Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words to add one or two specific details (e.g., types of events or typical clients).

예시: I work as a sales account executive at a hotel in Cebu. I mainly meet clients and prepare proposals for corporate events and weddings, so I speak with clients every day.

제안: Organize information logically and correct grammar. Begin with the location and job, then add one or two relevant details (rebranding and responsibilities) using linking words. Avoid repeated or unclear phrases.

예시: I work at the Mercure hotel in Mactan, which is located inside Mactan Township. It was rebranded under Accor last December, and as a sales account executive I handle customer accounts and event bookings every day.

제안: Answer directly and support with specific reasons using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., 'days off', 'work–life balance') and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). You can mention one example of long hours or lack of days off.

예시: At the moment I don't think it's a good place to work because I regularly work very long shifts and rarely get proper days off. As a result I feel burnt out, so I'm planning to resign and find a role with a better work–life balance.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and provide one or two specific, polite reasons. Use linking words for clarity and correct phrasing (e.g., 'most of my colleagues', 'have already resigned'). Avoid overly negative or informal language like 'toxic' without brief explanation.

예시: No, I don't like the place at the moment. Most of my colleagues are unhappy and three teammates have already resigned, which has made the working environment tense and difficult.

제안: Give a clear plan with specifics and improve grammar. Begin with one sentence about current plans, then add a supporting detail about job applications or desired role using linking words. Avoid repetition.

예시: Right now I'm doing a work-from-home role that complements my hotel sales experience. I'm also applying for several remote and hybrid positions related to sales and event management, and I hope employers will value my skills and hire me.

× I usually do meeting clients, making a proposals, doing detailing for their events.

✓ I usually meet clients, make proposals, and prepare detailed plans for their events.

The original uses incorrect verb forms after 'do' and inconsistent gerunds. 'Do meeting clients' should be 'meet clients' (base verb). 'making a proposals' has incorrect article and form; use 'make proposals'. 'doing detailing' is awkward; 'prepare detailed plans' is clearer. Use parallel base verbs for a list.

× I work in Mercure, Mactan subu.

✓ I work at Mercure Mactan Subu.

Use 'at' for workplaces or named places. Capitalization and proper name formatting help clarity: 'Mercure Mactan Subu'.

× It is located inside Mactanue town Township.

✓ It is located in Mactanue Town Township.

Use 'in' for locations within towns. Capitalize proper nouns and remove redundant words; 'Town' and 'Township' capitalization is standard for names.

× It was rebranded last December 15, 2025.

✓ It was rebranded on December 15, 2025.

Use the preposition 'on' with specific dates in the past and past tense 'was rebranded' is correct; only preposition needed.

× So I am working as a sales account executive.

✓ So I work as a sales account executive.

Present simple ('I work') is more natural for a current job role; 'am working' suggests temporary. Both can be correct, but context prefers habitual present. No preposition issue but adjusted tense for clarity.

× I am I handled customers everyday.

✓ I handle customers every day.

The original has extraneous 'I' and incorrect past verb 'handled'. Use present simple 'handle' for current responsibility and separate 'every day' as two words.

× I'm feeling quite burnt out so I'm planning to resign soon and look for a job with with better work life balance.

✓ I'm feeling quite burnt out, so I'm planning to resign soon and look for a job with a better work-life balance.

Add comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Remove duplicate 'with'. Use article 'a' before 'better work-life balance' and hyphenate 'work-life'.

× No majority of the people there are toxic.

✓ No, the majority of the people there are toxic.

Original misses punctuation and article. Use 'No,' as a response and 'the majority' to indicate most people; include comma for clarity.

× I have 3 workmates who tendered already their resignation so it's that I don't really like the place I'm currently working with.

✓ Three of my coworkers have already tendered their resignations, so I don't really like the place where I currently work.

Use 'Three of my coworkers' for natural phrasing and spell out numbers in formal responses. 'Have already tendered' uses present perfect for recent past with present relevance. 'Their resignations' (plural) matches multiple people. Replace 'it's that I don't really like' with 'so I don't really like' and 'the place where I currently work' is the correct prepositional structure.

× Currently I am working for a work from home job that is aligned with my current job.

✓ Currently I am working in a work-from-home role that is aligned with my current job.

Use 'working in a work-from-home role' and hyphenate 'work-from-home'. 'Role' fits better than 'job' repetition.

× I saw a lot of posting of hiring that is related to my job and I'm hoping that they will choose me.

✓ I saw a lot of job postings related to my field, and I'm hoping they will choose me.

Use 'job postings' instead of 'posting of hiring' and 'related to my field' is more natural. Remove unnecessary 'that is'.

× They will choose my my skills.

✓ They will choose me for my skills.

Remove duplicated 'my'. Use structure 'choose me for my skills' to indicate the reason for selection.