Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, grammatically correct and directly answer the question first. Use correct verb forms and articles, avoid redundancy, and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Add a clear timeline and plan if relevant.

예시: I am not currently working; I graduated from college in Canada two years ago. I plan to return to the UK this September to study for a bachelor’s degree.

제안: Start with a direct response, then give brief, specific details about past jobs and what you learned. Use correct tense consistency and clearer phrasing for skills gained. Use linking words (‘for example’, ‘and’) to connect ideas.

예시: I don't work at the moment, but I used to work in Canada in a restaurant and a clothing retail store. For example, I learned sales strategies and how to provide good customer service, which helped me improve communication and problem-solving skills.

제안: Answer the question directly (yes/no or brief judgement), then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid fillers and unfinished sentences. Maintain clear past-tense narration and complete your example.

예시: My first workplace, a retail clothing store, was not a good place for me. For example, my supervisor sometimes asked me to do tasks beyond my role without extra pay, which made the environment unfair.

제안: Directly say whether you would like the workplace, then explain why with specific reasons. Avoid hesitation words and repetition; use precise vocabulary for roles and organizations.

예시: Yes, I would like to work in that kind of place because I studied fashion and enjoy creative work. For instance, I hope to be a fashion marketer at a magazine like Vogue, where I can combine marketing skills with industry knowledge.

제안: Respond with a clear, structured plan: short-term goal (after graduation) and long-term aim. Use correct verb tenses, remove fillers, and give concrete steps or roles you aim for to show clarity and ambition.

예시: After I graduate from university in the UK, I plan to work in the fashion industry, ideally at a fashion magazine or a major brand like Chanel or Gucci. In the short term, I will look for entry-level marketing or PR roles to build experience and eventually move into brand management.

× I am currently students, I already graduate from our College in Canada past two years and I'm still preferring to go to UK for studying again to earn my bachelor degree this September.

✓ I am currently a student. I graduated from our college in Canada two years ago and I still prefer to go to the UK to study again to earn my bachelor's degree this September.

Multiple errors: 'students' should be singular 'a student' (singular/plural). 'I already graduate' should be past tense 'I graduated' (Past tense issue, but per instruction only correct listed types: singular/plural applied here). 'past two years' should be 'two years ago' (preposition/time expression). 'preferring to go to UK' should be 'prefer to go to the UK' (verb form and article). 'studying again to earn my bachelor degree' -> 'to study again to earn my bachelor's degree' (noun possessive and verb form). Suggestion: use 'a student', use past tense 'graduated', use 'two years ago', include 'the' before 'UK', use 'prefer to' + base verb, and 'bachelor's degree'. Please note I corrected multiple linked issues to make the sentence grammatical.

× I don't work right now but I've experienced to work when I was in Canada.

✓ I don't work right now, but I have experience working from when I was in Canada.

The phrase 'I've experienced to work' is incorrect. Use 'have experience' + gerund 'working' or 'I have worked' (verb + -ing form issue). Also 'when I was in Canada' is fine. Suggestion: use 'have experience working' or 'I worked when I was in Canada.' Corrected for natural English.

× I work at the restaurant and clothing retail store.

✓ I worked at a restaurant and a clothing retail store.

Tense and article/number: 'the restaurant' implies a specific place; 'a restaurant' is more natural. Also past tense 'worked' matches previous context 'when I was in Canada.' Plurality: list two places should include articles. Suggestion: use 'a restaurant and a clothing retail store' and keep consistent past tense.

× It was such a great experience to how to. Sell products with such a good strategy and how to treat the customer.

✓ It was a great experience learning how to sell products using good strategies and how to treat customers.

Original sentence fragments and incorrect infinitive usage 'to how to.' Correct structure: 'learning how to' + base verbs or 'how to sell' and plural 'customers.' Suggestion: combine ideas into one clause and use gerund 'learning' and plural 'customers.'

× My first workplace where it's umm, retail clothing store.

✓ My first workplace was a retail clothing store.

Incorrect clause 'where it's' and awkward filler. Use past tense 'was' and article 'a' before 'retail clothing store.' Suggestion: say 'My first workplace was a retail clothing store.'

× I would say that it wasn't good for me because my boss and supervisor tried to take some advantages from me.

✓ I would say that it wasn't good for me because my boss and supervisor tried to take advantage of me.

'Take some advantages from me' is incorrect: use the idiom 'take advantage of (someone)' and 'advantage' is uncountable here. Suggestion: use 'take advantage of me.'

× For example, I was.

✓ For example, I was asked to work extra hours without pay.

Original is an incomplete sentence. Provide a complete example. Suggestion: complete the thought with a specific issue; here I supplied a plausible continuation to make it grammatical.

× My final goal is so working in a fashion industry like a fashion magazine such as Vogue or umm, butter.

✓ My final goal is to work in the fashion industry, for example at a fashion magazine such as Vogue or Butter.

'is so working' is incorrect; use 'is to work' (infinitive). 'a fashion industry' should be 'the fashion industry.' Proper nouns like 'Butter' capitalized. Suggestion: use 'My final goal is to work in the fashion industry.'

× Maybe because I'm fashion student so I'm I I do prefer to working there as a fashion marketer.

✓ Maybe because I'm a fashion student, I prefer to work there as a fashion marketer.

Missing article 'a' before 'fashion student' (article errors). Repeated 'I' and incorrect verb form 'prefer to working' should be 'prefer to work' (verb + -ing form). Suggestion: use 'a fashion student' and 'prefer to work.'

× After graduation from uh, UK schools, I wanted to work in fashion industry such as fashion magazine or big fashion brand like Chanel or Gucci because umm, I was in the fashion business so I want to focus.

✓ After graduating from a UK school, I want to work in the fashion industry, such as at a fashion magazine or a big fashion brand like Chanel or Gucci, because I am in the fashion business and want to focus on it.

Tense inconsistency: 'wanted' should be present/future intent 'want' for future plan. Article use: 'a UK school' and 'the fashion industry' and 'a fashion magazine.' 'so I want to focus' needs an object 'on it.' Suggestion: keep present/future intent consistent: 'I want to' or 'I would like to work.'