicolon to separate independent clauses. Tenses are fine but punctuation improves clarity.

× As I mentioned before, I do not have a job currently, I'm a student.

✓ As I mentioned before, I do not have a job currently; I'm a student.

Two independent clauses joined with a comma create a comma splice. Use a semicolon or period. Tenses are consistent.

× I'm a full time student. I do not have a job.

✓ I'm a full-time student. I do not have a job.

Compound adjective 'full-time' requires a hyphen when used before a noun. Grammar and tense are otherwise correct.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you work?

This question is ambiguous in context because the student does not work. Grammatically it is correct; no change needed. Clarify by asking 'Would you like the place where you would work?' if referring to a hypothetical job.

× In university I'm planning to study dentistry, so for my future work plans I hope to become a dentist and help people.

✓ At university I'm planning to study dentistry, so for my future career I hope to become a dentist and help people.

Use 'At university' (common collocation) instead of 'In university'. 'Future career' is more natural than 'future work plans'. Comma splice should be avoided; replace comma with semicolon or keep as two clauses with appropriate conjunction. Tenses are consistent (present continuous for planned study, simple present 'hope' acceptable).