Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be slightly more concise and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "for example" or "also") but avoid repeating similar points. Keep under five sentences.

예시: I'm an English teacher for young learners and have been teaching for nearly six years. I focus on vocabulary and basic communication skills; for example, I teach phonics to help children read picture books. I also use simple games and songs to reinforce new words.

제안: Start with a single clear topic sentence naming your workplace, then add one concise supporting detail about the school's focus and your class levels. Use a linking phrase like "specifically" to connect details and avoid repetitive sentences about origin unless relevant.

예시: I work for an educational chain called Any Kids, a language school that originated in China. Specifically, it specializes in teaching English to young learners, and I teach starter-level classes for children aged three to ten.

제안: Be careful with redundancy and grammar (e.g., "the work-life balance" rather than "and the work life balance"). Combine similar ideas into one or two sentences and use linking words like "furthermore" or "also". Avoid listing too many general positives without brief specifics or examples.

예시: Yes, it's an excellent place to work because the environment is supportive and collaborative, which helps productivity. Furthermore, the company offers good benefits and strong professional development opportunities, and the modern facilities and technology make teaching more efficient.

제안: Use clearer sentence boundaries and linking words to avoid run-on sentences. Start with a topic sentence (I enjoy working there) then add one specific reason and one brief example. Check grammar and punctuation (split long sentences).

예시: Yes, I love working there because the office is quiet and the team is very supportive, which lets me concentrate on lesson planning. I also enjoy interacting with the children; their innocence and enthusiasm often lift my spirits and make my job very rewarding.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about your plan, then briefly list two concrete preparation steps using linking words such as "for example" or "currently". Correct small grammar points ("a suitable location" or "a location near a school"). Keep concise and specific.

예시: I plan to open my own educational studio offering small-group English and study-skills lessons. Currently, I am designing lesson plans and searching for a suitable location near a school, and I hope to open by next semester.

× I'm currently working as an English teacher for young learners, and I've been teaching for nearly six years.

✓ I'm currently working as an English teacher for young learners, and I have taught for nearly six years.

The student used present perfect continuous ('I've been teaching') which is not wrong, but to match the overall present state and duration without implying continuous action right now, present perfect simple ('have taught') is clearer. Suggestion: use 'have taught' to emphasize experience up to now, or keep 'have been teaching' if emphasizing ongoing continuous activity.

× I also help students to read picture books using phonics, for instance.

✓ I also help students read picture books using phonics, for instance.

The verb 'help' is typically followed by the bare infinitive (help someone do something) rather than 'to' in informal and neutral English. Suggestion: remove 'to' after 'help'.

× I work for an educational chain called Any Kids.

✓ I work for an educational chain called Any Kids.

No change needed; sentence is correct. Included here to indicate no article error.

× It specializes in teaching English to young learners and I teach starter level classes for children aged 3 to 10.

✓ It specializes in teaching English to young learners, and I teach starter-level classes for children aged 3 to 10.

Add a hyphen in 'starter-level' to form a compound adjective before 'classes'. Also add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: use hyphenated compound adjectives and proper punctuation.

× The work environment is very supportive and collaborative, which makes it easy to get things done.

✓ The work environment is very supportive and collaborative, which makes it easy to get things done.

Sentence is correct; no article error. Included to confirm correctness.

× There are ample opportunities and professional growth and development, and the company offers good benefits and the work life balance.

✓ There are ample opportunities for professional growth and development, and the company offers good benefits and a good work-life balance.

Use 'opportunities for' to link opportunities with what they are for. 'Work life balance' should be hyphenated as 'work-life balance' and needs an article or adjective: 'a good work-life balance.' Suggestion: use correct preposition, hyphenate compound noun, and supply article/adjective.

× Additionally, the modern facilities and technology make work much easier.

✓ Additionally, the modern facilities and technology make the work much easier.

Adding 'the' before 'work' makes the reference to the job's tasks more specific. Suggestion: use 'the work' when referring to the specific work environment or duties.

× Yes, I love the place I work because the office is quiet and the team is supportive, so this lets me concentrate on preparing lessons and I really enjoy interacting with children, their innocence and enthusiasm often to lift my spirits and make my job very rewarding.

✓ Yes, I love the place I work because the office is quiet and the team is supportive, which lets me concentrate on preparing lessons. I really enjoy interacting with children; their innocence and enthusiasm often lift my spirits and make my job very rewarding.

Original sentence is a run-on with punctuation and clause issues. Replace 'so this lets' with 'which lets' to connect clauses properly, split into two sentences, and correct verb agreement 'often lift' (children plural). Suggestion: break long sentences into shorter ones, use relative pronouns, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Well, I plan to open my own educational studio to offer small group English and study skills lessons.

✓ Well, I plan to open my own educational studio to offer small-group English and study skills lessons.

Hyphenate 'small-group' as a compound adjective before the noun. Sentence tense is appropriate. Suggestion: use hyphens for compound adjectives.

× Actually, I have been preparing for several months.

✓ Actually, I have been preparing for several months.

Sentence is grammatically correct; it correctly uses present perfect continuous to indicate ongoing preparation. Included to confirm correctness.

× For example, I'm designing lesson plans and looking for suitable location near school.

✓ For example, I'm designing lesson plans and looking for a suitable location near the school.

Use the article 'a' with 'suitable location' and 'the school' or 'a school' depending on specificity; 'near school' requires 'the school' in this context. Suggestion: include articles to make noun phrases grammatically complete.

× I hope to start next semester.

✓ I hope to start next semester.

Sentence is correct; future intention expressed with 'hope to' is appropriate. Included to confirm correctness.